The Eternal Battle
uses a storm at sea as a metraphor for life15 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The Eternal Battle
by dragonpoet
Hello my friend
The ocean makes a wonderful metaphor for life. A very unique poem and well written. Well done.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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The Eternal Battle
by dragonpoet
Hello my friend
The ocean makes a wonderful metaphor for life. A very unique poem and well written. Well done.
Gypsy
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you for your kind words of encouragement and for all the stars.
Joan
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your metaphor of the sea as life works well, DP. I enjoyed reading this well-thought out poem. Your rhymes work well, the message is clear, and your lines have good imagery. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Your metaphor of the sea as life works well, DP. I enjoyed reading this well-thought out poem. Your rhymes work well, the message is clear, and your lines have good imagery. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thanks, Jan, for this thorough and encouraging review.
Joan
Comment from Sugarray77
This is very good Joan. I am so glad you revived this and shared it with us. Your rhymes are very good and help the flow go smoothly throughout the poem. Well done!
Melissa
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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This is very good Joan. I am so glad you revived this and shared it with us. Your rhymes are very good and help the flow go smoothly throughout the poem. Well done!
Melissa
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Melissa,
I am glad you liked the rhymes and flow of this poem. Thanks for reading.
Joan
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Well written and very visual writing. I enjoyed the picture that your words painted in this poem and saw the boat tossed on the waves. The poem is a description of all that life holds as we battle the storm. We all pray that our ripped sails have been repaired so we are ready for whatever weather is ahead.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Well written and very visual writing. I enjoyed the picture that your words painted in this poem and saw the boat tossed on the waves. The poem is a description of all that life holds as we battle the storm. We all pray that our ripped sails have been repaired so we are ready for whatever weather is ahead.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you for reading this. I am glad you thought the imagry and metaphor were good.
dp
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the eternal battle we all have to fight day after day. Each victory brings us closer to internal peace that cannot be bought with money or any earthly treasures.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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A very well-written poem about the eternal battle we all have to fight day after day. Each victory brings us closer to internal peace that cannot be bought with money or any earthly treasures.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thanks, Sandra, for your comments and all the stars.
Joan
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a skillfully-written, vividly descriptive, and moving poem. The parallel between life and the peace--then turbulence--of the sea is well executed.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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This is a skillfully-written, vividly descriptive, and moving poem. The parallel between life and the peace--then turbulence--of the sea is well executed.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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I appreciate your comments and high ratin, Janice. Thank you.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We often ride the storm and tomorrow is always another day when there is calm and we take stock and hopefully resolve the issues, I enjoyed your words and rhymes here, and especially the last line to sum up, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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We often ride the storm and tomorrow is always another day when there is calm and we take stock and hopefully resolve the issues, I enjoyed your words and rhymes here, and especially the last line to sum up, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thanks, Dolly, for reading and reviewing my poem.
Joan
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a very good use of metaphor of life. The raging stormy sea, the wishes and thoughts of the the sailor, and the destruction of the boat make up life. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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This is a very good use of metaphor of life. The raging stormy sea, the wishes and thoughts of the the sailor, and the destruction of the boat make up life. Well done.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thanks for reading and review. I am glad you liked the metaphor.
Joan
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I did very much.
Comment from Country Girl Princess
I love the description of this poem, you have done an awesome job at rhyming and the whole time I read this I think this is my life. look forward to reading more from you
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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I love the description of this poem, you have done an awesome job at rhyming and the whole time I read this I think this is my life. look forward to reading more from you
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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I am honored by the six star rating. I am glad this made you want to read more.
Joan
Comment from Mary Furlong
Excellent. Your extended metaphor works well. I wish I had more stars to give. The poem is effective throughout, but particularly so on the lines where you use enjambment.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Excellent. Your extended metaphor works well. I wish I had more stars to give. The poem is effective throughout, but particularly so on the lines where you use enjambment.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Glad you liked it. Thanks.
dp
