The Outing
High expectations don't always work out54 total reviews
Comment from fluffnstuff
Hello my friend. Two things...and perhaps I'm wrong please let me know...First, I love the story. Your descriptions in detail are priceless! I think Absolute has an E at the end?? then you said he "squeezed in next to the HER"?? Thought you might like to make a slight adjustment? Nice to know youn are simply human...a great one....but human lol DiAnne
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Hello my friend. Two things...and perhaps I'm wrong please let me know...First, I love the story. Your descriptions in detail are priceless! I think Absolute has an E at the end?? then you said he "squeezed in next to the HER"?? Thought you might like to make a slight adjustment? Nice to know youn are simply human...a great one....but human lol DiAnne
Comment Written 11-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2019
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Thanks so much, my friend. :) Bob
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Bob,
Flash Fiction - Marvelous piece in all respects!
That's why CONTEST WINNER!! CONGRATULATIONS!!!
Too late, but it matters little. Its Beauty is Evergreen.
Theme, Presentation with lovely imagery having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end - SUPERB!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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Hello Bob,
Flash Fiction - Marvelous piece in all respects!
That's why CONTEST WINNER!! CONGRATULATIONS!!!
Too late, but it matters little. Its Beauty is Evergreen.
Theme, Presentation with lovely imagery having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end - SUPERB!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2019
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Thank you so much, my friend. Your review and comments mean a lot to me. :) Bob
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Bob, Most Welcome!
You really deserve it.
With best wishes,
~ RPS
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Thanks again, my friend. :) Bob
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Thanks again, my friend. :) Bob
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Bob, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Bob, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Bob, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
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: ) Bob
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: ) Bob
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Thanks again, my friend. :) Bob
Comment from Earl Corp
What a build up to a dud. Not your writing, the hero's. This was a great example of show not tell, i could picture every move. Bob Seger on the jukebox was a great touch. Its easy to see why this was a winner. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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What a build up to a dud. Not your writing, the hero's. This was a great example of show not tell, i could picture every move. Bob Seger on the jukebox was a great touch. Its easy to see why this was a winner. Very nice job.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2019
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Thanks a bunch, earl. :) Bob
Comment from JanetRussek
Oh, my goodness. You certainly know how to paint an amazing vivid picture. I think it's called talent, incredible talent. I love your brilliant character description. I'm sooo jealous. I always look forward to reading your work, friend.
Janet
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Oh, my goodness. You certainly know how to paint an amazing vivid picture. I think it's called talent, incredible talent. I love your brilliant character description. I'm sooo jealous. I always look forward to reading your work, friend.
Janet
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Thanks so Janet, my friend. Your comments are most welcome and I appreciate your stars and loyalty to my writing. :) X Bob
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a sensual piece. I can certainly see why you won with it. You write with such freedom of thought, but at the same time, the irony of the piece shows that it's clearly carefully drafted.
I could never write with such abandon. Guess that's why I see worth in everything that you write.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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What a sensual piece. I can certainly see why you won with it. You write with such freedom of thought, but at the same time, the irony of the piece shows that it's clearly carefully drafted.
I could never write with such abandon. Guess that's why I see worth in everything that you write.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2019
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Awww. Thanks so much, Debbie. You are a real sweetheart. Bless you. BTW. Your writing is not bad either, you know. Just keep at it. :) Bob
Comment from shaffer40
This is so well-written and interesting, it held my interest to the sad ending.:) I like the images you present in describing people and their actions. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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This is so well-written and interesting, it held my interest to the sad ending.:) I like the images you present in describing people and their actions. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you Tamara. I appreciate all you have done here. :) Bob
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You're welcome for sure.
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:) Bob
Comment from tfawcus
Entertaining, as always. You build up the sexual tension well as the story builds. A nasty case of brewer's droop, the downfall of many a lusty lad. I like the way you have Joanie commiserating with him. That's a bit like rubbing salt into the wounded ego!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Entertaining, as always. You build up the sexual tension well as the story builds. A nasty case of brewer's droop, the downfall of many a lusty lad. I like the way you have Joanie commiserating with him. That's a bit like rubbing salt into the wounded ego!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Tony. I appreciate you reviewing this oldie. Bless you. :) Bob
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Your short fiction is well told and has a surprise ending. It is easy to see why it won the contest.
Easy to read and follow. Very descriptive.
Well done.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Your short fiction is well told and has a surprise ending. It is easy to see why it won the contest.
Easy to read and follow. Very descriptive.
Well done.
Sharon
Comment Written 10-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thanks so much, Sharon. I appreciate this review. :) Bob
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a fun image: "a "I-don't-give-a-shit" hairdo" This will draw the reader in to challenge their imagination. Hmmm. What would that look like? You have used a handsome metaphor. I think the reader knew things were not going to go as well as he had fantasized. Well written. I actually was waiting for a punchline. Maybe because I like the way you write with just a bit of dark humor.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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This is a fun image: "a "I-don't-give-a-shit" hairdo" This will draw the reader in to challenge their imagination. Hmmm. What would that look like? You have used a handsome metaphor. I think the reader knew things were not going to go as well as he had fantasized. Well written. I actually was waiting for a punchline. Maybe because I like the way you write with just a bit of dark humor.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thanks so much Liz. :) As always good reviewing style. Bob
Comment from Sallyo
A useless black belt circled her waist, the tip dangled at the hip like a thirsty dog's tongue in August.
Comma splice? Or is "dangled" being used in the form meaning "dangling"?
Oh dear; poor Chuck! Mind you, I couldn't take a man who called himself Chuck seriously... This is a funny, wry and realistic sort of story as one would expect from Your Mastery.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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A useless black belt circled her waist, the tip dangled at the hip like a thirsty dog's tongue in August.
Comma splice? Or is "dangled" being used in the form meaning "dangling"?
Oh dear; poor Chuck! Mind you, I couldn't take a man who called himself Chuck seriously... This is a funny, wry and realistic sort of story as one would expect from Your Mastery.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Sallyo. :) Bob
