The Voracious One
When it's time . . . it's time.80 total reviews
Comment from Alison Williams
This was great. I chuckled at the end. It started off so exciting, and I thought, oh yeah, here we go, he is either going to murder someone or commit suicide and then you end it so mundanely!
Priceless. It appeals to my perverse sense of humour.
Good luck in the contest!
Alison
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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This was great. I chuckled at the end. It started off so exciting, and I thought, oh yeah, here we go, he is either going to murder someone or commit suicide and then you end it so mundanely!
Priceless. It appeals to my perverse sense of humour.
Good luck in the contest!
Alison
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks, Alison...I appreciate your remarks, sincerely...Bob
Comment from RaymondJohn
Funniest short shaggy-dog-story I've read in a long time. Love the ending and you do a bang-up-job of leading up to it. Much luck, Bud. Best. Ray.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Funniest short shaggy-dog-story I've read in a long time. Love the ending and you do a bang-up-job of leading up to it. Much luck, Bud. Best. Ray.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks again, Raymond...Bob
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello Bob,
I love it, both the story and the sandwich! Clever and funny, with just the right finishing touches and garnnishes to keep me coming back for more.
I laughed out loud!
Ray
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hello Bob,
I love it, both the story and the sandwich! Clever and funny, with just the right finishing touches and garnnishes to keep me coming back for more.
I laughed out loud!
Ray
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks so much, Ray...I appreciate you and your review...always....Bob and thanks for the gorgeous sixer! Wow!
Comment from amada
Ha, ha. You got me going in there, dear wise writer. I like the brevity and the quick punch of it. No words were wasted. I wish you the best in this contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Ha, ha. You got me going in there, dear wise writer. I like the brevity and the quick punch of it. No words were wasted. I wish you the best in this contest.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks a lot, Amada...I appreciate your review...Bob
Comment from Marjorie D.
Your great sense of humor always comes through, Bob. A sub sandwich, indeed. Maybe he's hypoglycemic, or maybe he's having a diet melt-down. Either way, it's fun to hypothesize. Thanks for the laugh!
Good luck!
XO
Marjorie
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Your great sense of humor always comes through, Bob. A sub sandwich, indeed. Maybe he's hypoglycemic, or maybe he's having a diet melt-down. Either way, it's fun to hypothesize. Thanks for the laugh!
Good luck!
XO
Marjorie
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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And thank you, Marjorie...I appreciate your time and your review...Bob
Comment from anne1204
Your short story leaves a lot of room for questions. Did he have a car wreck, get mugged or what? Leave it to a man to be bleeding to death and just think about his stomach. I hope by Italian sub. You meant sandwich. Good writing nothing to change or correct. Anne 1204
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Your short story leaves a lot of room for questions. Did he have a car wreck, get mugged or what? Leave it to a man to be bleeding to death and just think about his stomach. I hope by Italian sub. You meant sandwich. Good writing nothing to change or correct. Anne 1204
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks so much, Anne...Bob
Comment from MizKat
Bob - I absolutely love it. I laughed right out loud sitting here all by myself. I was wondering where it was going. The twist of the unexpected at the end was great. Best wishes in the contest. Funny, I never heard of this contest before. Kat
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Bob - I absolutely love it. I laughed right out loud sitting here all by myself. I was wondering where it was going. The twist of the unexpected at the end was great. Best wishes in the contest. Funny, I never heard of this contest before. Kat
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Neither did I...you have to got to contests at the top of the page...then click "Member Created Contests" and go from there...LOl...Thanks for the nice review..Bob
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I found it after I read your story, but it was filled by then. Besides, I don't think any of them can compare to yours. I wouldn't have had a chance. LOL Kat
Comment from Begin Again
Bob
He must have been extremely hungry or hated to share his lunch...blood rushing to his head, glazed eyes, trembling hands...Maybe it was too much caffeine.
Great job!
Carol
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Bob
He must have been extremely hungry or hated to share his lunch...blood rushing to his head, glazed eyes, trembling hands...Maybe it was too much caffeine.
Great job!
Carol
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks, Carol. I appreciat eyour review and your comments...Bob
Comment from Blue Danube
Hello Bob:
Very nicely done short story.
The suspense kept my interest for as long as it took me to read 50 well chosen words.
Hope Del wasn't fumbling, cutting and eating while driving.
I assume the glove box is the same thing as the glove compartment inside the car, right?
"The Voracious One" is an enticing title.
Blue
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hello Bob:
Very nicely done short story.
The suspense kept my interest for as long as it took me to read 50 well chosen words.
Hope Del wasn't fumbling, cutting and eating while driving.
I assume the glove box is the same thing as the glove compartment inside the car, right?
"The Voracious One" is an enticing title.
Blue
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Yes, glove box..glove compartment...same same. Thanks for your fine review, blue...Bob
Comment from frazzledauthor
I love this---few words, suspense, surprise ending and a sense of humor. I know I get repetitive but what can I say??? You really work at your craft every day. I am not so disciplined, though I need to be.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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I love this---few words, suspense, surprise ending and a sense of humor. I know I get repetitive but what can I say??? You really work at your craft every day. I am not so disciplined, though I need to be.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Thanks so much, frazzled...I am fortunate that I am retired and live to read and write...LOL...Bob
