The Lost Boy
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Comment from jshep
Oh, Curt, you have written gut wrenching words and are so right about it being a side of life we want to be blind to. fantastic job of rhyme and flow, just flawlessly went down the page with darkest of descriptions. A potent message and well deserving of poem of the month. Joycex
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Oh, Curt, you have written gut wrenching words and are so right about it being a side of life we want to be blind to. fantastic job of rhyme and flow, just flawlessly went down the page with darkest of descriptions. A potent message and well deserving of poem of the month. Joycex
Comment Written 20-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2010
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Thank you Joyce, and may I also say congrats to you for your nomination.
I truly appreciate your thoughts my friend.
Curt
Comment from Ronni
I am guessing this is about a drug dependent person,
always on the verge of overdosing or already overdosed in
this scenario; which is horrendous and heart breaking to
the core. You have captured this hell and degredation
hauntingly and soul-shatteringly in such vivic detail
and irreversable stages of destruction and demise. Tone
is somber and chilling from beginning to end.
Awesome write, best of luck in contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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I am guessing this is about a drug dependent person,
always on the verge of overdosing or already overdosed in
this scenario; which is horrendous and heart breaking to
the core. You have captured this hell and degredation
hauntingly and soul-shatteringly in such vivic detail
and irreversable stages of destruction and demise. Tone
is somber and chilling from beginning to end.
Awesome write, best of luck in contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thanks Ronni,
You guessed correctly. I really appreciate your time and your thoughts on this piece, it came from my soul for a dear departed friend.
Curt
Comment from Realist101
I can only say, this is excellent writing. All too heartwrenching. I wish I could give this boy a hug, and let him know, that it will be ok. S.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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I can only say, this is excellent writing. All too heartwrenching. I wish I could give this boy a hug, and let him know, that it will be ok. S.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2010
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Thanks Susan, but that guy no longer exists except in my mind.
Curt
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Hugs anyway. :) as a friend. S.
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Comment from Hitcher
I lost a real good friend of mine to a ketamine[not sure if that is how you spell it] overdose about 7 years ago now, he was an unbelievable friendly, giving guy, he just had way too many demons to contend with so found every and any way to rid himself of them or at least silence them, he paid the ultimate price unfortunately. This is an awesome poem Curt, don't know how I missed it! Good luck to you, it is definitely a worthy contender! Tried to six you but I must have given you my quota for this month, thats good going friend!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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I lost a real good friend of mine to a ketamine[not sure if that is how you spell it] overdose about 7 years ago now, he was an unbelievable friendly, giving guy, he just had way too many demons to contend with so found every and any way to rid himself of them or at least silence them, he paid the ultimate price unfortunately. This is an awesome poem Curt, don't know how I missed it! Good luck to you, it is definitely a worthy contender! Tried to six you but I must have given you my quota for this month, thats good going friend!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thanks Hitch my friend,
I'll have to tell you about my friend who I wrote this about, but he sounds very much like him.
I trtuly appreciate all your comments mate, trying to finish a dandy here right now, something along the lines of this one, but much darker.
Give you a sneek peek when I'm done with it.
Curt
Comment from FanDan
Congratulations on another fine offering. After my most recent broadside against FanStory, and extolling of emotion as a key element in evaluating a piece of writing, there was just no way to vote for either of my other top choices in this month's Poem of the Month competition.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Congratulations on another fine offering. After my most recent broadside against FanStory, and extolling of emotion as a key element in evaluating a piece of writing, there was just no way to vote for either of my other top choices in this month's Poem of the Month competition.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thank you Dan, and I hope you can at least vote. The selsctions are fantastic this month, and I am simply honored to be a part of it all.
Thanks again,
Curt
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don't worry. If I turn out to be blacklisted or something, I at least got this vote in beforehand--and I voted for your poem. There were some very fine offerings in this contest.
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Yes there were some truly awesome pieces submitted, and I want you to knoow I really, really appreciate your vote Dan.
If you cause enough ruckus to earn some income for the site, you could be the token "bad boy." Everybody needs an opposition, why not you? I'd vote to have you, simply because you speak your mind and tell it like it is, something I try to do everyday.
Thank you again my friend,
Curt
Comment from L.lora
Curt what a deep heartfelt
gut wrenching write that I know
is right on the money. While no
person can do it for another, it
does help to know that there will
be someone there when it is conquered,
not an enabler but a lighthouse at the
end. So difficult to beat but it can
be done. This is truly an awesome poem
in all its depth and texture, you've
spoke volumes, perhaps it will help
someone from living the lesson. no nits
or spags, Lora
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Curt what a deep heartfelt
gut wrenching write that I know
is right on the money. While no
person can do it for another, it
does help to know that there will
be someone there when it is conquered,
not an enabler but a lighthouse at the
end. So difficult to beat but it can
be done. This is truly an awesome poem
in all its depth and texture, you've
spoke volumes, perhaps it will help
someone from living the lesson. no nits
or spags, Lora
Comment Written 18-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2010
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Thank you Lora,
I really do appreciate your thoughts on this piece. The power of addiction can be overcome, but there are casualties in any war.
