Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Mengleoh67
Not sure how I missed this one but I'm damned glad I have another waiting for me to read! Another excellent piece of writing. The storyline remains strong and the characters true to themselves. The interaction and dialogue is fabulous, although I do wish Matt had kicked Peggy out on her nosy butt. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2010
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Not sure how I missed this one but I'm damned glad I have another waiting for me to read! Another excellent piece of writing. The storyline remains strong and the characters true to themselves. The interaction and dialogue is fabulous, although I do wish Matt had kicked Peggy out on her nosy butt. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2010
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Peggyy will get what's coming to her. Thank you for the review.
Comment from HAWordsmith
Very nicely penned. Smooth to read and I was able to hold a picture of the scene in my mind throughout the reading. This was an enjoyable chapter, thank you for the posting.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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Very nicely penned. Smooth to read and I was able to hold a picture of the scene in my mind throughout the reading. This was an enjoyable chapter, thank you for the posting.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from elainec4
barbara,
This read very smoothly and easily. Even though, I had not read any of this work previously, it was easy to get into. You gave enough background information and enough detail to let the new reader know what was happening. I thought it intriquing and enjoyable. elaine
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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barbara,
This read very smoothly and easily. Even though, I had not read any of this work previously, it was easy to get into. You gave enough background information and enough detail to let the new reader know what was happening. I thought it intriquing and enjoyable. elaine
Comment Written 13-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Helen Tan
First, call me Matt. Second, if you went back to your family, they'd probably kill you,
This relationship remains a tough one...can a line truly be drawn between duties and personal feelings? I didn't notice any major SPAG.
I'm not sure about this but here he's talking about an option that has not taken place. Would it be more appropriate to put this in future tense," If you go back to your family, they'll probably kill you." Just a thought.
Steven teased, "Just remember the more we tease, the more we care about you."
Oops despite his attempt of not admitting his love for her, I think Steve let slip in this line.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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First, call me Matt. Second, if you went back to your family, they'd probably kill you,
This relationship remains a tough one...can a line truly be drawn between duties and personal feelings? I didn't notice any major SPAG.
I'm not sure about this but here he's talking about an option that has not taken place. Would it be more appropriate to put this in future tense," If you go back to your family, they'll probably kill you." Just a thought.
Steven teased, "Just remember the more we tease, the more we care about you."
Oops despite his attempt of not admitting his love for her, I think Steve let slip in this line.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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Steven will start to slip more often. Thank you for your review.
Comment from shy1250
Once I started reading, I couldn't stop. You've built believable and largely empathetic characters, strong dialogue, and an intriguing plot. At this point, I don't see any way you can fail! No suggestions, no spag, will be following your story with interest. later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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Once I started reading, I couldn't stop. You've built believable and largely empathetic characters, strong dialogue, and an intriguing plot. At this point, I don't see any way you can fail! No suggestions, no spag, will be following your story with interest. later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 13-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from misscookie
this is a very interesing story and It had my attention from the first line to the last line.
The story is filed with suspense and mestery
this is a good write.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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this is a very interesing story and It had my attention from the first line to the last line.
The story is filed with suspense and mestery
this is a good write.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
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your welcome.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Good chapter Barbara, it runs on smoothly from your last and Peggy is still being a complete prat. My money isdefinitely on that lady as the "mole" and the leak to the cartels.
No spag spotted.
Patrick
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Good chapter Barbara, it runs on smoothly from your last and Peggy is still being a complete prat. My money isdefinitely on that lady as the "mole" and the leak to the cartels.
No spag spotted.
Patrick
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from BJean
Hi Barbara, I don't read many novels, but wanted to pop in on some I haven't reviewed. you write very well. I hope Leya stays away from the mobster family. Sounds like she is genuine. Your story kept my interest and your talent is obvious for creating a good novel. Love, Jean
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Hi Barbara, I don't read many novels, but wanted to pop in on some I haven't reviewed. you write very well. I hope Leya stays away from the mobster family. Sounds like she is genuine. Your story kept my interest and your talent is obvious for creating a good novel. Love, Jean
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice and well-written chapter. It is full of events that are exciting and have the ability to keep the reader hooked. I WILL LIKE TO SEE HOW THE LOVE DEVELOPS BETWEEN LEYA AND STEVEN. KUDOS
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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This is a nice and well-written chapter. It is full of events that are exciting and have the ability to keep the reader hooked. I WILL LIKE TO SEE HOW THE LOVE DEVELOPS BETWEEN LEYA AND STEVEN. KUDOS
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from honeytree
Well I enjoyed reading these words from start to finish. The blood tests will tell what they find. Having blood taken is scary and when the blood is taken one feels relieved. I have not reviewed this story before. I liked reading and glad that Leya had the blood test.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Well I enjoyed reading these words from start to finish. The blood tests will tell what they find. Having blood taken is scary and when the blood is taken one feels relieved. I have not reviewed this story before. I liked reading and glad that Leya had the blood test.
Honeytree
Comment Written 12-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
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Glad you liked the review.
Honeytree.
