Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Chapter 5; part 1"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from Nicnac
Arg! Ugh! I DO NOT like that Hussy Peggy wench! What a trampy instigator. She is trouble - not only for Leya, but for Steven as well. Tramp. LOL
Did I mention that I don't like Peggy?
I like the touches of tension you show between Steven and Leya. I can't wait for that tension to turn into passion! Yummy.
No suggestions, Barbara. Great writing.
*Sorry for the late review - I'll be back from my trip tomorrow and will hopefully be back to more timely reviewing. ;)
Nic
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Arg! Ugh! I DO NOT like that Hussy Peggy wench! What a trampy instigator. She is trouble - not only for Leya, but for Steven as well. Tramp. LOL
Did I mention that I don't like Peggy?
I like the touches of tension you show between Steven and Leya. I can't wait for that tension to turn into passion! Yummy.
No suggestions, Barbara. Great writing.
*Sorry for the late review - I'll be back from my trip tomorrow and will hopefully be back to more timely reviewing. ;)
Nic
Comment Written 22-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2009
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Did you mention that you may not like Peggy? I am not sure of your true feelings about her. Would you please speak your mind. Yes, Peggy is trouble for everybody. She really messes things up for our newly weds. I always like hearing from you.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Well written with tension and a definite challenge regarding the two women and how Steven will react.
Liked this: Steven's eyes concentrated on her cleavage, and he forgot what he came to tell her. LOL!!!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Well written with tension and a definite challenge regarding the two women and how Steven will react.
Liked this: Steven's eyes concentrated on her cleavage, and he forgot what he came to tell her. LOL!!!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Charlene0513
To barbara,
A much exasperating time Steven is having with Peggy. Yes I do believe that Li has a point, that Peggy does have a crush on Steve.
Charlene
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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To barbara,
A much exasperating time Steven is having with Peggy. Yes I do believe that Li has a point, that Peggy does have a crush on Steve.
Charlene
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from jimchester
Very engaging from the start. I like that you allude to sexuality without getting overly explicit, although that may change in oher chapters. I don't mind sex as an integral part of the story, but too often it is included just for shock. It is much like a comedian using rough language. Richard Pryor did it because it was an integral part of his story. Andrew Dice Clay did it just to be disgusting. Very interesting, I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Very engaging from the start. I like that you allude to sexuality without getting overly explicit, although that may change in oher chapters. I don't mind sex as an integral part of the story, but too often it is included just for shock. It is much like a comedian using rough language. Richard Pryor did it because it was an integral part of his story. Andrew Dice Clay did it just to be disgusting. Very interesting, I look forward to more.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Tellis
This chapter was very well written and I really enjoyed reading it. Peggy is definately in love with him. I have read some of the other chapters and I need to start from the begining. LoL Just have to find the time.
Tellis
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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This chapter was very well written and I really enjoyed reading it. Peggy is definately in love with him. I have read some of the other chapters and I need to start from the begining. LoL Just have to find the time.
Tellis
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from MitchellScott
This is only the second chapter I have read and it is equally as good as the last. I look forward to reading more of this book. Thanks you.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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This is only the second chapter I have read and it is equally as good as the last. I look forward to reading more of this book. Thanks you.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Nightwind
Well done. Prose are direct and terse, which made reading easy and enjoyable. Nice integration of dialogue and storyteller. Personalities of characters shine. I enjoyed reading. Story is interesting and held my attention.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Well done. Prose are direct and terse, which made reading easy and enjoyable. Nice integration of dialogue and storyteller. Personalities of characters shine. I enjoyed reading. Story is interesting and held my attention.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from misscookie
this is a very inyresting story it is filled with questions, compassion, lust. mystery this is what a story should hve to make a great write. i find no fault in your story.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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this is a very inyresting story it is filled with questions, compassion, lust. mystery this is what a story should hve to make a great write. i find no fault in your story.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Katiesherrill
This was very enjoyable. I like how the characters are building and so is the tension.
I enjoyed the interaction between characters. The dialogue was very easy to follow without any distractions.
Good job.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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This was very enjoyable. I like how the characters are building and so is the tension.
I enjoyed the interaction between characters. The dialogue was very easy to follow without any distractions.
Good job.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another well-written story. A little more sexual tensions adds interest to this chapter. This should get interesting for Steve.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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This is another well-written story. A little more sexual tensions adds interest to this chapter. This should get interesting for Steve.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
