Olivia
Daddy taught his little girl well.......49 total reviews
Comment from Charlene0513
To Begin Again,
A truly gruesome and sad thing that happened, for after many years of domination she has finallyeen set free and is able to make her own decisions.
Charlene
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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To Begin Again,
A truly gruesome and sad thing that happened, for after many years of domination she has finallyeen set free and is able to make her own decisions.
Charlene
Comment Written 10-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Charlene
Thank you so much for your generous comments and appreciate of my story. I really appreciate your comments. Carol
Comment from Lynne
WOW ! What an ending !!! Well done, My Dear. My father held me off a tall pier over the Pac Ocean when I was a young girl. Never knew fear like that and haven't since. Well, he's softened and is now a wonderful, nurturing man. I never forgot that. Hey, at least he didn't up rolled up in my oriental rug ! LOL Splendid ! D~
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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WOW ! What an ending !!! Well done, My Dear. My father held me off a tall pier over the Pac Ocean when I was a young girl. Never knew fear like that and haven't since. Well, he's softened and is now a wonderful, nurturing man. I never forgot that. Hey, at least he didn't up rolled up in my oriental rug ! LOL Splendid ! D~
Comment Written 06-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Lynne
I had a very very strict father too...Expected perfection...Thanks for the kind review. Carol
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Begin Again,
What a great story! I was captivated throughout your story. The pace and writing are very good and the ending unexpected. For you the 6 stars. Thank you for sharing a job well done!
mtngalofnc
Becky
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Hi Begin Again,
What a great story! I was captivated throughout your story. The pace and writing are very good and the ending unexpected. For you the 6 stars. Thank you for sharing a job well done!
mtngalofnc
Becky
Comment Written 06-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2010
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Becky
How awesome...Knowing that you enjoyed the story thrills me to pieces. I can't thank you enough for the kind words and encouragement. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
This is soooooo six-worthy! Damn, I have none...I really hope this one wins. Excellent story, wonderful details and great imagery throughout. I felt like I was with Olivia all the way, and was happy with her killing Daddy! Shame on me...lol. Great, great job and best of luck in the voting booth! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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This is soooooo six-worthy! Damn, I have none...I really hope this one wins. Excellent story, wonderful details and great imagery throughout. I felt like I was with Olivia all the way, and was happy with her killing Daddy! Shame on me...lol. Great, great job and best of luck in the voting booth! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Susanne
I humbly accept your virtual six...Your awesome words are worth more than any star. Thank you...Smiles, Carol
Comment from marion
Hi there Begin Again! Congratulations back to you on your nomination for Story of the Month! I hate being up against such good writers - LOL!! A well written story, holding my interest right through. Good pace and good flow. I enjoyed. Good Luck. Marion.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Hi there Begin Again! Congratulations back to you on your nomination for Story of the Month! I hate being up against such good writers - LOL!! A well written story, holding my interest right through. Good pace and good flow. I enjoyed. Good Luck. Marion.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2010
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Marion
I was surprised to see that I'd been nominated. Every story is so stunning in its own right. Thank you so much and I wish you well....Carol
Comment from anne1204
Very interesting twist to the story. I only caught on about half way through the reading. I hope she doesn't get caught. Well done and good writing. Anne 1204
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Very interesting twist to the story. I only caught on about half way through the reading. I hope she doesn't get caught. Well done and good writing. Anne 1204
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Anne
Thank you for enjoying this story. I appreciate it. Carol
Comment from Changeisgood
Well written, saw no mistakes. It did surprise me that her grandmother was in on it. It's clear that she poisoned her father, but at her age I don't see how he could have made her have an abortion; but, then, again, so much depends in your story about the father being evil. It reminds me of "Washington Square," by Henry James where the heroine's father buys off a suiter, who really is after the woman's money. She, of course, doesn't kill her father. You are able to capture the stress and oppression of the heorine, but I disagree with her action. But, that IS the story and you make as good a case as you can.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Well written, saw no mistakes. It did surprise me that her grandmother was in on it. It's clear that she poisoned her father, but at her age I don't see how he could have made her have an abortion; but, then, again, so much depends in your story about the father being evil. It reminds me of "Washington Square," by Henry James where the heroine's father buys off a suiter, who really is after the woman's money. She, of course, doesn't kill her father. You are able to capture the stress and oppression of the heorine, but I disagree with her action. But, that IS the story and you make as good a case as you can.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Changeisgood
I don't believe in her actions either..luckily it's a story and won't really happen. Thanks, Carol
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
this was a sad story. wow, you never know what kind of person you're raising until they are pushed to show you.
nice writing here, my friend. I have one thing to show you:
... a fact that highly irritated Daddy.
This sounds like it is writen in first person. Shouldn't it read: "... a fact that highly irritated HER Daddy"?
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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this was a sad story. wow, you never know what kind of person you're raising until they are pushed to show you.
nice writing here, my friend. I have one thing to show you:
... a fact that highly irritated Daddy.
This sounds like it is writen in first person. Shouldn't it read: "... a fact that highly irritated HER Daddy"?
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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El Gato
Appreciated your note and fixed it too. Thanks so much, Carol
Comment from Dom G Robles
This story is beautiful. I think it deserves a star of six. Neatly written from beginning to end. I don't feel like going into details because the details reveal themselves. The expressions are beautiful. To understand this contention is to go over and read the story. It is one of the best tragic stories I have read. There is a twist that a loving father had been killed at the end.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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This story is beautiful. I think it deserves a star of six. Neatly written from beginning to end. I don't feel like going into details because the details reveal themselves. The expressions are beautiful. To understand this contention is to go over and read the story. It is one of the best tragic stories I have read. There is a twist that a loving father had been killed at the end.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Dom
Awesome...I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story and parted with a precious 6 stars...You've lifted my spirits this cold morning. Thank you...Carol
Comment from JeffreyStone
Excellent writing and deserving of the nomination as Story of the MOnt. Good luck in the competition. Best Regards, JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Excellent writing and deserving of the nomination as Story of the MOnt. Good luck in the competition. Best Regards, JeffreyStone
Comment Written 03-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2010
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Jeffrey
Thank you so much for the kind remarks and enjoying my story. Congratulations and best wishes on your own nominations as well. Carol
