If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Fighting for the People"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
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Comment from puffnagel
greetings, grant:
i know this isn't political but it certainly could be and would be very
successful at it, too. a great read, grant and the message comes
across loud and clear. you are seeming to grow more profound in
your poetry of late and it suits you well! :-)
always,
yer lil divapuff :-)
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greetings, grant:
i know this isn't political but it certainly could be and would be very
successful at it, too. a great read, grant and the message comes
across loud and clear. you are seeming to grow more profound in
your poetry of late and it suits you well! :-)
always,
yer lil divapuff :-)
Comment Written 04-Jul-2004
Comment from dianphillips
Really liked this one. It's interesting the back and forth pull of the whole thing. Surely you're not getting any trouble from the meter police on this one... the flow and meter are impeccable! Great job.
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Really liked this one. It's interesting the back and forth pull of the whole thing. Surely you're not getting any trouble from the meter police on this one... the flow and meter are impeccable! Great job.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2004
Comment from tenkei
Wow, Grunty, just a great piece here. The poem is thought provoking and pumps the reader up. Great rhythm and flow throughout the work. Keep up the good work, man.
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Wow, Grunty, just a great piece here. The poem is thought provoking and pumps the reader up. Great rhythm and flow throughout the work. Keep up the good work, man.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2004
Comment from April B. McLauchlin
This is a wonderfully written poem with a great message. The poem's flow and rhyming were excellent. It is a very enjoyable and invigorating poem to read which is very hard to do with such a very serious message which takes a lot of talent to achieve. This poem is very thought provoking and profound. I will never be offended by your stance, you sound just like me,
don't ever change it! Your stance and conviction make you who you are.
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This is a wonderfully written poem with a great message. The poem's flow and rhyming were excellent. It is a very enjoyable and invigorating poem to read which is very hard to do with such a very serious message which takes a lot of talent to achieve. This poem is very thought provoking and profound. I will never be offended by your stance, you sound just like me,
don't ever change it! Your stance and conviction make you who you are.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2004
Comment from wintersknights
this is a poem with rhythm that is smooth and the flow of the work leads you into the theme of the work. I am reading several things in this which I find myself changing each time I read it.
this means that you have done a good job
wk
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this is a poem with rhythm that is smooth and the flow of the work leads you into the theme of the work. I am reading several things in this which I find myself changing each time I read it.
this means that you have done a good job
wk
Comment Written 04-Jul-2004
Comment from Taelyn
I liked the ending (as well as the rest of the poem). It, more than anything, made me think about every hero it could be about. There's real strength in this piece, the kind you actually talk about in the poem itself. And even though the rhyme scheme wasn't always perfect and the syllables from line to line didn't always match, that doesn't seem to matter at all--because, and excuse me for sounding really corny and cliche in saying this, it has a heart. To be repetitive--inner strength. And, IMHO, that's really what makes a good poem.
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I liked the ending (as well as the rest of the poem). It, more than anything, made me think about every hero it could be about. There's real strength in this piece, the kind you actually talk about in the poem itself. And even though the rhyme scheme wasn't always perfect and the syllables from line to line didn't always match, that doesn't seem to matter at all--because, and excuse me for sounding really corny and cliche in saying this, it has a heart. To be repetitive--inner strength. And, IMHO, that's really what makes a good poem.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2004
Comment from Galahad
Great. Man I love rhyming poems. Free verse is too open and easy. THis stuff takes some freakin' skill. I kept thinkin' Lord of the Rings on this poem. Yeah, those movies were pretty good. Line 12 could be changed to " and I need not a throne." Just because I think your tense changes from present to past. There's a bit more like that in there too. Very enjoyable.
-Galahad
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Great. Man I love rhyming poems. Free verse is too open and easy. THis stuff takes some freakin' skill. I kept thinkin' Lord of the Rings on this poem. Yeah, those movies were pretty good. Line 12 could be changed to " and I need not a throne." Just because I think your tense changes from present to past. There's a bit more like that in there too. Very enjoyable.
-Galahad
Comment Written 03-Jul-2004
Comment from Richard Patterson
While I agree that the reader should be asked to contribute as much to a work as the writer, It is the writer's responsibility to evoke that committment from their audience. The writer is the one who thinks that their point oif view is important... and as the indstigator has to use his words to committ the reader to his cause. Does the wrietr in this case achieve their stated objective? Almost...
The metre, rhyme and rhythm of the work are similar to Aussie bush poetry, and given the author's country of origin it would apprear he's familiar with "The Banjo".
I have to ask though , why beat about the bush as you have? I think the message could have been delived much more succinctly. Waffle,waffle waffle, and then you make your statement. I'd carefully look at the need to use this poetic form...less is more.
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While I agree that the reader should be asked to contribute as much to a work as the writer, It is the writer's responsibility to evoke that committment from their audience. The writer is the one who thinks that their point oif view is important... and as the indstigator has to use his words to committ the reader to his cause. Does the wrietr in this case achieve their stated objective? Almost...
The metre, rhyme and rhythm of the work are similar to Aussie bush poetry, and given the author's country of origin it would apprear he's familiar with "The Banjo".
I have to ask though , why beat about the bush as you have? I think the message could have been delived much more succinctly. Waffle,waffle waffle, and then you make your statement. I'd carefully look at the need to use this poetic form...less is more.
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2004
Comment from Karina J Belkin
Mrgrunty, you can really write poetry. Not only is it profound, but it always enters a place where it has all the meaning in the world. Excellent writing:)
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Mrgrunty, you can really write poetry. Not only is it profound, but it always enters a place where it has all the meaning in the world. Excellent writing:)
Comment Written 03-Jul-2004
Comment from Dell
You are right it does span time and Cromwell came to My mind,
It has a great thought provoking theme without being cryptic and that i liked most, everything else was there to please and it did.
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You are right it does span time and Cromwell came to My mind,
It has a great thought provoking theme without being cryptic and that i liked most, everything else was there to please and it did.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2004
