Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Chapter 3 Part 5"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from Mengleoh67
Awwwww that was sad! I hope they do it again right when they realize they love each other!
Oh okay sorry... Another fabulous chapter. Great character interaction (well cold and calculated, but great since that's how the scene was supposed to be). The story is moving along at just the right pace and I can't wait to read the next chapter!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2009
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Awwwww that was sad! I hope they do it again right when they realize they love each other!
Oh okay sorry... Another fabulous chapter. Great character interaction (well cold and calculated, but great since that's how the scene was supposed to be). The story is moving along at just the right pace and I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Nicnac
Well, wasn't that a romantic little wedding. haha
I don't expect they'll be enjoying a honeymoon... Especially after an impersonal peck on the cheek. (Not that I mind one bit. I know that Steven is saving himself for me.) haha
It makes me wonder if Leya isn't wanting more from Steven. Was she hoping he would not be able to resist her? She either has the hots for him, or she is up to no good and is a double crossing liar. I guess time will tell...
*Hearing a helicopter overheard (overhead)
Well done, Barbara. You have conveyed Steven's feelings of confusion very nicely. He doesn't want to believe the worst, but isn't turning a blind eye either. Smart guy.
Nic
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2009
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Well, wasn't that a romantic little wedding. haha
I don't expect they'll be enjoying a honeymoon... Especially after an impersonal peck on the cheek. (Not that I mind one bit. I know that Steven is saving himself for me.) haha
It makes me wonder if Leya isn't wanting more from Steven. Was she hoping he would not be able to resist her? She either has the hots for him, or she is up to no good and is a double crossing liar. I guess time will tell...
*Hearing a helicopter overheard (overhead)
Well done, Barbara. You have conveyed Steven's feelings of confusion very nicely. He doesn't want to believe the worst, but isn't turning a blind eye either. Smart guy.
Nic
Comment Written 02-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2009
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We all know Steven's saving himself for you, why wouldn't he? Thank you.... I love hearing from you and catching my typo.
Comment from Shirley B
This is very good. It makes me want more. Which for you is always a good thing. I am always trying to guess what is going to happen next. This storyline is very interesting. I always hear "Godfather", music when I read it. Happy writing. You are doing a great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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This is very good. It makes me want more. Which for you is always a good thing. I am always trying to guess what is going to happen next. This storyline is very interesting. I always hear "Godfather", music when I read it. Happy writing. You are doing a great job. Shirley
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate you kind words. "Godfather" music, oh dear.
Comment from Gary D. Hardy
I continue to like this story, Poor steven, can't catch a break. But that depends on whoms point of view you use. How pretty did you say she was? Lol My real question is, do they fall in love and get married for real? Anyway I think your doing a great job here. Many regards-------------------Gary.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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I continue to like this story, Poor steven, can't catch a break. But that depends on whoms point of view you use. How pretty did you say she was? Lol My real question is, do they fall in love and get married for real? Anyway I think your doing a great job here. Many regards-------------------Gary.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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This lady is a hot little number, does that count?? Thank you for your review.
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Your very welcome. Now I don't feel so sorry for Steven.-Lol.-----------------------Gary
Comment from kingskid
This looks like a very good and enjoyable read. I will have to backtrack a bit to pick up the story, but this looks full of promise. I love short chapters, so much easier to read. Your characters are all realistic and I can see you know your subject. Well done, look forward to getting up to date.
kingskid
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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This looks like a very good and enjoyable read. I will have to backtrack a bit to pick up the story, but this looks full of promise. I love short chapters, so much easier to read. Your characters are all realistic and I can see you know your subject. Well done, look forward to getting up to date.
kingskid
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review and you kind words.
Comment from BPL76
Thank you for taking all of us readers on this adventure in dream and in reality. It had a very warm feel to it. I enjoyed each line your carefully penned.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you for taking all of us readers on this adventure in dream and in reality. It had a very warm feel to it. I enjoyed each line your carefully penned.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words,
Comment from medicnate
Nice story. SPAG free and very entertaining. I enjoyed the internal dialogue and the subtle relationships developed between the protagonist and the other characters. Great job here.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Nice story. SPAG free and very entertaining. I enjoyed the internal dialogue and the subtle relationships developed between the protagonist and the other characters. Great job here.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words
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No problem.
If you haven't had the opportunity, I'd love to hear your thoughts on my story The Pit. I hope you like it.
~medicnate~
Comment from Belinda
So finally Steven got married and had that wedding kiss... I see that this story is progresssing and Steven might be a little in love with Leya. We'll see in the next chapter then...
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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So finally Steven got married and had that wedding kiss... I see that this story is progresssing and Steven might be a little in love with Leya. We'll see in the next chapter then...
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Queenise
I thought this story was good with a tinge of mystery still in the air. The pace is good and the flow is also. It makes you ask questions about the people you surround yourself with. You become engrossed in the story and it has that life like quality that is hard to put down. Would recommend to others. Looking forward to the next chapter. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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I thought this story was good with a tinge of mystery still in the air. The pace is good and the flow is also. It makes you ask questions about the people you surround yourself with. You become engrossed in the story and it has that life like quality that is hard to put down. Would recommend to others. Looking forward to the next chapter. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I always appreciate hearing from you.
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My pleasure friend. Good night. Queenise
Comment from RebelRose
A short but interesting chapter. Maybe you should have expounded more on the actual ceremony to make it more interesting. After all, everyone was waiting for this.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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A short but interesting chapter. Maybe you should have expounded more on the actual ceremony to make it more interesting. After all, everyone was waiting for this.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2009
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True but I wanted it portrayed as a business transaction and very impressional. Thank you for your review.
