Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Chapter Eight, part 1"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from Arkine
See, this is why I just like the two piece flannels that are comfortable and you can lounge around the house in without worrying about .... offending anyone. ~L~ Nice chapter, didn't see any nits. :)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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See, this is why I just like the two piece flannels that are comfortable and you can lounge around the house in without worrying about .... offending anyone. ~L~ Nice chapter, didn't see any nits. :)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review. I raised boys, and I understand what you are saying. Thank you for your review.
Comment from hletto2
I enjoyed this read. Although I hadn't read the prior chapters, I felt I was able to come in and not feel lost. Of course, now I have the desire to go back and start from the beginning!
The structure and dialog are great. Again...leads for easy understandability (<--- is that a word??)
God bless you and your family. Thanks for the great read. :)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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I enjoyed this read. Although I hadn't read the prior chapters, I felt I was able to come in and not feel lost. Of course, now I have the desire to go back and start from the beginning!
The structure and dialog are great. Again...leads for easy understandability (<--- is that a word??)
God bless you and your family. Thanks for the great read. :)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2010
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I always use words I am not sure are really words but seem to fit the situation. I completely understand. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from chaswriter
Barbara - Another interesting chapter with strong characters, descriptive narrative and good dialogue. And you left us hanging with a good hook into the next chapter. Well done.
Charlie
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Barbara - Another interesting chapter with strong characters, descriptive narrative and good dialogue. And you left us hanging with a good hook into the next chapter. Well done.
Charlie
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review. I apprecaite your continued support.
Comment from rhymer1
Well, I guess I've read about all the chapters I will read in your book. Your narrative and prose, as I keep writing, are excellent but the genre does not captivate me so when more chapters pop up I will not pop in :<) Good luck completing it. Slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Well, I guess I've read about all the chapters I will read in your book. Your narrative and prose, as I keep writing, are excellent but the genre does not captivate me so when more chapters pop up I will not pop in :<) Good luck completing it. Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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I am sorry my manuscript doesn't interest you. Thank you for stopping by.
Comment from MizKat
Barbara - Although this is the first chapter of your book that I've read, I can tell you're a great story teller. This really interested me.
I found one small mistake - Early the following morning Steven was awakenED - Kat
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Barbara - Although this is the first chapter of your book that I've read, I can tell you're a great story teller. This really interested me.
I found one small mistake - Early the following morning Steven was awakenED - Kat
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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I will take care of that immediately. I hate mistakes.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from anabelle
Good chapter. It remains to be seen if Peggy will do a decent job of protecting someone she doesn't like. My guess is no. Mind you, the rest of the team will probably just do her job for her.
Thanks for the entertainment.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Good chapter. It remains to be seen if Peggy will do a decent job of protecting someone she doesn't like. My guess is no. Mind you, the rest of the team will probably just do her job for her.
Thanks for the entertainment.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi barb, i don't blame Peggy when all the men's attention are on Leya. On a personal note, I think you need to put some strength into Leya's character. She seems to be quite weak.
She didn't sleep well last night[.]"
After she watched Steven click the switch, she said,
- She watched Steven click off the switch and said
- After Steven switched off the light, she said,
He glanced at Matt and teased, - He sent Matt a teasing glance.
Matt's concern was heard in his voice. - Matt spoke with concern.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Hi barb, i don't blame Peggy when all the men's attention are on Leya. On a personal note, I think you need to put some strength into Leya's character. She seems to be quite weak.
She didn't sleep well last night[.]"
After she watched Steven click the switch, she said,
- She watched Steven click off the switch and said
- After Steven switched off the light, she said,
He glanced at Matt and teased, - He sent Matt a teasing glance.
Matt's concern was heard in his voice. - Matt spoke with concern.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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I will get to those corrections. Leya's strength is coming up. She will show great strength before long. Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Well, Peggy's done herself in, I think.
Got a chuckle here: "I'm in and have your kitten covered, but you should name him." :)
suggestion: He sighed, before /said>saying/, "OK, but I'm going against my better judgment."
Good job!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Well, Peggy's done herself in, I think.
Got a chuckle here: "I'm in and have your kitten covered, but you should name him." :)
suggestion: He sighed, before /said>saying/, "OK, but I'm going against my better judgment."
Good job!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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I will take care of the said/saying issue. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Rama Rao
Excellent.
The story is progressing well and holding our interest right through the end. I wish you post a few more paragraphs every time, as it leaves us in a suspense.
"One of those things we do for a pretty face."
I didn't understand this as he was speaking of Leya's kitten.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Excellent.
The story is progressing well and holding our interest right through the end. I wish you post a few more paragraphs every time, as it leaves us in a suspense.
"One of those things we do for a pretty face."
I didn't understand this as he was speaking of Leya's kitten.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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I will recheck it. He's talking about what men do for women with pretty faces. It's used often during my novels about the Task Force 385. Thank you for your review. I don't like posting long chapters because very few people read them. I post short chapters so I get more input on my writing. I also try to leave my readers wanting more, so they come back to get more.
Comment from lola29
Barbara, this was another good chapter. I feel so sorry for Steven; it seems he's always having to fight the competition. And, poor Leya--what a predicament.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Barbara, this was another good chapter. I feel so sorry for Steven; it seems he's always having to fight the competition. And, poor Leya--what a predicament.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
