Woodland Secrets Part Two
fantasy ottava rima - see author's notes90 total reviews
Comment from Amicus
You are on a roll, Brooke, with this ottava rima thing by making it a great vehicle for your lovely descriptive writing and for your characteristically strong end rhymes. The flow is smooth as you portray a fantasy wedding that is delightful. So what's next...Disneyland? Happy Happy Happy forever in (shudder) fairyland? or the mundane ordinary bliss of most well matched creatures? I look forward to tomorrow's installment.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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You are on a roll, Brooke, with this ottava rima thing by making it a great vehicle for your lovely descriptive writing and for your characteristically strong end rhymes. The flow is smooth as you portray a fantasy wedding that is delightful. So what's next...Disneyland? Happy Happy Happy forever in (shudder) fairyland? or the mundane ordinary bliss of most well matched creatures? I look forward to tomorrow's installment.
Nice job.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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My little girl loves Disneyland - she gets season passes - you wouldn't be making fun, would you?? You're already skating on thing ice with the whole fairy thing. LOL Thanks, Amicus. Brooke
Comment from djcoomes
A vivid magical picture. At least for me. You paint it so beautifully with your words. I love "fairy tales". I wish that I had your discipline to write in the strict poetic formats that you are so talented at creating.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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A vivid magical picture. At least for me. You paint it so beautifully with your words. I love "fairy tales". I wish that I had your discipline to write in the strict poetic formats that you are so talented at creating.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Darlene - it DOES take discipline, for sure. :-) Brooke
Comment from L.lora
Brooke, I just got lost in
this wonderfully delicate
poetic tale. It has to be
a favorite with your daughter,
I read it to my granbabies and
they just thought it was the
best ever. Excellently well
crafted. I don't think you
needed to post in two sections, you
could have posted it all at once
and you would have been fine..it
is such a delicious dreamy read.
no nits...Lora
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Brooke, I just got lost in
this wonderfully delicate
poetic tale. It has to be
a favorite with your daughter,
I read it to my granbabies and
they just thought it was the
best ever. Excellently well
crafted. I don't think you
needed to post in two sections, you
could have posted it all at once
and you would have been fine..it
is such a delicious dreamy read.
no nits...Lora
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Lora, thank you - she has not read it yet but I do hope she will love it :-) I am posting in sections because I only wrote two verses yesterday and then read two verses today. It takes FOREVER to write them! LOL Two more tomorrow and I am done! Brooke
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I just love it, it would be great in a book...L
Comment from tonydem
Lovely advancement of this little fairy tale, Brooke. Now on to the reception. I have a question though. I know he's a king but king of what. Humans or toads or some other creature. Just curious. Or do I use my imagination. Cause if that's the case, the receptions at the playboy mansion. LOL
Tony
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Lovely advancement of this little fairy tale, Brooke. Now on to the reception. I have a question though. I know he's a king but king of what. Humans or toads or some other creature. Just curious. Or do I use my imagination. Cause if that's the case, the receptions at the playboy mansion. LOL
Tony
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Tony, thank you. Well, he's marrying a fairy princess, so I assumed people would assume he was a fairy king. I don't even want to think about a coupling between a fairy who fits on a snail and a human guy! Yuck. LOL And King of the Toads??? I am sorry to sound prejudiced, but this is a pretty pretty fairy here - she can do better than a toad! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So complicated for this small brain of mine. I'm glad there's people like you that can keep up with it, so people like me can enjoy reading it. Once again you have done a wonderful job.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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So complicated for this small brain of mine. I'm glad there's people like you that can keep up with it, so people like me can enjoy reading it. Once again you have done a wonderful job.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, Barbara :-) You're more than kind. Brooke
Comment from R. Scott C.
Great work. I love to read this type of fantasy, and I admit that I have tried to write it with no success at all. The imagery is amazing and the characters are well fantastic. Will look for more in the next couple of days.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Great work. I love to read this type of fantasy, and I admit that I have tried to write it with no success at all. The imagery is amazing and the characters are well fantastic. Will look for more in the next couple of days.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thank you, R. Scott - what a lovely, encouraging comment! Brooke
Comment from Rvaltaysesd
Such joy allowed no room for feud nor fear
Ugh! that verse!
Very good poem, I liked enough, the first and second parts are very good, very good poem, you write amazing!, Greetings Rvaltaysesd
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Such joy allowed no room for feud nor fear
Ugh! that verse!
Very good poem, I liked enough, the first and second parts are very good, very good poem, you write amazing!, Greetings Rvaltaysesd
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Rvaltaysesd, thank you for your kind comments :-) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
definitely a beautiful second part. made me smile and giggle. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
so there will be a part three. good.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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brooke,
definitely a beautiful second part. made me smile and giggle. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent.
so there will be a part three. good.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Barbara, thank you. So glad this one caused you to smile :-) Brooke
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brooke,
you are very welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from mstad55
Sometimes I think you peer into my wardrobe to find a fitting outfit for you characters. I haven't had my buttermilk organza lace with pearls on for next to forever. I like the story, keep it rolling. I am being patient, see. Mike
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Sometimes I think you peer into my wardrobe to find a fitting outfit for you characters. I haven't had my buttermilk organza lace with pearls on for next to forever. I like the story, keep it rolling. I am being patient, see. Mike
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Oh, Mike - I am now stuck with this visual of you in organza lace and pearls, and I don't know how to get rid of it! LOL Thank you, dear little brother :-) Brooke
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I've never tried laughing myself to sleep. Let me know how that works out for you.
Comment from Gramma Kathy
Once again, sweetly elegant. I enjoyed my brief sojourn with the woodland folk in their time of rejoicing. Thanks for the glimpse into such a beautiful realm!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Once again, sweetly elegant. I enjoyed my brief sojourn with the woodland folk in their time of rejoicing. Thanks for the glimpse into such a beautiful realm!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thanks, Kathy - your visits and comments are so lovely this evening :-)
