Woodland Secrets Part Two
fantasy ottava rima - see author's notes90 total reviews
Comment from malachi1206
Good poem enjoyed this even if I did miss part 1 this was put together well and had a good flow to it the rhyme was good and I wouldn't change anything malachi1206
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Good poem enjoyed this even if I did miss part 1 this was put together well and had a good flow to it the rhyme was good and I wouldn't change anything malachi1206
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Malachi, all three parts are currently posted and all still promoted - I hope you'll enjoy the entire poem :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
Comment from Deejharrington
Beautiful! You make the words come alive. You should find a illustrator and make a wonderful book! Children and adults would love this, Brooke!
deb
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Beautiful! You make the words come alive. You should find a illustrator and make a wonderful book! Children and adults would love this, Brooke!
deb
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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OH, I would LOVE to have an illustrator :-) Thanks. Brooke
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke...I like this part two as much as I did the first. Lovely words and rhyme makes it pleasure to review. I must give you a standing ovation for attempting such a feat....bravo.....blessings....chey
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Hi Brooke...I like this part two as much as I did the first. Lovely words and rhyme makes it pleasure to review. I must give you a standing ovation for attempting such a feat....bravo.....blessings....chey
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Chey. Again, you are a sweetheart for being so positive and encouraging :-) Brooke
Comment from laurelp
As always your use of the English language to describe a scene or emotion is quite beautiful. I missed reading your poetry while I was off line moving. And all though I should be unpacking, I couldn't resist a little temptation to read your work again. It is truly a joy to be able to read your words once more.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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As always your use of the English language to describe a scene or emotion is quite beautiful. I missed reading your poetry while I was off line moving. And all though I should be unpacking, I couldn't resist a little temptation to read your work again. It is truly a joy to be able to read your words once more.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thanks, Laurel. :-) You are sweet to say that! Brooke
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Very well done again beautiful descriptions that are unfolding very well a very whimsical work I enjoyed well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Very well done again beautiful descriptions that are unfolding very well a very whimsical work I enjoyed well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Fuller - I'm glad you enjoyed the second section and hope you like the third as well :-) Brooke
Comment from jason456
Brooke,
You've done it again. I think you could put all this together and make an amazing and wonderful youthful fantasy book. I think there is another one I haven't read yet. Love it.
Patti
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Brooke,
You've done it again. I think you could put all this together and make an amazing and wonderful youthful fantasy book. I think there is another one I haven't read yet. Love it.
Patti
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Patti - so glad you enjoyed this story :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Great poem, descriptive, flowing verse and wonderful imagery. This has always been my favourite form and the iambic pentameter gives a great rhythmn. I shall look forward to the next Part. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Great poem, descriptive, flowing verse and wonderful imagery. This has always been my favourite form and the iambic pentameter gives a great rhythmn. I shall look forward to the next Part. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Patrick - so glad you like the form and the story :-) Brooke
Comment from sara-beth
This continues in beautiful woodland style! I love the imagery you create with words like buttermilk, organza and saffron-the scene is so vividly portrayed. Also, it's like a little world you've created, where the characters are hoping for peace, (just like you!) :)
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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This continues in beautiful woodland style! I love the imagery you create with words like buttermilk, organza and saffron-the scene is so vividly portrayed. Also, it's like a little world you've created, where the characters are hoping for peace, (just like you!) :)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Thank you, Sara-beth. Yep, I'm an old hippie, and we just love our peace-loving fairies :-) Brooke
Comment from FredCollingwood
I feel like every review I write for one of your poems is redundant. How many different ways can I tell you how much I enjoy them?
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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I feel like every review I write for one of your poems is redundant. How many different ways can I tell you how much I enjoy them?
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Fred, redundancy is allowed when the comments are good :-) LOL Thank you, my friend. Brooke
Comment from leesm
Brooke, this second part is even better than the first (I can't wait to see the final two stanzas). You have so many great lines and images (and written within such formal rules of meter and rhyme), such as:
"Each maiden wore a frock of spider's silk
that shimmered in the gleaming sun's caress"
Stunning imagery and word usage!
Very enjoyable to read. Thanks.
-Lee
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Brooke, this second part is even better than the first (I can't wait to see the final two stanzas). You have so many great lines and images (and written within such formal rules of meter and rhyme), such as:
"Each maiden wore a frock of spider's silk
that shimmered in the gleaming sun's caress"
Stunning imagery and word usage!
Very enjoyable to read. Thanks.
-Lee
Comment Written 01-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2009
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Lee, thank you!! The final two stanzas are also now posted. :-) You are most generous and encouraging, dear friend :-) Brooke
