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Comment from Earthwriter
excellent job in this writing it is hard to convey emotions of the moment but i think you did an excellent job my friend well done
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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excellent job in this writing it is hard to convey emotions of the moment but i think you did an excellent job my friend well done
Comment Written 19-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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Earthwriter
Thank you for your kind and generous words. I greatly appreciate your comments. Thanks again Carol
Comment from dihardest
This is exquisite and I will bookmark it. I would leave my review with the words of my first sentence because there are no words to say it better, but I know they won't let me get away with a one sentence comment here. Exquisite.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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This is exquisite and I will bookmark it. I would leave my review with the words of my first sentence because there are no words to say it better, but I know they won't let me get away with a one sentence comment here. Exquisite.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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Exquisite...what an awesome tribute to words that only begin to describe our love of DJ....I thank you for reading, for you tender response and for bookmarking it too. Thank you seems shallow but it all I have to offer. Carol
Comment from Nicky B
Wow, DJ really sounds like a one-off. How much of a mark did he leave in such a short space of time. It reminds me of one of those shooting stars you see in the night sky. It might be gone in an instant but the flash of its brilliance will never be forgotten.
God bless.
Nick.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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Wow, DJ really sounds like a one-off. How much of a mark did he leave in such a short space of time. It reminds me of one of those shooting stars you see in the night sky. It might be gone in an instant but the flash of its brilliance will never be forgotten.
God bless.
Nick.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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Nicky..
Thank you for your most kind and generous thoughts. He was a wonderful young man...always willing to help and a smile that would certainly melt his Nana's heart.
Thank you again for the stars...they are a tribute to my grandson. Always, Carol
Comment from pixiemillie
How can anyone read this without being moved to tears. Unless we have been through something similar no words we say can begin to ease that pain still so deeply felt so near the anniversary of his death. So I will just say, he indeed, sounds like he was so special to so many and you have written about it beautifully in this post. Thank you, again for sharing the life of this special grandson.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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How can anyone read this without being moved to tears. Unless we have been through something similar no words we say can begin to ease that pain still so deeply felt so near the anniversary of his death. So I will just say, he indeed, sounds like he was so special to so many and you have written about it beautifully in this post. Thank you, again for sharing the life of this special grandson.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Pixiemillie...He was a special young man...I cringe when I allow my mind to think what if... His future was so bright and he had so much a head of him, but God had other plans. It's not mine to question...but it is certainly hard to bear. Thanks again...Carol
Comment from second thought
There is not much to say except DJ sounds like a person that I want to know. In fact he sounds like a person everybody ought to know. Its rare when people have that balance that embraces the joys,pains, hopes and dreams of others while still holding on to their own. I'm afraid when I read your writings because it touchs all my emotions. Well done. Greatiness can't be contained...
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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There is not much to say except DJ sounds like a person that I want to know. In fact he sounds like a person everybody ought to know. Its rare when people have that balance that embraces the joys,pains, hopes and dreams of others while still holding on to their own. I'm afraid when I read your writings because it touchs all my emotions. Well done. Greatiness can't be contained...
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Second thought...
You have given me the ultimate compliment and I am sincerely humbled. If you are able to feel the emotions, then my writing comes alive and actually has a meaning for others. I appreciate that more than I can ever express.
My grandson was a wonderful young man...He touched more lives than we ever knew until his funeral. Everyone had a story to tell. I will always wonder what if...but knowing that he made a difference in his few short years is a blessing.
Thanks for the kind and generous comments. Always, Carol
Comment from dportwood
Begin Again,
You have said it all and so well done from the vantage point of family members and friends. Through you two writings here on FanStory, I feel like I know DJ and wish I could have known him better.
Prayers and blessings.
Duane
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Begin Again,
You have said it all and so well done from the vantage point of family members and friends. Through you two writings here on FanStory, I feel like I know DJ and wish I could have known him better.
Prayers and blessings.
Duane
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Duane... Thank you for those kind words. I wish you and many others could have met him. He was just becoming a wonderful young man with a great future ahead of him. One foolish act on a hot summer day and all our dreams were smashed.
Thanks again for your kind thoughts. Carol
Comment from eliz100
You have written about this loss from every perspective in such a beautiful way. It is such a new loss for you, less than a year. The pain must be tremendous. Again I hope writing helps. What a tragedy.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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You have written about this loss from every perspective in such a beautiful way. It is such a new loss for you, less than a year. The pain must be tremendous. Again I hope writing helps. What a tragedy.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Eliz...
Writing does allow me to express so much. Thanks for your generous and thoughtful review. I send you a smile. Carol
Comment from joan marie
I think you mean 'meant' instead of means. It switches from present to past tense. You want to try and make it consistent. Example: If I were a Roscoe Police Officer...
The paragraphs begin in present tense, but the following paragraph is in the past tense. Very moving narrative and eulogy for your grandson. You have survived so much sorrow. joan marie
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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I think you mean 'meant' instead of means. It switches from present to past tense. You want to try and make it consistent. Example: If I were a Roscoe Police Officer...
The paragraphs begin in present tense, but the following paragraph is in the past tense. Very moving narrative and eulogy for your grandson. You have survived so much sorrow. joan marie
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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When I wrote this I was crying so hard that I'm lucky any of it makes sense...I will say my heart was writing not my head. But thanks for pointing out my error. I will check that asap. Always, Carol
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I realize this must have been difficult for you to write and to post. I hesitated whether or not to discuss the problems in tense. But you are a writer and I believe we all want our work to be as good as it can. It would have been hard for me to write this, never mind follow all the rules of writing when emotion overcomes. jm
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Joan marie...I appreciate your words because I feel they are well lintended and come from the heart. Always feel free to help me. Thanks again - Carol
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See I am being stupid and becoming all teary eyed again...Missed by errors even in my reply...your well intended words...Smile, be happy and be my friend. Carol
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There is nothing 'stupid' about grieving. It is something we will all experience in our lives. I think it is a wonderful tribute to your loved ones in Heaven that you have immortalzed them in this way. I did not mean to make you feel bad. I am sorry. jm
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They are well intended. And by reading your work, you help me to better my skills as a writer. jm
Comment from zeezeewriter
A wonderful tribute to your Grandson. I hope this helps heal your pain and also bring joy to you in realizing what a fine man your Grandson was to all privileged to know him. Zee
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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A wonderful tribute to your Grandson. I hope this helps heal your pain and also bring joy to you in realizing what a fine man your Grandson was to all privileged to know him. Zee
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Zee.. Thank you so much for your kind and generous comments. Love has a way of warming the heart even when we are apart. I only have to close my eyes and I can see him smiling, telling me "You know you love me". Thanks again. Carol
Comment from nightslasher
Completely heartbreaking, and after reading your previous story based on this period in time it makes me feel for both yourself and your family. It also makes me wish that I had known this remarkable young man, after all I think I have a thing or two in common with him. Even though I never knew him, nor indeed no you, I don't think I will ever forget.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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Completely heartbreaking, and after reading your previous story based on this period in time it makes me feel for both yourself and your family. It also makes me wish that I had known this remarkable young man, after all I think I have a thing or two in common with him. Even though I never knew him, nor indeed no you, I don't think I will ever forget.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2009
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nightslasher...What a wonderful thing to say....His devilish, adventurous spirit and the love we all shared gave us memories to warm our hearts for a long time. Thank you for your kind, warm and generous thoughts. Always, Carol
