Anxious and Me
Just a little ditty in motion.35 total reviews
Comment from Dklrdmcches
This was very good. I loved the whitty verse and the fun that you had constructing a great read. This was a pleasure to read. the very best of luck to you and your writing...DKLRD
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2009
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This was very good. I loved the whitty verse and the fun that you had constructing a great read. This was a pleasure to read. the very best of luck to you and your writing...DKLRD
Comment Written 30-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2009
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Oh Lord of Power and Seer of Fear, grant your applicant the seeder of the new year.
Comment from Begin Again
Victor
It's great to let the child in us out of the box every once and a while and let our imagination run wild and playful. Great job...Happy and uplifting.
Carol
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2009
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Victor
It's great to let the child in us out of the box every once and a while and let our imagination run wild and playful. Great job...Happy and uplifting.
Carol
Comment Written 29-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2009
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Thank you Carol. Let's all have a good new year.
Comment from fictionwriter
This is great. The kids know how to think outside the box, and we often need to let them show us the way. I thought this was great. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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This is great. The kids know how to think outside the box, and we often need to let them show us the way. I thought this was great. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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Words of support are ever in voque. Thank you.
Comment from Ronni
A very witty, whimsical, lyrical poem with a most
inviting message of challenge and exploration! Your
flow and rhythm is very engaging and sure gives a
kick start to the spirit for sure! Thanks, we needed
that!! You have a most adventuresome talent and
perpetual curiosity that gives zest and vitality to
this write; inspiring and charmingly perceptive.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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A very witty, whimsical, lyrical poem with a most
inviting message of challenge and exploration! Your
flow and rhythm is very engaging and sure gives a
kick start to the spirit for sure! Thanks, we needed
that!! You have a most adventuresome talent and
perpetual curiosity that gives zest and vitality to
this write; inspiring and charmingly perceptive.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much. Your support is enjoyable and meaningful to me. I hope i never dissapoint.
Comment from lola29
You are very well versed in whimsy, and I liked reading y our poem because it gave me a spark of inspiration. I think I'll dare to do something different today.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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You are very well versed in whimsy, and I liked reading y our poem because it gave me a spark of inspiration. I think I'll dare to do something different today.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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Lola, can't tell U how pleasant it is when U review my work. thanks.
Comment from Kathy58
Victor, this is very well written lyrics/poetry. Your words are strong and beautifully described. This makes for a very vivid image. I enjoy the flow and the rhythym to this a lot. Have you put this to music yet? I play guitar and sing, and try writing lyrics myself sometimes. Great work, kathy58
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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Victor, this is very well written lyrics/poetry. Your words are strong and beautifully described. This makes for a very vivid image. I enjoy the flow and the rhythym to this a lot. Have you put this to music yet? I play guitar and sing, and try writing lyrics myself sometimes. Great work, kathy58
Comment Written 29-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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Dear Kathy, thank you for your review. I am not able to play a musical instrument, unfortunately. I hear, sometimes, melodies in my head. I have written, I think three poems/lyrics and would love to put them to music. Am I just totlly loco in thinking there could be a commercial market for them?
Comment from bayoupoet
This is a wonderful fantasy poem and it caught me up in the sheer excitement of the mood and vivid imagery. I think each of us can use a little fun in our lives and this is a fun poem! Blessings! sandra
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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This is a wonderful fantasy poem and it caught me up in the sheer excitement of the mood and vivid imagery. I think each of us can use a little fun in our lives and this is a fun poem! Blessings! sandra
Comment Written 29-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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I need my bayou support. Loved John Foggarty(sp?)
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You are welcome! samdra
Comment from knowledge
This reminds me a bit of Dr. Zoose. It is a very fun read. I like your art pick, it goes well with your subject.
Happy New Year My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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This reminds me a bit of Dr. Zoose. It is a very fun read. I like your art pick, it goes well with your subject.
Happy New Year My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 29-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2009
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Yes it is a bit like that, eh? Awfully good company, I must say.
Comment from bnd-writenow
I like this poem - and the interesting choice of artwork...
It is a fun piece to read, with lots of childhood images (so at my age, I don't climb trees like I used to - who am I kidding, I don't climb trees at all...
In the second verse:
But if you're anxious to see
beyond that you know
come with me.
I wonder if "what" may be a better choice than "that" - as in the 7th verse. "That" doesn't flow off the tongue for me...
Although seemingly innocent and fun, this piece reads a little like the pied piper, with a hint of danger that seems to linger...
When you're anxious to see
beyond what you know
come with me.
Hmm, food for thought!!!
Good job.
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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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I like this poem - and the interesting choice of artwork...
It is a fun piece to read, with lots of childhood images (so at my age, I don't climb trees like I used to - who am I kidding, I don't climb trees at all...
In the second verse:
But if you're anxious to see
beyond that you know
come with me.
I wonder if "what" may be a better choice than "that" - as in the 7th verse. "That" doesn't flow off the tongue for me...
Although seemingly innocent and fun, this piece reads a little like the pied piper, with a hint of danger that seems to linger...
When you're anxious to see
beyond what you know
come with me.
Hmm, food for thought!!!
Good job.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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Hi, thanks for your review. U know, I consternated over that very decision. Beyond that U know was my first inclination for all verses. and I picked it on purpose because of the mild stumble that occurs. But I thought readers may get annoyed, so I changed it for the rest of the poem.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Cute and fun to read. It's been years since I climbed a tree, but for some reason I now have the urge. My teenager will think I finally went crazy. Good job with this poem.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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Cute and fun to read. It's been years since I climbed a tree, but for some reason I now have the urge. My teenager will think I finally went crazy. Good job with this poem.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2009
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Thank you Barbara. Had no intention of writing this. But U know how it goes. Whistlin', wonderin a little ditty in my head. Started to write it down and ther U go.
