Love Songs For Every Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Without You"Love poems
5 total reviews
Comment from Ronni
A beautiful poem, it is so dynamic in its portent and
presentatation it could well be one of those love story
segements like "Days Of Our Lives" ; except this is so
much more profound and tells a chapter in the life of
a love that undoubtedly has sequels or ultimately a
happy ending. This one certainly touches all the
wellsprings of raomance most enchantingly.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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A beautiful poem, it is so dynamic in its portent and
presentatation it could well be one of those love story
segements like "Days Of Our Lives" ; except this is so
much more profound and tells a chapter in the life of
a love that undoubtedly has sequels or ultimately a
happy ending. This one certainly touches all the
wellsprings of raomance most enchantingly.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2009
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Once more, I thank you for reading and for your gracious comments. It is a miniature love story, isn't it? Glad you found it romantic. Hugs... Merri
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
Great work, MissMerrie. Full of very powerful emotion, very effectively portrayed.
I love the way you open the second stanza with the "broken shells" image. And then you follow it with the metaphor of the sea washing away the hearts in the sand like feelings in your own heart being washed away into nothing.
Very poignant last stanza. Counting the stars--very good image again. Also, of course, the darkness shrouding the shore.
I love all the alliteration--also very poetic.
John
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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Great work, MissMerrie. Full of very powerful emotion, very effectively portrayed.
I love the way you open the second stanza with the "broken shells" image. And then you follow it with the metaphor of the sea washing away the hearts in the sand like feelings in your own heart being washed away into nothing.
Very poignant last stanza. Counting the stars--very good image again. Also, of course, the darkness shrouding the shore.
I love all the alliteration--also very poetic.
John
Comment Written 10-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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You are obviously a careful and perceptive reader. I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from irishauthorme
Poignant and full of the real feelings of the author. A work of art bringing the smell and sound of the ocean into my screen. "Broken shells" amplifies the sense of loss. Great work.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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Poignant and full of the real feelings of the author. A work of art bringing the smell and sound of the ocean into my screen. "Broken shells" amplifies the sense of loss. Great work.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2009
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I'm grateful for your comments. It is so encouraging to know that my clumsy efforts have touched someone.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
oh you have penned such a romantic free verse piece that reads so very strongly with beautiful images of love well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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oh you have penned such a romantic free verse piece that reads so very strongly with beautiful images of love well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 08-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your kind words and those beautiful stars. :*)
Comment from Amfunny
Such a pretty love poem. YOu can tell by the words how much you miss him. This is a strong poem with lots of emotion. Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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Such a pretty love poem. YOu can tell by the words how much you miss him. This is a strong poem with lots of emotion. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2009
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I'm so glad you sensed the emotion. Thank you for calling it a strong poem. I like that!
