Comment from Dklrdmcches

Excellent

this was very well written. your gently written word did justice for this HOT topic. very well done as your passion was obviously noticable. great job and the best of luck to you...DKLRD

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009

Thank you so much.........xoxo

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

this is a piece of erotic poetry that has class and no trash. Because it is written with a soft and yet alluring touch. This was just an excellent piece of poetic artistry that was my pleasure to have written a review for... John

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2009

Thanks so very much John. I am glad you liked it........xoxo

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

All I need is behind this door - at this point the poem is being spoken by a participant in the lovemaking - and then you shift to verses about he and she - which has a third person omniscient narrator - that threw me off a bit.
Your erotic poem has good flow and passionate detail - I just wish it did not have that POV shift. Brooke

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

I guess I did switch it around a little. Thank you for reading and commenting........xoxo

Comment from jmyron

Excellent

Feminine cries, masculine grunts, and making each other squirm... Well written with imagery that makes you want to...

John

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

LOL....Thank you and I am happy you enjoyed this. Things our imaginations can come up with. I appreciate your comment and review.......xoxo

Comment from tonydem

Excellent

Hot! hot! hot! Great descriptions. And the perfect ending. A considerate man will never, ever, ever leave his playmate in the lurch, so to speak. One way or another he needs to finish business. : )
Tony

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

I agree Tony!!!!! I appreciate your comment and great review, that means a lot to me. Hope you stop by again sometime soon for more fun reading (lol) xoxo

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is excellent. Very well written and a marvelous entry for the contest too. You did a superb job with this and I found it a true pleasure to read. Good luck with the contest too. Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thank you so much girl!! xoxo

Comment from jimchester

Good

Very descriptive and erotic, generally well written. But I wonder why you established a rhyme scheme (A B C B) for 6 stanzas, then abandoned it in the last two? Seem like, after that much trouble to establish a pattern, you would have stuck with it.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Honestly, I simply screwed that part up I guess. Thanks for commenting though....I deeply appreciate your time....xoxo

Comment from Belinda Amy Pantyboy

Excellent

Well this was a great entry to this competition. There was not a part of the poem that was not erotic. Exciting vocabulary used which made this an absolute joy to read.Think I will have a cold shower now. Very good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thank you so much for reading and commenting on this. I truly appreciate that a lot....xoxo

Comment from irishauthorme

Excellent

Awesome poem, forceful and explosive! Great photo to help, you didn't let up with this one, and while we can sense the satisfying ending, I liked the way you kind of left it for us to figure out.
Great graphics, passionate and lusty with any grunge.
Good job!
Irish

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thank you again so much!! xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thank you again so much!! xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thank you again so much!! xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thank you again so much!! xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thank you again so much!! xoxo

Comment from missy98writer

Excellent

Heidixoxo,
your poem is well executed. This erotic poem is marvelous. I'm all hot and bothered after reading it. I loved the line:
"She straddles his waiting hardness
Easing him in to her womanly hollow
Leading him on a rhythmic dance
His thrusting hips must follow".
This erotic poem "Behind Closed Doors" for the erotica contest is excellent and the rhymes flowed in this sexual ode.
Wow! The poem is hot, hot, hot.
missy98writer.

PS: Did you read "Dirty Laundry" entered in this contest. Wow, I have a new appreciation for doing the laundry now.


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 Comment Written 25-Nov-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thanks again Missy!! If I can make people feel HOT HOT HOT HOT after my work then I guess Ive done well.....LOL Glad you enjoyed........xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thanks again Missy!! If I can make people feel HOT HOT HOT HOT after my work then I guess Ive done well.....LOL Glad you enjoyed........xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thanks again Missy!! If I can make people feel HOT HOT HOT HOT after my work then I guess Ive done well.....LOL Glad you enjoyed........xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thanks again Missy!! If I can make people feel HOT HOT HOT HOT after my work then I guess Ive done well.....LOL Glad you enjoyed........xoxo

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2009

Thanks again Missy!! If I can make people feel HOT HOT HOT HOT after my work then I guess Ive done well.....LOL Glad you enjoyed........xoxo