Poems of Love and Spirit
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Up in the Mountains"This book is about love, God's Love most of all.
29 total reviews
Comment from zanya
Yes, it does sound and seem very beautiful up there in the mountains 'lifting my spirit to heavenly height' a place to dwell and escape our earthly cares for a while, perhaps. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Yes, it does sound and seem very beautiful up there in the mountains 'lifting my spirit to heavenly height' a place to dwell and escape our earthly cares for a while, perhaps. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2021
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Thank you for your review. Mountain climbing may be dangerous at times, but the end result is the thrill of a view where you see the world from a different perspective from the summit and it puts everything into the right perspective.
Comment from jl & bandit
I really like the rhyming scheme to this , I just don't understand the placement of the question marks...but as you may see, in my work, punctuation is my downfall.
The part that got me stuck on rhythm was the heavenly line... think you need to tweak it a little to reduce the syllable count in it.
I hope to see more of your work soon.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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I really like the rhyming scheme to this , I just don't understand the placement of the question marks...but as you may see, in my work, punctuation is my downfall.
The part that got me stuck on rhythm was the heavenly line... think you need to tweak it a little to reduce the syllable count in it.
I hope to see more of your work soon.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for the honest and great review but these question marks didn't appear on the original so I wrote in about it and it had to do with the word processor.
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ok that makes more sence
Comment from CCasetta
Beautiful poem. The impeccable meter allowed the beauty to shine through unabated. The message is strong--a real testament to your faith and your appreciation for that which surrounds you. Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Beautiful poem. The impeccable meter allowed the beauty to shine through unabated. The message is strong--a real testament to your faith and your appreciation for that which surrounds you. Wonderful job.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much for your great and detailed review, but because English is my second language and the poem was written by an inspiration, I don't fully understand what impeccable meter means? With regards, Sarah
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It means that the beat was always steady. Again terrific job. Continued success. --Curt
Comment from Dogz
This is a good poem. There are a couple spots that have some grammar issues. But I'm sure you'll clean those up. I used to live in the state of Montana. It is one of the most beautiful places I've ever been to. Dogz
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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This is a good poem. There are a couple spots that have some grammar issues. But I'm sure you'll clean those up. I used to live in the state of Montana. It is one of the most beautiful places I've ever been to. Dogz
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank your so much for reviewing my poem and correcting my grammar errors. Really appreciate it.
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Thank you so much for your review, I really appreciate it. The question marks are a fault of the word processor.
Comment from angel123
I loved reading your spiritual poem, but I did not understand the ? marks and in the sixth paragraph, second sentence, I think you should use the word lifes. Your poem held my attention from beginning to end and it flowed beautifully with words of grace and wisdom. Best Wishes!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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I loved reading your spiritual poem, but I did not understand the ? marks and in the sixth paragraph, second sentence, I think you should use the word lifes. Your poem held my attention from beginning to end and it flowed beautifully with words of grace and wisdom. Best Wishes!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your honest great review but sorry, it had to do with the word processor and I wrote in about it. With regards, Sarah
Comment from HalfHoff
Great write, great message, greater question. Very enjoyable and thought provoking write. (King of Kings) Thank you. Lea Ann
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Great write, great message, greater question. Very enjoyable and thought provoking write. (King of Kings) Thank you. Lea Ann
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your great review and expressions of it's meaning. Really appreciate it.
Comment from Begin Again
Sarahice
Very beautiful and uplifting poem you have written. i enjoyed it very much.
One question...why the extra question marks at the end of several lines...Is that an editing error?
Great job!
Carol
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Sarahice
Very beautiful and uplifting poem you have written. i enjoyed it very much.
One question...why the extra question marks at the end of several lines...Is that an editing error?
Great job!
Carol
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments but the extra question marks are there due to the word processor. Really like what you said about my poem.
Comment from Charlene0513
To sarahice,
A beautiful piece of poetry descibing all the wonderful obects that our Heavenly Saviour has blessed us with.
If there was anything I would improve on is that when speaking of our SAviour I would Capitolize the words.Such as: -to their Saviour and our King of kings.(with an "s", not at the beginning of next sentence)
-the Creator of all living things.
Charlene
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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To sarahice,
A beautiful piece of poetry descibing all the wonderful obects that our Heavenly Saviour has blessed us with.
If there was anything I would improve on is that when speaking of our SAviour I would Capitolize the words.Such as: -to their Saviour and our King of kings.(with an "s", not at the beginning of next sentence)
-the Creator of all living things.
Charlene
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your wonderful review and help with my grammar. I really appreciate any help like that as I'm not a native speaker.
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Thank you for your wonderful review and help with my grammar. I really appreciate any help like that as I'm not a native speaker.
Comment from Sunie617
If I had a spare six, you'd have it. You had me with the first two lines. But my favorite lines are"the warrior clan so bold and so brave" " in full surrender their lives freely give" This was just an awesome read with a beautiful message. thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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If I had a spare six, you'd have it. You had me with the first two lines. But my favorite lines are"the warrior clan so bold and so brave" " in full surrender their lives freely give" This was just an awesome read with a beautiful message. thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you so much for your splendid review, really encouraged me to move forward.
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You are very welcome
