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Comment from melimel
I would give 10 stars if it was possible!
Your writting touched me a lot, and without knowing you or your familly, I'm feeling the loss you suffered. My prayers are going to you and you family tonight.
Mely
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2009
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I would give 10 stars if it was possible!
Your writting touched me a lot, and without knowing you or your familly, I'm feeling the loss you suffered. My prayers are going to you and you family tonight.
Mely
Comment Written 03-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2009
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Mely
I was surprised that someone had read my grandson's eulogy from my profile. You touched my heart. Thank you for understanding the love and our loss. My grandson was a wonderful young man who will never achieve his greatest potential because of a silly swimming accident. Thanks so much. Carol
Comment from gloverveola
This embodies the thoughts and feelings of so many who have lost a young person in their lives. Thanks to you and your grandson.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2009
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This embodies the thoughts and feelings of so many who have lost a young person in their lives. Thanks to you and your grandson.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2009
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gloverveola
Thank you for taking the time to read my grandson's eulogy. Next month it will be a year and sometimes it feels like yesterday. I appreciate your kind words. Carol
Comment from MaureenC
Carol, first of all I send my condolences for the sad loss of a beloved grandson. The emotion you felt at the time simply seeps through the words. I understand as I lost my eldest daughter to murder some twenty years ago and I can tell you there is no closure, only a lessening of the pressure of pain. She is in my mind daily.
Beautiful work.
Hugs and blessings
Maureen
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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Carol, first of all I send my condolences for the sad loss of a beloved grandson. The emotion you felt at the time simply seeps through the words. I understand as I lost my eldest daughter to murder some twenty years ago and I can tell you there is no closure, only a lessening of the pressure of pain. She is in my mind daily.
Beautiful work.
Hugs and blessings
Maureen
Comment Written 21-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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Maureen...My thoughts and prayers are with you. Losing a child for any reason is terrible, but a senseless murder must have been overwhelming with all the media, etc. involved. I lost my 4 yr old son in 1981 and my grandson 1981 and the pain is as fresh as yesterday sometimes.
Thank you for your kind words. I greatly appreciate them.
Without friends, I doubt that I would have been able to face life at all. Smiles to you each and every day. Your friend, Carol
Comment from fayesh
This was a lovely tribute to your late grandson. I'm sure he is looking down upon his loved ones and friends and smiling. Though his time was short in this life, it will remain the quality of his presence that will forever be here with the people he touched.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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This was a lovely tribute to your late grandson. I'm sure he is looking down upon his loved ones and friends and smiling. Though his time was short in this life, it will remain the quality of his presence that will forever be here with the people he touched.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2009
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fayesh..
Thank you for your kind and generous words. I too believe he is looking down on us and smiling. Thank you again Carol
Comment from Mastery
Hi, BA. First of all, allow me to express my condolences. I am familiar with losing a child...Lost my ONLY child at the time..14 year old Bobby.
I still haven't written about him...it just seems too difficult and that happened in 1981. You presented a wonderful story about DJ. I like him and never met the young man. Simply by your writing. I do have a few comments that may help you to make the presentation a bit better if you don't mind:
"If I'm his teacher, I would have to be . . . " I would change the way I describe each of his acquaintances to read "If you were his teacher" or if you were his this or that...Just sounds better, I think.
He was like the son I never had! (No need for the exclamation point here...it tends to be overkill, if you know what I mean.)
I would eliminate all of the "ors" if I were you. Simply say "People had accolades for DJ, like: (and then list them...just appears as more mature writing, I believe as "or" is too repetitive.
or "You were such a respectful and good person. I'm
thankful you were my friend."
"loving each other in the past, but we can never have anything to remember in the future." (I would reword this to say "We can never have the gift of things from the future"
Very good job overall, BA Bravo! Bob (Mastery)
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2009
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Hi, BA. First of all, allow me to express my condolences. I am familiar with losing a child...Lost my ONLY child at the time..14 year old Bobby.
I still haven't written about him...it just seems too difficult and that happened in 1981. You presented a wonderful story about DJ. I like him and never met the young man. Simply by your writing. I do have a few comments that may help you to make the presentation a bit better if you don't mind:
"If I'm his teacher, I would have to be . . . " I would change the way I describe each of his acquaintances to read "If you were his teacher" or if you were his this or that...Just sounds better, I think.
He was like the son I never had! (No need for the exclamation point here...it tends to be overkill, if you know what I mean.)
I would eliminate all of the "ors" if I were you. Simply say "People had accolades for DJ, like: (and then list them...just appears as more mature writing, I believe as "or" is too repetitive.
or "You were such a respectful and good person. I'm
thankful you were my friend."
