F@#^%n' Bernie
Vers Beaucoup (see notes)64 total reviews
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is really great. I enjoyed reading this beautifully crafted poem that is both narrative and descriptive. I love the triple rhymes you created within some lines. kudos
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This is really great. I enjoyed reading this beautifully crafted poem that is both narrative and descriptive. I love the triple rhymes you created within some lines. kudos
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thanks Perp!
I truly appreciate your thoughts.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from rhymelord
Welcome back, Curt. This is a good one to kick off your return to the fray. A great satiric look at life in the modern age, except I hope that there are not too many Bernies around. Great enjambment, not always easy to do smoothly.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Welcome back, Curt. This is a good one to kick off your return to the fray. A great satiric look at life in the modern age, except I hope that there are not too many Bernies around. Great enjambment, not always easy to do smoothly.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Yea, it can be a bugger sometimes, but I like a challenge.
Thanks for your thoughts and for the welcome. I appreciate both.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Sally Carter
I've never heard of or seen this kind of verse before, but I really enjoyed it. Yes, the minimal word usage really makes it pacy, and the enjambment is fun. This felt very genuine, and though I'm not usually a fan of swearing in poetry, in this piece it felt totally appropriate. Thank you for posting such an interesting piece. Do some more please! Sally
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I've never heard of or seen this kind of verse before, but I really enjoyed it. Yes, the minimal word usage really makes it pacy, and the enjambment is fun. This felt very genuine, and though I'm not usually a fan of swearing in poetry, in this piece it felt totally appropriate. Thank you for posting such an interesting piece. Do some more please! Sally
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thanks Sally!
Actually this form was invented by me about a tear ago. I have a few more like it in my portfolio.
I am so glad you liked it.
Sincerely,
Curt
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An interesting reply.. Did you mean "a tear ago" or "a year ago"? I think "a tear ago" would be a great title for a poem. S
Comment from Amfunny
This was rather unusual. I am glad you explained the format in your author notes. This was a pleasure to read and review. Well done. For some reason your artwork did not come through.
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This was rather unusual. I am glad you explained the format in your author notes. This was a pleasure to read and review. Well done. For some reason your artwork did not come through.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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The artwork is being a pain to load, so I just said to hell with it.
Thank you for your comments and time on this piece, and I am doubly glad you enjoyed it.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Oh well, too much for my feeble mind to comprehend at this time of night, Curt! LOL! I like it though; reminds me of today.
Love,
Pen
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Oh well, too much for my feeble mind to comprehend at this time of night, Curt! LOL! I like it though; reminds me of today.
Love,
Pen
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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LMAO!
Come on girlfriend, you know this form already!
Read it when your eyes are fully open and tell me what you think!
Love ya,
Curt
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well, re-reading? lol! life's short~write me another one! :)
Comment from Hitcher
It has been quite awhile since I seen your name grace my screen Curt, not that I post that much myself these days but it was nice to be reacquainted with the Verse. You have not lost your wit I see, this was fun to read and one could see it being played out regularly, EVERYWHERE on a regular basis, unfortunately...f-n Bernie! ha ha
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It has been quite awhile since I seen your name grace my screen Curt, not that I post that much myself these days but it was nice to be reacquainted with the Verse. You have not lost your wit I see, this was fun to read and one could see it being played out regularly, EVERYWHERE on a regular basis, unfortunately...f-n Bernie! ha ha
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thanks Hitch,
It's been awhile since I could write with my muse at my side. I have been blessed once again with the opportunity to share my writing with you.
Always,
Curt
Comment from rama devi
Welcome back old friend! You re-enter here with style. I'm not going to count syllables, because I can tell my the groove when reading aloud that you have succeeded in writing another awesome Vers Beaucoup. Clever, witty, ironic and funny.
Thanks for your entertaining work.
One typo-
Fill the tank, then the bank, my blance(BALANCE) sank
Warm welcome!
Warm hugs,
rama devi
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Welcome back old friend! You re-enter here with style. I'm not going to count syllables, because I can tell my the groove when reading aloud that you have succeeded in writing another awesome Vers Beaucoup. Clever, witty, ironic and funny.
Thanks for your entertaining work.
One typo-
Fill the tank, then the bank, my blance(BALANCE) sank
Warm welcome!
Warm hugs,
rama devi
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Rama, my dear friend,
It truly is good to be back at it, and your comments are icing on the cake. I fixed the typo (thank you) and truly appreciate your comments. I hope to be here more now that the weather has made me a recluse. lol
Always,
Curt
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That;'s good news!
Look forward to trading review.
Love,
rd
Comment from Amicus
This is a clever and amusing poem, Curt. I enjoyed the read. The internal rhyming is such fun to read and I bet its fun to write too so I intend to try out this form as soon as lightening strikes again :>)...This poor sad sack and his tale of woe is pathetic but humorous in the slightly sick way that I like.
Good job...one nit needing attention...balance is missing an a.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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This is a clever and amusing poem, Curt. I enjoyed the read. The internal rhyming is such fun to read and I bet its fun to write too so I intend to try out this form as soon as lightening strikes again :>)...This poor sad sack and his tale of woe is pathetic but humorous in the slightly sick way that I like.
Good job...one nit needing attention...balance is missing an a.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Got the typo, thank you and all who are sharper in the eye than I!
Honestly, you should try it. It's not much more difficult than some of the other forms out there and besides, what is a poet if he doesn't stretch his wings once in awhile?
Thanks for the kudos my friend,
Curt
Comment from adewpearl
Curt, it is great to read one of your vers beaucoup poems again, and it is great to see you - I just checked - this is your first post in almost half a year. I thought you had gone to the great beyond or had at least ditched Fan Story! :-) Your poem takes a look at today's hard times in an effectively satiric way - great humor, great flow and wonderful use of your form with its internal rhymes. I hope I get to read something else before June! Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Curt, it is great to read one of your vers beaucoup poems again, and it is great to see you - I just checked - this is your first post in almost half a year. I thought you had gone to the great beyond or had at least ditched Fan Story! :-) Your poem takes a look at today's hard times in an effectively satiric way - great humor, great flow and wonderful use of your form with its internal rhymes. I hope I get to read something else before June! Brooke :-)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Hey Pearl, how is my favorite antagonist (snicker) these days? If you ask Jude, you would know I do this from time to time, like the seasons. All I can say is, let's enjoy it while we're here!!
Thanks so much for your thoughts my friend, you know how much I appreciate them.
Always,
Curt
Comment from poetaster
Bernie, that sonofabitch. Loved this. Continued success in all your future endeavors. I'll definitely be checking out your portfolio in the near future. Peace.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Bernie, that sonofabitch. Loved this. Continued success in all your future endeavors. I'll definitely be checking out your portfolio in the near future. Peace.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thank you my friend!
You don't have to wait, my portfolio is kinda full already with all kinds of crap!!
Thanks for enjoying my moronic work. All hail Mel Brooks and bow down to Monty Python...
Curt