I wanted to pay an homage to a fallen cmorade.
Thanks again,
Curt
Comment from missy98writer
Curt Mongold,
Brilliantly written poem. Dark imagery. Your poem is an excellent poem for the poem of the month contest. The writing is so emotional. I enjoyed the stanza:
This fetid fog, disgust and shame
have within their mouths my name,
so softly whispering the blame
over me with searing flames-
til once again the sin I find
in little bags he left behind
that hush the mem'ries in my mind-
the ones I never meant to find.
Powerful ending when he overdoses and dies. I love the narrative voice in your poem. Your rhyme and descriptive scheme are perfection.
Good luck on the poem of the month. So far yours and Alison's are my two front runners for my vote.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Curt Mongold,
Brilliantly written poem. Dark imagery. Your poem is an excellent poem for the poem of the month contest. The writing is so emotional. I enjoyed the stanza:
This fetid fog, disgust and shame
have within their mouths my name,
so softly whispering the blame
over me with searing flames-
til once again the sin I find
in little bags he left behind
that hush the mem'ries in my mind-
the ones I never meant to find.
Powerful ending when he overdoses and dies. I love the narrative voice in your poem. Your rhyme and descriptive scheme are perfection.
Good luck on the poem of the month. So far yours and Alison's are my two front runners for my vote.
Melissa.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thank you Melissa,
I wrote it for a friend who died just as I described. He was a really decent man until the addiction took him completely. I wanted to say goodbye the only way I know how.
Thank you again Melissa, your a talent I definitely admire and your thoughts mean a lot to me.
Curt
Comment from Sasha
This is a tragic and deeply moving poem. It actually brought tears to my eyes. Your ability to coven the depth of despair filled remorse when hitting bottom and unable to bet back up. This is superb writing. I commend you for your honest and vivid descriptions that paint a sad and heart breaking picture.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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This is a tragic and deeply moving poem. It actually brought tears to my eyes. Your ability to coven the depth of despair filled remorse when hitting bottom and unable to bet back up. This is superb writing. I commend you for your honest and vivid descriptions that paint a sad and heart breaking picture.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thank you Smurphgirl, I have always respected your talent, so it means that much more to me to know that my fallen friend will be remembered.
Thank you again,
Curt
Comment from Amfunny
Oh, my goodness. How did I ever miss this one? I can see why you are selected for poem of the month. This certainly gets my vote. VERY powerful and strong poem. Great job.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Oh, my goodness. How did I ever miss this one? I can see why you are selected for poem of the month. This certainly gets my vote. VERY powerful and strong poem. Great job.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Thank you my friend, I am so honored to have such a review from someone I admire. This was for a friend who died, and I wanted to say goodbye the only way I know how.
Thank you again, most sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Alison Williams
Wow. You think mine's good? Yours is so real, gritty, and vivid. The first verse hooked me completely with its rawness.
I hear the raindrops slip in grime,
through gutters full of rancid slime,
I've gone and fucked myself this time-
I sold my soul for one thin dime.
A vivid and sad portrayal of drug addiction. Is it heroin? With the flames and the little packets? Is that the reference to when they heat it on a spoon? Or is that cocaine? Either way, another powerful verse.
And then he overdoses. This packs a punch and is a stab at those who don't want to acknowledge the darker side of life.
Well done and good luck to you as well. :)
Alison
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Wow. You think mine's good? Yours is so real, gritty, and vivid. The first verse hooked me completely with its rawness.
I hear the raindrops slip in grime,
through gutters full of rancid slime,
I've gone and fucked myself this time-
I sold my soul for one thin dime.
A vivid and sad portrayal of drug addiction. Is it heroin? With the flames and the little packets? Is that the reference to when they heat it on a spoon? Or is that cocaine? Either way, another powerful verse.
And then he overdoses. This packs a punch and is a stab at those who don't want to acknowledge the darker side of life.
Well done and good luck to you as well. :)
Alison
Comment Written 17-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2010
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Yes, it was heroin Alison, he was a friend of mine who was found dead in a motel room from an OD. I wanted to say goodbye in my own way by trying to see it through his eyes.
I truly appreciate your thoughts Alison, thank you.
Curt
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I"m sorry to hear that. How horrible for you and for him and his family. I love how poetry can allow someone to express things that might be difficult in ordinary speech. Kudos.
