Comment from Tallteller

Excellent

This had got to be a winner! It's funny because it's so true; as they say. I advertised an expensive TV once to help buy a better one. A couple arrived and while the man viewed, the lady used my toilet facilities, and helped herself to all my wife's perfume. They did not buy my TV!

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Uuuuuuh. Thanks, Tallteller. But it sounds like you are referring to the example down beloe on the page...about the burglary, rather than my poem up above...LOL...Bob

reply by Tallteller on 09-Jan-2010

The site has changed somewhat since I was last here. I am a littel bit lost, no totally lost!I hope you will forgive me. Now let's go see this poem of yours! Here we go again.

Comment from anabellapongasi

Excellent

Wow, Bob, this is a great little story. Horror,suspense, thriller...ahh I love the surprise twist in the end. You did this all wonderfully in fifty words! This is a strong entry to this contest. Best wishes!
Anabella

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Thanks so much, Annabelle. I do appreciate your support, immensely....Bob

Comment from HalfHoff

Excellent

I have NO idea what this contest is about, but you definately intrigued me! I also have no doubt that you have the lead in this one! Lea Ann

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Hi, LeaAnn...It's one of those "member created contests listed where you click contests at the top of the page. The contest is called: "The Adventure starts here" and the deadline is tomorrow, Saturday...Thanks so much, LeeAnn....Bob

Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Excellent

Wish I had a six star rating for this!!! Excellent work...great story told in so few words...a GREAT ending!!! Loved it. Hugs and smiles, Susanne

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010

Thanks, Susanne...You are one great fan...Bob

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello Bob, now with your first few words, you had me thinking a horrible thought then your clever twist on the end changed my thoughts to hunger.
Like your notes
smiles
Gert

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010

Thanks, Gert...I appreciate you looking at this little blip...LOL...Bob

reply by Gert sherwood on 07-Jan-2010

You are so welcome Bob
Gert

Comment from wierdgrace

Excellent

Sorry Mastery, I do not have a six, but wanted to tell you how excellent and enjoyable this one is, no errors and no revisons, great story that hooked me to the end as always, you are a true writer.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010

Thanks so much Grace...Wow! I really, sincerely apppreciate your comments...How nice. Bob

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Bob, I hate eating those big, messy subs in one large piece too. LOL This is hilarious - a mini-saga with a twist. Any story that can build up suspense only to leave me laughing this hard in so few words is a damned good story. LOL Brooke

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010

Thanks so much, Brooke...I appreciate your remarks and you...Bob

Comment from Xuders

Excellent

Though I'm not sure why Del's "eyes glazed over like frosted marbles," the rest of this funny microfiction works very nicely. (Fifty words is not a lot of space in which to develop *anything*!)

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010

Because he was so hungry and......voraciuos, silly...LOl...Thanks, Bob

Comment from Annmuma

Excellent

I was drawn right into this story. Couldn't wait to see what awful thing was about to occur, and was thrilled to see it end with a laugh. Loved it! Good luck. ann

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010

Thanks, Ann. I appreciate it so much...Bob

Comment from asma khan

Excellent

Blood rushing his head, glazed eyes, frosted marbles, hand shaking very nicely written short story. Suspense was there till the end. Title chosen is also good.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010

Thanks so much, Asma...Bob