Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Chapter 5; Part 2"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
46 total reviews
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara.wilkey
Jealously is such an ugly emotion and Peggy seems to have it in spades at the moment. Well written and good characterisation. It will be interesting to see where you take this from here.
Patrick
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2009
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Hi Barbara.wilkey
Jealously is such an ugly emotion and Peggy seems to have it in spades at the moment. Well written and good characterisation. It will be interesting to see where you take this from here.
Patrick
Comment Written 25-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review an continued support.
Comment from L.lora
Very well written. The addition
of another female who seems to
be jealous does spice it up and
a different type of conflict.
The scene sequence is good and
flows well while the dialogues
blend well with the narative.
Everything has been very well
executed. :)Lora
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2009
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Very well written. The addition
of another female who seems to
be jealous does spice it up and
a different type of conflict.
The scene sequence is good and
flows well while the dialogues
blend well with the narative.
Everything has been very well
executed. :)Lora
Comment Written 24-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from annienolan
This is a beautiful romance story. I know about keeping kittens. Creative and thoughtfully produced. Good flow and well written. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2009
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This is a beautiful romance story. I know about keeping kittens. Creative and thoughtfully produced. Good flow and well written. Keep writing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from Shane Marquardt
I enjoyed the chapter. I did notice one thing, and it could be because I have been out of the loop for a while. But I don't recall reading a post where Leya is the main focus. An example:
"On her way inside, Leya decided to help discover who attacked Geoff and stopped by his room."
I remember the action began with Steven, and Leya was the mystery. If you changed from this and I failed to notice, disregard.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2009
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I enjoyed the chapter. I did notice one thing, and it could be because I have been out of the loop for a while. But I don't recall reading a post where Leya is the main focus. An example:
"On her way inside, Leya decided to help discover who attacked Geoff and stopped by his room."
I remember the action began with Steven, and Leya was the mystery. If you changed from this and I failed to notice, disregard.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2009
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I'll recheck it. Thank you for mentioning it and for your review.
Comment from eliz100
The tension between these two women make the story interesting. I have to keep reading, I want to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2009
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The tension between these two women make the story interesting. I have to keep reading, I want to see what happens next.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Barb, it's plain taht Peggy is a traitor to wreck a clsoe relationship between Leya and Steven.
In this chapter, it doesn't seem clear that the marriage is solid. Perhpas other chapters define Peggy, but it sems she's a spoiler. I also get the impression she's gay.
Or did I miss a stitch?
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2009
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Barb, it's plain taht Peggy is a traitor to wreck a clsoe relationship between Leya and Steven.
In this chapter, it doesn't seem clear that the marriage is solid. Perhpas other chapters define Peggy, but it sems she's a spoiler. I also get the impression she's gay.
Or did I miss a stitch?
Comment Written 24-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2009
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HUMMMM, you brought up some very good questions. We'll have to wait and see. Thank you for your review.
Comment from misscookie
I keep passing your write thinking i read it before afterawhile I get confuse. I decided to read it and was very surprise of how well it was writen the story is very interesting and you had my attention from the beging to the eng. very good write.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2009
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I keep passing your write thinking i read it before afterawhile I get confuse. I decided to read it and was very surprise of how well it was writen the story is very interesting and you had my attention from the beging to the eng. very good write.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from wierdgrace
First of all, Barbara is that a new picture, it is beautiful, and this chapter is awesome, I love the characters Steven and Leya, and then Peggy, she found the mole? who... no errors and no revisons, what a great book.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2009
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First of all, Barbara is that a new picture, it is beautiful, and this chapter is awesome, I love the characters Steven and Leya, and then Peggy, she found the mole? who... no errors and no revisons, what a great book.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from ladybird
Oh oh.Leyla better watch out for Peggy, although to be fair on Peggy, it does at first glance, look as if Leyla is snooping. A good follow on chapter.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2009
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Oh oh.Leyla better watch out for Peggy, although to be fair on Peggy, it does at first glance, look as if Leyla is snooping. A good follow on chapter.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2009
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Thank youi for your review. I appreciate your continued support.
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You're welcome.
Comment from mshugh
Nicely done
Sig-Sauer 9mm - I thought your husband was Army - not Navy - SIG Sauer _ i also forget to capitalize the first three characters
He released a loud sigh and placed the gun in his shoulder holster - please safe the weapon (laugh)
Nice pace
Michael
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2009
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Nicely done
Sig-Sauer 9mm - I thought your husband was Army - not Navy - SIG Sauer _ i also forget to capitalize the first three characters
He released a loud sigh and placed the gun in his shoulder holster - please safe the weapon (laugh)
Nice pace
Michael
Comment Written 23-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2009
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He is retired Army, but CID actually uses them. That's where I got it from. I hate guns and won't allow them in the house. I raised all boys, they have a curiousity with guns. I wasn't about to risk an accident. Thank you for your review.
