Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Summer"A book of a mixture of stories
37 total reviews
Comment from pixiemillie
Another very well-written, interesting and enjoyable write from you, Carol. How appropriate the baby would be called 'Summer'. Lamont will be so pleased to hear about the birth of his child. Love the section where Tania visits the grave of her grandmother- -those days- -longing they were here again. thank you so much.
Excellent format, love the bold font which makes for an easy read. Story line is followed so well and makes this an enjoyable read. thanks you. I didn't spy anything awry.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2009
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Another very well-written, interesting and enjoyable write from you, Carol. How appropriate the baby would be called 'Summer'. Lamont will be so pleased to hear about the birth of his child. Love the section where Tania visits the grave of her grandmother- -those days- -longing they were here again. thank you so much.
Excellent format, love the bold font which makes for an easy read. Story line is followed so well and makes this an enjoyable read. thanks you. I didn't spy anything awry.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2009
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Pixie
Thanks for enjoying my story and appreciated the character line. I too especially wanted to make that connection between Tania and her grandmother. I am glad that you found pleasure in the read. CArol
Comment from Sasha
This is lovely. Beautiful strong, vivid descriptions that provide marvelous imagery for the reader. I like the gentle nature of the story. Hard times yet filled with moments of pleasant conversations and kindness between the characters. I am not one to look for or find spags so I won't even mentions them other than as far as I can tell, I didn't see any. Very nice work with this one. I enjoyed this very much.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2009
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This is lovely. Beautiful strong, vivid descriptions that provide marvelous imagery for the reader. I like the gentle nature of the story. Hard times yet filled with moments of pleasant conversations and kindness between the characters. I am not one to look for or find spags so I won't even mentions them other than as far as I can tell, I didn't see any. Very nice work with this one. I enjoyed this very much.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2009
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Sash
I enjoyed writing this one as well. I liked the connection between all the characters and Tania relating to her grandmother even after her death. It was a feel good write. Thanks for the review. CArol
Comment from dmjones
Hi Carol again, A nice story. I was a little worried the pains were going to kill her so a nice twist at the end.
A couple of things to look at:
With first light, Tania had(delete had) gathered
(something's missing)She nibbled at the tuna sandwich, but soon replaced (it?) in her basket.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2009
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Hi Carol again, A nice story. I was a little worried the pains were going to kill her so a nice twist at the end.
A couple of things to look at:
With first light, Tania had(delete had) gathered
(something's missing)She nibbled at the tuna sandwich, but soon replaced (it?) in her basket.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2009
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Donna
Thank you for your review. I am glad that you enjoyed.Thanks for catching the nits too. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is a nice story. It sounds as though there is an family like relationship between the Creightons and their farm help. This story certainly brings out the summer theme. I could almost feel the heat. I have a granddaughter named Summer. She was born in July.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2009
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This is a nice story. It sounds as though there is an family like relationship between the Creightons and their farm help. This story certainly brings out the summer theme. I could almost feel the heat. I have a granddaughter named Summer. She was born in July.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2009
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Beth
I thought Summer was a beautiful name (like your granddaughter) and fit the theme of the story. Glad you like the story. Thanks for the kind review. CArol
Comment from wierdgrace
What a wonderful story, with a wonderful ending and the sweet baby, emotional, structure with wonderful characters, and a perfect setting for the summertime, good luck in the contest.
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What a wonderful story, with a wonderful ending and the sweet baby, emotional, structure with wonderful characters, and a perfect setting for the summertime, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2009
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Wierdgrace
I appreciate the vote of confidence. I enjoyed writing the story but wasn't sure if it was what they were looking for or not. Thanks for the review. CArol
Comment from FredCollingwood
Two summers in this one, and they're both beautiful. Your beautiful descriptions brought me back to my youth when summer meant something.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Two summers in this one, and they're both beautiful. Your beautiful descriptions brought me back to my youth when summer meant something.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
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Fred
How simply wonderful of you to connect with my story. I truly appreciate your kind comments. CArol
Comment from Sarabran
A really beautiful story. I enjoyed it so much. Summer such a lovely name for a baby girl. you painted a picture with your descriptive words.I could see this story becoming a novel. an enjoyable read. Sara :)
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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A really beautiful story. I enjoyed it so much. Summer such a lovely name for a baby girl. you painted a picture with your descriptive words.I could see this story becoming a novel. an enjoyable read. Sara :)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
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Sara
There you go again boosting my ego. Truly appreciate your kind words. Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Too beautiful for words.
She enjoyed the solitude of morning, (This was my favorite time of the morning. I would walk my black and my yellow labs and watch the sun rise. It was so peaceful.
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Too beautiful for words.
She enjoyed the solitude of morning, (This was my favorite time of the morning. I would walk my black and my yellow labs and watch the sun rise. It was so peaceful.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
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Barbara
I too prefer morning above any other time of day. Sitting by the waterfall or the river and just enjoying the quiet peaceful solitude. I am blown away that you enjoyed this story so much and blessed me with your stars. Thank you so so much. Carol
Comment from Shirley B
This is a beautiful story. I felt like I was reading a modern version of "gone with the wind". That really is a compliment because that is my favorite movie. This was just a 'feel good ' story and I loved it. Thank you. Shirley
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This is a beautiful story. I felt like I was reading a modern version of "gone with the wind". That really is a compliment because that is my favorite movie. This was just a 'feel good ' story and I loved it. Thank you. Shirley
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
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Shirley
Hey girl, I've seen Gone With The Wind in six different cities..just because I loved Rhett Butler and Scarlett. I certainly will take it as a compliment. Thank you so much. Carol
Comment from Belinda
You have painted a beautiful and serene picture of Tania's surroundings and her work at the Creighthon's. I can also feel the heat and the upset stomach. And you are such a good writer to hide the fact that Tania is pregnant and will soon bear a baby! Good read (welcome to 'Summer').
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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You have painted a beautiful and serene picture of Tania's surroundings and her work at the Creighthon's. I can also feel the heat and the upset stomach. And you are such a good writer to hide the fact that Tania is pregnant and will soon bear a baby! Good read (welcome to 'Summer').
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
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Belinda
I am so pleased that you enjoyed this little story. I just wanted a different take on summer and this kind of grew out of it. Thanks again. CArol
