If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Pictures Of You"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
66 total reviews
Comment from AuroraSky
The language of the ocean is just perfect for seafaring folks. Anyone who reads this one, just like The Captain's Log, would be able to discern your bond to the ocean.
Great rhythm and rhyme Grant...
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The language of the ocean is just perfect for seafaring folks. Anyone who reads this one, just like The Captain's Log, would be able to discern your bond to the ocean.
Great rhythm and rhyme Grant...
Comment Written 02-Apr-2006
Comment from Sarah Fleming
I love and admire the clarity you write with. You described this so well that I could see the men on the boat and feel the pain of the speaker. That is good writing.
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I love and admire the clarity you write with. You described this so well that I could see the men on the boat and feel the pain of the speaker. That is good writing.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2004
Comment from puffnagel
hi, sweetie:
another good read, drowning in emotion, the pain literally
screeching from the page, hitting the reader between the
eyes, making them hurt for you - along with you...
lots of love,
mee :-)
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hi, sweetie:
another good read, drowning in emotion, the pain literally
screeching from the page, hitting the reader between the
eyes, making them hurt for you - along with you...
lots of love,
mee :-)
Comment Written 09-Jul-2004
Comment from thinkpink
This was a very good poem although very sad. keep up the good work and I will be sure to read more of your work in the future.
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This was a very good poem although very sad. keep up the good work and I will be sure to read more of your work in the future.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2004
Comment from YoungNY
This was a very good poem. I liked the meaning or reasoning behind it. And it was enjoyable to read. I didn't pick up on the repeated words, but maybe that was the reason why at some points it just didn't flow the way it should have. I think you have to slow your reading down at those parts. Anyway, I don't expect you do anything about it, just thought you would like to know. It's just my opinion anyway, I'm probably wrong. Good Luck.
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This was a very good poem. I liked the meaning or reasoning behind it. And it was enjoyable to read. I didn't pick up on the repeated words, but maybe that was the reason why at some points it just didn't flow the way it should have. I think you have to slow your reading down at those parts. Anyway, I don't expect you do anything about it, just thought you would like to know. It's just my opinion anyway, I'm probably wrong. Good Luck.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2004
Comment from mfwilkie
This was musical to read and conveyed what your wanted to say in a well written piece.
This could be put to music; it's that good and has that feel to it.
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This was musical to read and conveyed what your wanted to say in a well written piece.
This could be put to music; it's that good and has that feel to it.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2004
Comment from Ivy Rose
I love the twist in the ending. Makes this poem so much more effective because it is not just your typical poem of romance. Very well-written, very well-rhymed.
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I love the twist in the ending. Makes this poem so much more effective because it is not just your typical poem of romance. Very well-written, very well-rhymed.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2004
Comment from Marillion
I love the content, Grant, but the lack in meter does create some problems in the smoothness of the read. I think you can be creative AND write in meter, too. You've definitely got the talent for it, brother. Still, a very good poem, hence the rating.
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I love the content, Grant, but the lack in meter does create some problems in the smoothness of the read. I think you can be creative AND write in meter, too. You've definitely got the talent for it, brother. Still, a very good poem, hence the rating.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2004
Comment from bohemianrob
i liked it a lot, being that it was almost advice to myself getting over my ex-fiance. mr. grunty is a very talented writer, and he deserves all the success that comes his way due to his excellent writing. this particular poem he wrote was beautifully written but in a simple sense with an imagination which i liked very much. keep up the good work mr. grunty.
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i liked it a lot, being that it was almost advice to myself getting over my ex-fiance. mr. grunty is a very talented writer, and he deserves all the success that comes his way due to his excellent writing. this particular poem he wrote was beautifully written but in a simple sense with an imagination which i liked very much. keep up the good work mr. grunty.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2004
Comment from kurfess
Hey, alright about the meter--didn't bother me that much anyway. This is a great poem. I liked the way you used the images of being at sea to express your lonliness & being adrift emotionally. Great last line, too--"memories of pictures of you." Thanks.
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Hey, alright about the meter--didn't bother me that much anyway. This is a great poem. I liked the way you used the images of being at sea to express your lonliness & being adrift emotionally. Great last line, too--"memories of pictures of you." Thanks.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2004
