Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Chapter 3 Part 2"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
oh, so that is why she's acting like that. i knew there was a reason. just flowing along reading these chapters and enjoying it. i will talk to you after the next chapter
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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oh, so that is why she's acting like that. i knew there was a reason. just flowing along reading these chapters and enjoying it. i will talk to you after the next chapter
Comment Written 23-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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I am glad some of your questions are being answered.
Comment from ladybird
Ah, you said all would be revealed as to why she was coming on so strong, now we have it.A well written chapter with good dialogue.
She stared at the wall behind (them). Should this read 'behind him'
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2009
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Ah, you said all would be revealed as to why she was coming on so strong, now we have it.A well written chapter with good dialogue.
She stared at the wall behind (them). Should this read 'behind him'
Comment Written 15-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2009
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Yhank you for your review. I appreciate your support.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Mengleoh67
Holy bat quano! I see now what you mean by she has a problem! An excellent chapter! I found myself laughing hysterically despite the drama, poor Steven LOL
The character's remain well developed and entertaining, their interaction and dialogue is smooth and believable. The storyline flows well and is moving at just the right pace. I'm not sure how I missed this chapter, but I can't wait to read the next one!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2009
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Holy bat quano! I see now what you mean by she has a problem! An excellent chapter! I found myself laughing hysterically despite the drama, poor Steven LOL
The character's remain well developed and entertaining, their interaction and dialogue is smooth and believable. The storyline flows well and is moving at just the right pace. I'm not sure how I missed this chapter, but I can't wait to read the next one!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2009
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Thank you. I love reading your reviews, your personality shows through. Thank you.
Comment from Summer Falls
Whoa! Lmao, I could just see her glancing to his crotch! I cracked up. Okay, I know it was supposed to be a serious moment, but dang! That is funny!!
What a wonderful twist in the story. This did not have a bit of spag in this story, Barbara. I am sorry I fell behind in reviewing,but things have been a bit nutty.
I am off to the next chapter---again, excellent chapter.
Summer
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2009
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Whoa! Lmao, I could just see her glancing to his crotch! I cracked up. Okay, I know it was supposed to be a serious moment, but dang! That is funny!!
What a wonderful twist in the story. This did not have a bit of spag in this story, Barbara. I am sorry I fell behind in reviewing,but things have been a bit nutty.
I am off to the next chapter---again, excellent chapter.
Summer
Comment Written 13-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2009
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Thank you. Hey I hear you are a true southern belle. Who would have guessed??? I always enjoy hearing from you.
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Lmao! Have you been talking to our Maverick? Yeah, I was born in the south, but I told him I am too much of a rebellious soul to be any kind of Belle. Haha.
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I'm sure. I bet Galeron could take care of the rebellious streak.
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I doubt it, he never tamed Ruby! lol
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Very true. I never pictured you as a true rebel
Comment from greenscarf30
I don't like the topic but it is well written. I do not like drugs and drug cartels or arranged marriages.
It is well written, though and that deserve so credit.
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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I don't like the topic but it is well written. I do not like drugs and drug cartels or arranged marriages.
It is well written, though and that deserve so credit.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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I'm sorry you don't like it. If you had read from the beginning, you would know I don't either and will continue to show the evils of all of them
Comment from Queenise
Hi friend,
In a nut-shell, I'm ready to read the next chapter. I think you have a good story on your hand that many will
enjoy reading. I was drawn in from the start. Love the flow. Keep on writing. Queenise
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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Hi friend,
In a nut-shell, I'm ready to read the next chapter. I think you have a good story on your hand that many will
enjoy reading. I was drawn in from the start. Love the flow. Keep on writing. Queenise
Comment Written 12-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review and kinds words. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Mariea
Another good chapter Barbara. Characters and dialogue kept consistent throughout. No 'clutter' or punctuation problems. Looking for the next chapter.
Enjoy your day
Regards Mia
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Another good chapter Barbara. Characters and dialogue kept consistent throughout. No 'clutter' or punctuation problems. Looking for the next chapter.
Enjoy your day
Regards Mia
Comment Written 10-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your continued supoort. I will post as soon as I get enough reviewing points to post.
Comment from Nicnac
Leya must be doing something wrong!
Believe me, if it were ME seducing Steven, he would be shaking and drooling, would not be offering me a shirt to put on - and he certainly wouldn't be fighting my charms.
haha (You can tell him that if you want. haha)
Well, the story of her having to marry Carlos explains a little of why she is trying to get into Steven's pants. haha
She glanced at his crotch. <--This cracked me up for some reason. ;)
I loved this chapter, Barbara. Great writing!
No suggestions.
Nic
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Leya must be doing something wrong!
Believe me, if it were ME seducing Steven, he would be shaking and drooling, would not be offering me a shirt to put on - and he certainly wouldn't be fighting my charms.
haha (You can tell him that if you want. haha)
Well, the story of her having to marry Carlos explains a little of why she is trying to get into Steven's pants. haha
She glanced at his crotch. <--This cracked me up for some reason. ;)
I loved this chapter, Barbara. Great writing!
No suggestions.
Nic
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2009
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Thank you. I'll let Steven know. Thank you again. I always enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from Amicus
Barbara, this is very well written. I have no idea who these people are or why they act as they do here because this is my first dip into your novel but you capture my interest right at the start of the chapter and hold it through to the end. The dialogue is credible and reveals both plot and character and the descrptive writing is succinct and smooth flowing. You manage to pack a lot of information about these folks and the background plot in a very brief chapter. Good work.
The ending leaves me wanting to know how Saint Steven is going to pull this one off and if this lady is being honest with him.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Barbara, this is very well written. I have no idea who these people are or why they act as they do here because this is my first dip into your novel but you capture my interest right at the start of the chapter and hold it through to the end. The dialogue is credible and reveals both plot and character and the descrptive writing is succinct and smooth flowing. You manage to pack a lot of information about these folks and the background plot in a very brief chapter. Good work.
The ending leaves me wanting to know how Saint Steven is going to pull this one off and if this lady is being honest with him.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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We will have to wait and see. Thank you for your review.
Comment from fictionwriter
Interesting development. I wouldn't think that she'd be a virgin, along time before now if she didn't want to marry the guy. I'm sure she could have found someone before now. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Interesting development. I wouldn't think that she'd be a virgin, along time before now if she didn't want to marry the guy. I'm sure she could have found someone before now. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2009
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Well, we'll have to wait and see exactly what's she's upto, right? Thank you for your review.
