Do You Love Me?
Double edged Acrostic30 total reviews
Comment from Soulester
Helvi, you continue to delight with your creatively presented poems. This one is striking. This is cleverly done. Great job! Mary
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Helvi, you continue to delight with your creatively presented poems. This one is striking. This is cleverly done. Great job! Mary
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Hi Mary, Thank you so much my friend. AS long as readers enjoy what I do I'll keep doing it. Thank you for the wonderful compliment. Hugs and Smiles, Helvi :o)
Comment from adewpearl
I have never attempted a double acrostic - geez that has to take a lot of time and planning! The only thing I have a bit of trouble with is the formatting - I find the long elipses a bit distracting - what is your strategy behind using them and making them so long?
Other than that minor concern, this acrostic is cleverly constructed and longingly romantic in tone. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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I have never attempted a double acrostic - geez that has to take a lot of time and planning! The only thing I have a bit of trouble with is the formatting - I find the long elipses a bit distracting - what is your strategy behind using them and making them so long?
Other than that minor concern, this acrostic is cleverly constructed and longingly romantic in tone. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Hi Brook, I was trying to realign the right side of the poem so you could read it downward. The lines in the poem are not the same length so this was the only way I could place the letters on the right side in a straight vertical row. I can get rid of the elipses, but the last word in each line would still be way over on the right. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. If you have any suggestions I would love to hear them. :o) I don't know what else to do? Thanks for the great review. Helvi :o)
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I am a total formatting/computer failure - you need someone who's good at that stuff - names are not jumping to mind, but I'm sure there are plenty of people more qualified than I am.
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Thanks for trying to help anyway. I appreciate your wanting too. Maybe I can lighten them a little so the effect isn't so strong. I'll see what I can do.
Blessings,
Helvi :o)
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I got an idea - post the question in the general category of the forums, under commentary - I bet someone will jump to your aid there
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Thanks,I Might try that
Comment from Judian James
Oh, I did that once with a piece about Secrets!! I'm impressed because I remember what a challenge it was!! Well done, as always Helvi
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Oh, I did that once with a piece about Secrets!! I'm impressed because I remember what a challenge it was!! Well done, as always Helvi
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
Comment from Mrs Jones
Hi Helvi old friend.
Do you love me? The words I love you are so easy to speak for some. I guess we would have to feel it to really know.
Nice work
Cheers
Rose
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Hi Helvi old friend.
Do you love me? The words I love you are so easy to speak for some. I guess we would have to feel it to really know.
Nice work
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Great job!
So, I had to give you a 6 star.
Doing a one sided acrostic is hard, I know, I've done a few, but I've never tried a double sided one. That's so cool.
Now, I'll have to try it, see if I can do it.
I like the image, it goes perfectly with your piece and how you presented the whole poem visually.
I like the title.
Hard to pick a favorite part, since I like the whole thing.
I like the do-si-do part, I thought that was great, and the rev part.
Great job.
Kathryn
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Great job!
So, I had to give you a 6 star.
Doing a one sided acrostic is hard, I know, I've done a few, but I've never tried a double sided one. That's so cool.
Now, I'll have to try it, see if I can do it.
I like the image, it goes perfectly with your piece and how you presented the whole poem visually.
I like the title.
Hard to pick a favorite part, since I like the whole thing.
I like the do-si-do part, I thought that was great, and the rev part.
Great job.
Kathryn
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
Comment from wierdgrace
This is so romantic, and perfect for the coming up valentine days, this was fun to read, and found no errors of course, thank you for sharing and good luck.
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This is so romantic, and perfect for the coming up valentine days, this was fun to read, and found no errors of course, thank you for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
Comment from Connie P
Very skillfully written. The message is strong, either love me in a demonstrative way, or leave me to find love. It is truly a strong, beautiful work.
Connie
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Very skillfully written. The message is strong, either love me in a demonstrative way, or leave me to find love. It is truly a strong, beautiful work.
Connie
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
Comment from koyoga
This is such a creative idea and so well written!
I like this concept very much of left/right acrostic.
Your poem itself is also very nicely done with great
flow and rhythm.
Truly creative!
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This is such a creative idea and so well written!
I like this concept very much of left/right acrostic.
Your poem itself is also very nicely done with great
flow and rhythm.
Truly creative!
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
Comment from patmedium
Very, very clever. This wee gem is both impressive and beautiful. What's more, I found it on the front page! Congratulations. Pat.
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Very, very clever. This wee gem is both impressive and beautiful. What's more, I found it on the front page! Congratulations. Pat.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
Comment from G.B. Smith
OK Now my love you have totally won my heart. This is absolutely superb. I love the format, and the layout is amazing.
WTG Nancy
Bear
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OK Now my love you have totally won my heart. This is absolutely superb. I love the format, and the layout is amazing.
WTG Nancy
Bear
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
