Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Chapter Eight, part 1"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
56 total reviews
Comment from Queenise
Another good chapter,friend. It is rich and has so much depth. I am still loving to read and am enjoying it a lot. Keep up the good work. I understand about the paying job taking priority. Queenise
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2010
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Another good chapter,friend. It is rich and has so much depth. I am still loving to read and am enjoying it a lot. Keep up the good work. I understand about the paying job taking priority. Queenise
Comment Written 31-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your review.
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You're welcome,Barbara. Queenise
Comment from bohemiangeek
A great story, it kept my interest throughout. the chapter flowed easily and I like your characters. the dialog was realistic and with so many characters, I didn't get lost.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2010
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A great story, it kept my interest throughout. the chapter flowed easily and I like your characters. the dialog was realistic and with so many characters, I didn't get lost.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
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Your very welcome : )
Comment from mjfande
I really enjoyed reading through this. I was happy to see that everyone (except Peggy) threw their support behind Leya. Even though Steven has not-quite-so-professional thoughts for her, he keeps his cool and stays very professional in front of the rest of the team. Good story telling. I look forward to reading more of your posts.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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I really enjoyed reading through this. I was happy to see that everyone (except Peggy) threw their support behind Leya. Even though Steven has not-quite-so-professional thoughts for her, he keeps his cool and stays very professional in front of the rest of the team. Good story telling. I look forward to reading more of your posts.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from knowledge
Good job as always. Where do you find the time to earn your fandollars for posting? I hope you publish this.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Good job as always. Where do you find the time to earn your fandollars for posting? I hope you publish this.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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I earn my by fandollars for posting by reviewing only. I do no purchase any. That is why I can only post once a week. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Muagen
You have a very nice balance of dialogue and action. The only thing that concerns me is that you might be swimming in characters that might not get their chance to really shine as you continue. With a cast as large as you have here in the eighth chapter, will you be changing vantage constantly or leaving a large squadron of your platoon of cast members to be colorful extras?
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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You have a very nice balance of dialogue and action. The only thing that concerns me is that you might be swimming in characters that might not get their chance to really shine as you continue. With a cast as large as you have here in the eighth chapter, will you be changing vantage constantly or leaving a large squadron of your platoon of cast members to be colorful extras?
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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The extras are necessary to be realistic, as a team, but I try to keep them as a minimum. Thank you for your review.
Comment from minopavlic
Absolutely captivating,my interest never waivered.You are a talented and gifted writer.Your form of expressionalism is a fine toned craft.I can hardly wait for the next chapter. A recommended read
Warm regards
No_obstacle
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Absolutely captivating,my interest never waivered.You are a talented and gifted writer.Your form of expressionalism is a fine toned craft.I can hardly wait for the next chapter. A recommended read
Warm regards
No_obstacle
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
i am enjoying this book and can't wait to read more. i wish you luck in getting it published and will be looking for the ending so i can know how everything turns out
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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i am enjoying this book and can't wait to read more. i wish you luck in getting it published and will be looking for the ending so i can know how everything turns out
Comment Written 27-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Katiesherrill
Another good chapter. It must be hard for you not being able to post except on weekends. You have such good detail with your characters they are feeling so real to me now. I can imagine their faces and hear the tone of their voices. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Another good chapter. It must be hard for you not being able to post except on weekends. You have such good detail with your characters they are feeling so real to me now. I can imagine their faces and hear the tone of their voices. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Thank you for saying that. That's what I am striving for so I am gld it comes out.
Comment from RebelRose
That Peggy is so jealous and mean. I hope they send her far away. I know she is the one who is sending info to the cartel and making it look like Leya is doing it. I can't wait to see what comes next.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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That Peggy is so jealous and mean. I hope they send her far away. I know she is the one who is sending info to the cartel and making it look like Leya is doing it. I can't wait to see what comes next.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from Peeping_Soul
i am reading you work for the first time and i think the story is very interesting with some well defined characters.i guess i will go back and read the background to improve my grip.great write
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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i am reading you work for the first time and i think the story is very interesting with some well defined characters.i guess i will go back and read the background to improve my grip.great write
Comment Written 26-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
