Comment from Gaye Hemsley

Excellent

Charming Brooke A lovely love story ending in a happy way.The verses are well balanced and rhyming pattern is perfect.You have pened some beautiful Christmas poems.
LOL Gaye

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2009

Thank you, Gaye. I appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

What a truly beautiful fairytale
told in glorious hues of warmness
and tenderness sending a message
to always dream the impossible
dream, you never know.
As always, well done

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2009

Thank you, my friend - I'm so glad you enjoyed this fantasy romance :-) Brooke

Comment from perunest

Excellent

Love it! A wonderful Christmas surprise -
this poem conveys that warmth waiting for
us when we least expect it. I am so glad
that tin soldier found the gift of love!
Another great Chritmas piece! Carolyn

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2009

Thanks, Carolyn. Glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke

Comment from Annmuma

Excellent

I like the rhyme of this story as it unfolds. I like the sweetness and light of the the premise. It has a good, all-around Christmas feel to it. Great job. ann

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

The santa found his legs a little loose
as feline malice shook from down beneath.
He bumped against the wobbly hanging goose
and blushed as her tail feathers gave him treats.
"This is indignity, I say forsooth!"
he huffed, and then swung straight into a wreath.
A cat's voice sniggered eagerly below,
abound in all the fun it would bestow.

Then string did part, sent santa on his way.
He bumped against the needles of a branch.
"I'll have your nuts, you mangy little stray,
I'll cook you up, and eat you for my lunch!"
He hit the ground, and tiny shards did spray.
The cat approached, and santa's face did blanch.
It nuzzled at his beard and gave a purr,
then curled around his form, not soon to stir.

Mike

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

Comment from Queenise

Excellent

Brooke,this is a cute and sweet imaginary scene that you have given a good life of its own and I really like it. Very creative and engaging on your part. Enjoyable to read. Peace and lol. Queenise

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2009

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

To adewpearl,
A very heartfelt and somewhat agonizing feeling that the soldier had thought the gift of Christmas and the fulfilment of his hopes to have a woman of his own was just an illusion, until the fairy worked her magic on Christmas morning.
Charlene

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2009

Comment from LYLE

Exceptional

Brooke,
I have to give you six stars for this story. I love poems written in iambic pentameter, and to write a short story poem, without forced meter, is really talented. By forced meter, I mean using words that have the stresses, but don't really fit in the general vocabulary of the story.
I am going to stand by my Christmas tree on Christmas eve,
and see if a fairy lass comes to me!
Fondly, Lyle

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009

Lyle, I do so hope you win the heart of your fairy lass!! Thanks ever so much for this generous rating and your wonderful comments :-) Brooke

Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

What a great ornament and ottava rima to describe the "staunch soldier" sharing flirtations with the fairy on the tree. Very fun fantasy to imagine how all of the decorations dance and communicate with each other while we are sleeping. Just delightful! Sue

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009

I'm so glad you had fun - thanks, Sue :-) Brooke

Comment from Dklrdmcches

Excellent

This was cool. great job of briefly telling a story that touched the heart and was interesting to boot. this was a happy tale about all we want in this world is to be told that we are thought of...DKLRD

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2009

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2009

Thanks so much, DKLRD :-) Brooke