Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Chapter 2 Part 4"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
37 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is another very interesting chapter, enjoying the confrontation between the hero and heroine. i will be here for the long haul reading what i missed out on
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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this is another very interesting chapter, enjoying the confrontation between the hero and heroine. i will be here for the long haul reading what i missed out on
Comment Written 23-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2010
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Wow. I am impressed.
Comment from Mengleoh67
I am SO behind in my reviewing!! This is a great chapter. Your character development and interaction is great and the storyline is moving at a nice even pace. I have several chapters to read and I'm definitely looking forward to all of them.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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I am SO behind in my reviewing!! This is a great chapter. Your character development and interaction is great and the storyline is moving at a nice even pace. I have several chapters to read and I'm definitely looking forward to all of them.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2009
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Thank you for your review and you support.
Comment from Summer Falls
Frisking? LOL I loved that! Steven was beside himself, huh? I liked every aspect of this chapter, the descriptive scene, the dialogue, humor, serious parts, every nuance and expression ... um, well Barbara, I guess you know I love your writing.
lol
Sorry it took so long to review this. I had to find a good hiding place for Galeron and Jac.
Summer
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2009
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Frisking? LOL I loved that! Steven was beside himself, huh? I liked every aspect of this chapter, the descriptive scene, the dialogue, humor, serious parts, every nuance and expression ... um, well Barbara, I guess you know I love your writing.
lol
Sorry it took so long to review this. I had to find a good hiding place for Galeron and Jac.
Summer
Comment Written 29-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2009
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No place will keep me from Galeron.
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LOL
Will you come to my book signing? I will give you the big cut out of him. lol
Comment from K-Patrick
Very well written. Follows storyline nicely.
I know it makes for a good story, but . . . . The pat frisk is most likely a huge law suit. Regardless of no probable cause - she the witness in protective custody. Even the military demands same sex contact searches unless immediate danger (which there isn't). You may want to consider waiting for a female "officer" forever and then having Leya just say (in a princess sort of way) "I am tired of waiting in the sun, just search me yourself and let's go".
You're here to make sure that [the] family you're so proud of doesn't retaliate against you.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2009
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Very well written. Follows storyline nicely.
I know it makes for a good story, but . . . . The pat frisk is most likely a huge law suit. Regardless of no probable cause - she the witness in protective custody. Even the military demands same sex contact searches unless immediate danger (which there isn't). You may want to consider waiting for a female "officer" forever and then having Leya just say (in a princess sort of way) "I am tired of waiting in the sun, just search me yourself and let's go".
You're here to make sure that [the] family you're so proud of doesn't retaliate against you.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2009
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I like your solution to the problem, but Leya isn't objecting at all. She encourages it, but isn't happy with Steven's response.
Comment from RebelRose
I could have sworn that I had reviewed this one before. I must have read it and got interrupted before I actually gave it a rating. Anyway, putting that aside, I did like it. I think it is well written and I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2009
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I could have sworn that I had reviewed this one before. I must have read it and got interrupted before I actually gave it a rating. Anyway, putting that aside, I did like it. I think it is well written and I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate you kind words.
Comment from Seaborn
Worked well for me. Seemed to flow nicely and no glaring spelling errors. I know this is not a very long excerpt, but maybe a bit more detail on Leya's action might be good, like "she stretched seductively" or "slyly" or whatever, with her behavior about being searched.
Good job! LS
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2009
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Worked well for me. Seemed to flow nicely and no glaring spelling errors. I know this is not a very long excerpt, but maybe a bit more detail on Leya's action might be good, like "she stretched seductively" or "slyly" or whatever, with her behavior about being searched.
Good job! LS
Comment Written 26-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2009
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I appreciate your review and assistance.
Comment from samuelbrody
Barbara... Hello. I took a break to do some writing. Glad to be back to your book. This is an interesting chapter. I like how you used the search as a sensual tension creator. It just seems natural or probable there would be romance here somewhere given the strength of these two characters. Your narrative continues to be strong. And the dialogue is like the melody of a song...sweet. Nicely done. Michael.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Barbara... Hello. I took a break to do some writing. Glad to be back to your book. This is an interesting chapter. I like how you used the search as a sensual tension creator. It just seems natural or probable there would be romance here somewhere given the strength of these two characters. Your narrative continues to be strong. And the dialogue is like the melody of a song...sweet. Nicely done. Michael.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Mariea
Another good chapter Barbara.. Characters consistent and dialogue believeable. No 'clutter' or 'flat' spots. I look forward to then next chapter.
Enjoy your day
Regards Mia
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Another good chapter Barbara.. Characters consistent and dialogue believeable. No 'clutter' or 'flat' spots. I look forward to then next chapter.
Enjoy your day
Regards Mia
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Up close and personal and having to maintain professionalism.
The story is unfolding nicely, and the attraction between Leya and Stephen is obvious, yet subtly drawn.
Juliette
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Up close and personal and having to maintain professionalism.
The story is unfolding nicely, and the attraction between Leya and Stephen is obvious, yet subtly drawn.
Juliette
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Phil Kitom
This story is progressing well, I think that Steven
is trying to be professional but I wonder if his
groin is going to take over... He had a hard task
frisking her, but hell... Somebody had to do it LOL
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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This story is progressing well, I think that Steven
is trying to be professional but I wonder if his
groin is going to take over... He had a hard task
frisking her, but hell... Somebody had to do it LOL
Comment Written 24-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review. You think so like a man, go figure!!
