Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Chapter 3 Part 4"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good flow, good storyline and i can't wait to see when the marriage goes through. enjoying the storyline and having something to read
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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this is very well written with good flow, good storyline and i can't wait to see when the marriage goes through. enjoying the storyline and having something to read
Comment Written 23-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind reviews.
Comment from Queenise
Barbara I decided to go back and read this chapter and I must say, I'm so glad that I did. It was entertaining and suspenseful,dialogue is good and flow and pace wonderful. Your imagery is vivid and you have just created a great read. Blessings. Queenise
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2009
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Barbara I decided to go back and read this chapter and I must say, I'm so glad that I did. It was entertaining and suspenseful,dialogue is good and flow and pace wonderful. Your imagery is vivid and you have just created a great read. Blessings. Queenise
Comment Written 06-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2009
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Thank you for the review. I hope I don't disappoint you.
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You're welcome. Queenise
Comment from maggieJo
I hope I remember to press SAVE this time ! :-)
I appreciate your writing more and more barbara. I hope you find a publisher and will be on store shelves quickly. There is humor, love and tension in your story. Each chapter draws me deeper into the story. On to the next one!
maggiejo
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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I hope I remember to press SAVE this time ! :-)
I appreciate your writing more and more barbara. I hope you find a publisher and will be on store shelves quickly. There is humor, love and tension in your story. Each chapter draws me deeper into the story. On to the next one!
maggiejo
Comment Written 25-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is very interesting. The idea of a phony marriage is very intriguing, and i will really like to know how it all ended. well written and edited. kudos
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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This is very interesting. The idea of a phony marriage is very intriguing, and i will really like to know how it all ended. well written and edited. kudos
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review, I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from ragaro
im not a fan of this kind of stories, but anyway i think is preetty well written and i will follow the next beacuse i think im learning from you
Congrats
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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im not a fan of this kind of stories, but anyway i think is preetty well written and i will follow the next beacuse i think im learning from you
Congrats
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review and your kind words.
Comment from Donovan
Sounds a lot like my marriage...was pre arranged...marry her or I shoot. Intriguing and kept my interest I think the characters are developing. I especially like the dialogue, moves right along, good style.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Sounds a lot like my marriage...was pre arranged...marry her or I shoot. Intriguing and kept my interest I think the characters are developing. I especially like the dialogue, moves right along, good style.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Humrmeplz
Having not read the previous chapters, this one certainly made me curious to read the others. Although arranged marriage is not a new concept, your take on it gives the urgency and deceit that I believe you are hoping to portray. I'll be looking for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Having not read the previous chapters, this one certainly made me curious to read the others. Although arranged marriage is not a new concept, your take on it gives the urgency and deceit that I believe you are hoping to portray. I'll be looking for the next chapter.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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I hope the readers so urgency and deceit. Thank you for yoru review and kid words.
Comment from grassroots08
What on earth have I stepped into. It feels like an episode of As the Stomach Churns or some other day time soap. Well I'm in deeper than I ought to be and if it's anything like quicksand sucking me in, I better just go with the flow of it, as struggling will take me deeper. I really think Steve and I are both in quicksand now! Good piece of writing, I enjoyed your thoughts here.
You said: "so Steven' team has been tasked to protect her." Did you mean Steven team or Steven's team? Also "been tasked" sounds a bit rough here, maybe rewording it might help. Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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What on earth have I stepped into. It feels like an episode of As the Stomach Churns or some other day time soap. Well I'm in deeper than I ought to be and if it's anything like quicksand sucking me in, I better just go with the flow of it, as struggling will take me deeper. I really think Steve and I are both in quicksand now! Good piece of writing, I enjoyed your thoughts here.
You said: "so Steven' team has been tasked to protect her." Did you mean Steven team or Steven's team? Also "been tasked" sounds a bit rough here, maybe rewording it might help. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 22-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Thank you for catching those. I will correct them ASAP
Comment from Shane Marquardt
Drawing straws to marry a hot Latino woman. I need to find a new line of work :)
Good work. I am enjoying the read.
Steven blinked, attempting to avoid Leya's eyes, and placed his hand on the door jam and leaned against it. (edited this a bit, see what you think)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Drawing straws to marry a hot Latino woman. I need to find a new line of work :)
Good work. I am enjoying the read.
Steven blinked, attempting to avoid Leya's eyes, and placed his hand on the door jam and leaned against it. (edited this a bit, see what you think)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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I always enjoy your input. Thank you. I'll check with the task force and see if they need another agent. I heard they were hiring.
Comment from Brindle.T
A flawless piece of writing that flowed well and the dialogue moved the plot forward at a fair pace...I do like the idea of the drawing of lots for such a venture...lol
Good work
Tony
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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A flawless piece of writing that flowed well and the dialogue moved the plot forward at a fair pace...I do like the idea of the drawing of lots for such a venture...lol
Good work
Tony
Comment Written 22-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2009
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Why do my men fans like this idea? I can promise you that when Leya finds out she isn't at all happy.
