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Rejoice: Christmas Poetry

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Christmas poems in various formats.

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Comment from AlvinTEthington
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I think you need to start writing quinterns with stanzas of five lines and fives stanzas to a poem with a repeating line moving from first through fifth position. Good execution of a rhyme scheme, which is difficult in a form with a movable repeating line. As I mentioned in a different review, it's interesting how important animals are to Christian legend--the stork, the pelican, and the robin, for instance. Good work.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2009
    Al, that is a good idea - I will have to try writing one of those someday soon! :-) Thanks for your review :-) Brooke
reply by AlvinTEthington on 14-Dec-2009
    If you use the form, be sure to give me credit as the creator. SMILE. You're welcome for the review.
Comment from joan marie
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I always learn something when I read your work. This is a lovely story and you've put it to verse very well. Happy Holidays, joan marie

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2009
    thank you, Joan Marie - and happy holidays to you too!! Brooke :-)
Comment from sgalletti
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Hi Brooke! What a lovely legend about how the robin got his red breast. I loved these lines in particular:
"Though growing flames had burnt his breast,
this robin never once complained.
He felt her need and passed the test,
when Mary saw the embers wane. "
And, you know how I love the quatern.
Glad you are taking some liberties and adding a verse!
Just more for us to enjoy.
Sue

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Sue - I'm so pleased you enjoyed this poetic legend :-) Brooke
Comment from EllieKaye
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HI Brooke,
I think legends like this are so much fun. I'm also glad to have read your version of it through poetry. Fantastic job, my friend. My favorite stanza is:

Though growing flames had burnt his breast,
this robin never once complained.
He felt her need and passed the test,
when Mary saw the embers wane.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Ellie Kaye - I've been enjoying finding legends and putting them into poem form :-) Brooke
Comment from Annmuma
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I've never heard this legend before. Thanks so much for finding and sharing it. Christmas is such a time of miracles and love. It is amazing to me that I learn new stories every year--and they've been around forever. Good job. ann

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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Ann - I'm so glad you enjoyed this legend in rhyming form :-) Brooke
Comment from pugdogy
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very good job here!!!
I really enjoyed this piece of work,
I'd never heard this tale before but I really enjoyed learning about it. the author notes were an added bonus, keep up the great work!!!

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2009
    Thanks so much, pugdogy, and good morning! Brooke :-)
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
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Hi Brooke This poem is just beautiful and like you I had never heard the legend before. Your poem is well balanced and shows the story. I would like to save this one to send to my son in a Christmas card, would you mind
Cheers Gaye

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Gaye - I'm so glad you enjoyed this, and I would be honored if you shared this with your son - just sign it Brooke Baldwin instead of adewpearl. Brooke :-)
Comment from jason456
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Hi Brooke,
This is such a beautiful poem and a beautiful story. I have never heard this before about a Robin, and why their breasts are red. Very well written - good job.
Your friend,
Patti :)

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 13-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Patti. I'm so pleased you enjoyed :-) Brooke
Comment from shy1250
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Your work is uniformly brilliant--truly deserving of the ribbon and all time best. Somehow you capture the essence of whatever you choose to write of, and I know my world is richer for it. No suggestions or corrections. I sit in awe at your talent. later and God bless, shy

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 13-Dec-2009
    Thank you, Shy - this is a most thoughtful and encouraging review : -) Brooke
Comment from misscookie
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Not only is this a lovely poembut it also came with an education somthing I didn't know about.
and I'm sure others will learn also
this is a great write

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2009


reply by the author on 13-Dec-2009
    Thanks so much, Misscookie :-) Brooke
reply by misscookie on 13-Dec-2009
    your welcome