"loving each other in the past, but we can never have anything to remember in the future." (I would reword this to say "We can never have the gift of things from the future"
Very good job overall, BA Bravo! Bob (Mastery)
Comment Written 20-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2009
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Bob...Thank you for your kind words. My heart connects with you and your loss also. I lost my 4 year old son July 10, 1981 in a water accident also. Children are a precious gift that we believe will outlive us. Unfortunately, we are not privy to life's timetable.
Thank you again for your suggestions and when I can bear to read it again, I will correct them. I do appreciate your time to add more dignity to the piece. Carol
Comment from Karen B.
My heart goes out to you and your family in your loss. You've done a beautiful job of memorializing the life of your grandson. Karen
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2009
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My heart goes out to you and your family in your loss. You've done a beautiful job of memorializing the life of your grandson. Karen
Comment Written 20-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2009
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Karen...Thank you so much for reading and for your kind comments. He was a wonderful boy and is missed greatly. Thanks for reading. Carol
Comment from amada
It was a privilege to find this wonderful piece of writing about DJ. I can't even begin to imagine the pain of his loss, I just send you my most deep condolencies in this eternal loss. I am sure he is in Heaven smiling at this outpouring of love.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2009
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It was a privilege to find this wonderful piece of writing about DJ. I can't even begin to imagine the pain of his loss, I just send you my most deep condolencies in this eternal loss. I am sure he is in Heaven smiling at this outpouring of love.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2009
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Amada I believe he was by my side with each word that I typed and that he stands in heaven with my son and both are smiling down on me. Thanks for your kind and greatly appreciated words. Carol
Comment from jester71
Reading about DJ brought a lump to my throat. He was so loved. Your love for him reminds me of my love for my grandmother. I couldn't speak at her funeral because I was so overcome with emotion. I used to write obituaries for a newspaper and I was forever crying with the family as they told me what they wanted me to include in the paper. Most obituaries are written at the funeral home so I edited the ones faxed in to us but sometimes mourners would come talk to me about what should be included. Life is so very precious. Your DJ was so very precious. My heart is still too raw when it comes to my grandma but one day I aspire to write about her as you have done with DJ.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2009
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Reading about DJ brought a lump to my throat. He was so loved. Your love for him reminds me of my love for my grandmother. I couldn't speak at her funeral because I was so overcome with emotion. I used to write obituaries for a newspaper and I was forever crying with the family as they told me what they wanted me to include in the paper. Most obituaries are written at the funeral home so I edited the ones faxed in to us but sometimes mourners would come talk to me about what should be included. Life is so very precious. Your DJ was so very precious. My heart is still too raw when it comes to my grandma but one day I aspire to write about her as you have done with DJ.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2009
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jester...Writing was my way of relieving the pain and stress that was building inside of me..I felt like I would explode. I cried with every word but it was worth it. DJ was very special and we loved him very much. Thanks agin Carol
Comment from Sarabran
This is such a touching and heartbreaking tragedy. I can tell how much DJ's family loved him, and so many others. It sounds like he was was of the angels walking on earth to help others, now he is in heaven and one of God's angels watching from above. You have written a beautiful eulogy in his memory. I know that it had to be devastating to lose him this way. My heart goes out to you and your family and all of his friends. I know he is missed terribly by all who knew and loved him. My God keep all of you enfolding in his loving arms. Sarabran
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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This is such a touching and heartbreaking tragedy. I can tell how much DJ's family loved him, and so many others. It sounds like he was was of the angels walking on earth to help others, now he is in heaven and one of God's angels watching from above. You have written a beautiful eulogy in his memory. I know that it had to be devastating to lose him this way. My heart goes out to you and your family and all of his friends. I know he is missed terribly by all who knew and loved him. My God keep all of you enfolding in his loving arms. Sarabran
Comment Written 19-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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Sara Thank you for your generous and kind words. We have good days and we have bad days,,,having friends that care and are there to lift us up when we fall is a very important part of healing. It has been wonderful being on this site and the awesome things people have had to say about DJ and our grief. I can not than everyone enough.
Thank you for the awesome stars too. I almost didn't see them I was so engrossed in your kind words. God bless you.
Thanks again - Carol
Comment from perunest
Please accept my deepest condolences on
the loss of your precious grandson. I
can't even imagine your pain, so I'll not
say I know what you're going through. It is obvious
he was a special young man and lives on in
many loving hearts. Thank you for sharing this
poignant piece of writing and deep part of
yourself. Carolyn
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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Please accept my deepest condolences on
the loss of your precious grandson. I
can't even imagine your pain, so I'll not
say I know what you're going through. It is obvious
he was a special young man and lives on in
many loving hearts. Thank you for sharing this
poignant piece of writing and deep part of
yourself. Carolyn
Comment Written 19-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2009
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Carolyn...Thank you for reading and understanding how much DJ meant to so many people. He was and is greatly loved. Thanks again Carol
