Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Queenise
An enjoyable chapter, my friend. I like this one and found the humor to be good and light-hearted. It does carry a tinge of sadness with this setting. Still, I found the flow,pace and imagery to be great. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2009
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An enjoyable chapter, my friend. I like this one and found the humor to be good and light-hearted. It does carry a tinge of sadness with this setting. Still, I found the flow,pace and imagery to be great. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 06-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and support.
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My pleasure Barbara. Peace. Queenise
Comment from Aliyaharu
I really enjoyed your story chapter. IT is very intriguing and one can't help but read on once they have started. I can't wait to read more of your writing!
Aliyaharu :)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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I really enjoyed your story chapter. IT is very intriguing and one can't help but read on once they have started. I can't wait to read more of your writing!
Aliyaharu :)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from RebelRose
I'm really enjoying this book and I look forward to the day when they re4alize they are really falling in love with each other and the marriage is not so 'mock'.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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I'm really enjoying this book and I look forward to the day when they re4alize they are really falling in love with each other and the marriage is not so 'mock'.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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you are so right. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Josipher32
This was a well written book chapter. The characters were well-rounded and captivating. The writing was clean and organized. The pace was a good one and kept my attention.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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This was a well written book chapter. The characters were well-rounded and captivating. The writing was clean and organized. The pace was a good one and kept my attention.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Laidy
i thought this was a great chapter! i feel that you are a most tallented writter and this chapter really shows that to others. you wrote this marvoulous.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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i thought this was a great chapter! i feel that you are a most tallented writter and this chapter really shows that to others. you wrote this marvoulous.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your continued support.
Comment from minopavlic
that was a fantastic chapter,I couldn't get enough.I literally lose myself within the story,or should I say,I become a part of it.Everything about your writing is very unique.Your characters are truly brought to life.Also it's appropriate reading for everyone and your story portrays many values,virtues.
Believe me I wanted to give you 6 stars,the most elaborate story I've read on this site by far.An awesome piece of work,well deserving high honors.I've written and published what many feel is an incredible story,but if I only had your flare.I can't wait to see more
Warm regards
No_obstacle
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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that was a fantastic chapter,I couldn't get enough.I literally lose myself within the story,or should I say,I become a part of it.Everything about your writing is very unique.Your characters are truly brought to life.Also it's appropriate reading for everyone and your story portrays many values,virtues.
Believe me I wanted to give you 6 stars,the most elaborate story I've read on this site by far.An awesome piece of work,well deserving high honors.I've written and published what many feel is an incredible story,but if I only had your flare.I can't wait to see more
Warm regards
No_obstacle
Comment Written 04-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2009
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Thank you for your review. I truly appreciate your kind words.
Comment from christopherjl
This is really good. I really liked the part where she said "I got bored in my room and decided to try it." I think so many of us have been in that situation before but never acted on it! It really pleases me as a reader to learn about a character that would act on the things I only think about doing! No suggestions, great job.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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This is really good. I really liked the part where she said "I got bored in my room and decided to try it." I think so many of us have been in that situation before but never acted on it! It really pleases me as a reader to learn about a character that would act on the things I only think about doing! No suggestions, great job.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Summer Falls
I laughed out loud when Leya tried to impress Steven and ended up having to call for help. Hilarious! It was endearing. I could picture her jumping back when he threw the ball--heck, I could see it all. You wrote this chapter so well, Barbara.
There was only one thing that took me out of the story. I didn't realize there were others in the gym until the others began to tease her. Reading it a second time, I see you gave a clue by stating she found a vacant treadmill--but you may want to inject something like one of them giving her a wink, wary smile, eyeing her ... whatever.
I think it is nice the men are beginning to accept her. I felt somewhat sorry for her. I know she knew it was a mock marriage ... but is her growing feelings for Steven coming to the surface? hmmmm
I think Steven should take off his shirt in the gym, but that is just me ... I want to see those rock hard abs, a trickle of sweat dripping to his waistband ... ahhh. lol
Okay, I gotta go find Galeron now. Whee
Summer
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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I laughed out loud when Leya tried to impress Steven and ended up having to call for help. Hilarious! It was endearing. I could picture her jumping back when he threw the ball--heck, I could see it all. You wrote this chapter so well, Barbara.
There was only one thing that took me out of the story. I didn't realize there were others in the gym until the others began to tease her. Reading it a second time, I see you gave a clue by stating she found a vacant treadmill--but you may want to inject something like one of them giving her a wink, wary smile, eyeing her ... whatever.
I think it is nice the men are beginning to accept her. I felt somewhat sorry for her. I know she knew it was a mock marriage ... but is her growing feelings for Steven coming to the surface? hmmmm
I think Steven should take off his shirt in the gym, but that is just me ... I want to see those rock hard abs, a trickle of sweat dripping to his waistband ... ahhh. lol
Okay, I gotta go find Galeron now. Whee
Summer
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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Galeron, oh my. Although Steven is hot, but not the same. Galeron is more in your face and Steven is more subtle.
My Steven said you tried to contact me. I don't know how to instant message. Can you give me lessons.
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Well, Barbara, l I have no idea why the instant messaging is on the XBOX! No, my dear, I cannot help you. lol. I am lost. Maybe Steven (the son, not character in your book,) can help you with that. lmao
Summer
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He's not understanding it either. I have no idea. All I can figure out is he's using my account for his x-box. I wonder what I need to do to get him his own account.
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I barely know what an XBox is ... so I am no help. :)
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It's stupid game system. He plays a football game on line through that system.
Comment from GerryMacNeil
Excellent story, and very well written. I enjoyed the comfortable chit-chat in the exercise room--believable and natural--and the bit of humor was a nice touch! Good job!
GerryMacNeil
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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Excellent story, and very well written. I enjoyed the comfortable chit-chat in the exercise room--believable and natural--and the bit of humor was a nice touch! Good job!
GerryMacNeil
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from FredCollingwood
The sexual tension is increasing. I'm beginning to get to know your characters better. Great ending--all beautiful women are dangerous (but we don't care.)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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The sexual tension is increasing. I'm beginning to get to know your characters better. Great ending--all beautiful women are dangerous (but we don't care.)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2009
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I know, you guys fall for them every time. It never fails. Thank you for your review.
