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Malaysia's Drum

-a nonet about Kuala Lumpur

18 total reviews 
Comment from Blue Danube
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I loved this nonet for several reasons. It struck me as light, airy and musical. Also, good friends of ours will be living in Kuala Lumpur during the next few years so this poem made me feel instantly connected to them. Have forwarded it to them. The giant moth on the window appeared at first glance as a wonderful architectural feature along with the high rise buildings. Kind of magical I would say. No added work needed.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
    I am flattered that you sent my poem to your friends. I too found the moth and its location magical. Thank you for responding to musicality in my poem. I appreciate your very positive and personal review, along with the many winged stars.
reply by Blue Danube on 17-Jul-2009
    Joan E: maybe this time this reply will go out to you. It has been giving me trouble for some reason. In any case, and for the third time, thanks for your words, photo and for replying to my comment which was totally inspired by your work.
Comment from Pen&Ink
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Hi Joan E.

When I read your poem I thought of the drum as a metaphor for the heartbeat of the nation's peoples. This concise poem is both interesting and educational. The juxtaposition of mosques with sleek monorails is also of note.

Ray

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2009
    I like the heartbeat metaphor as well. I am pleased you picked up on the juxtaposition on old and new; you're the only reviewer who noted it. Thank you for your perceptive review, and I am glad you found the nonet educational as well.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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A clever piece of verse,
Joan - looks a real interesting
place - haven't been there, altho
travelled a great deal.

I enjoyed your notes also.
Thanks for sharing.

Margaret.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2009
    Borneo didn't have as much exotic flora and fauna as we expected, and oddly KL exceeded our expectations, especially with its architecture that is a spectacular blend of east and west, as the culture itself tends to be. I am pleased you found the nonet clever and my notes informative. Thank you for your generous review along with the many winged stars.
Comment from mmichelle97219
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Very cool. You broght the place to life for the reader in a very structured and poetic piece of writing. Nicely done.

Happy writing
Michelle

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2009
    I am pleased you enjoyed my memory trip and its form. Thank you for your kind comments and very positive review along with the many winged stars.
Comment from Sue_Angel
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I like the "m" alliteration you used, and you did a good job following the nonet form.
After reading your poem, I not only feel inspired to learn more about Malaysia, but more educated about it. Thanks for including the author's notes.
Good job
Susan

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2009
    I am so pleased you enjoyed my memory trip and learned about Malaysis and want to know more about the fascinating country. I am glad the notes were useful. Thank you for your very positive review along with the many winged stars.
Comment from skye
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I like the repeating beginning sounds, it adds depth and interest to this far east poem.
I love these forms, love the structure.
You have crafted a good poem, with super artwork.
Very well done.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009
    Hello again. I'm pleased you liked the alliteration and the structure along with my photo. Thank you again for taking the time to read and review my poems. I enjoyed the drum beat in your generous review and the many winged stars.
Comment from maxic59
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That is an amazing photo, I loved it, and the reference to the percussion, the "Malaysia's major drum " it draws many visuals in my head of drums beating, I love the drums LOL
Good luck with the competition
cheers max

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009
    I am so pleased that "drum" conjured up sound and visuals for you and that you liked the photo. I appreciate your good wishes along with the star beats.
Comment from Carol D Parker
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I'd love to see that supersized moth. The picture is excellent and so is the poem. It paints a vivid picture of Kuala Lumpur, even as good as the photo.
Must have been a narvelous vacation. Good luck in the contest.
Delora

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009
    It was a great adventure, but oddly we saw fewer exotic animals and plants than we expected. I am glad you enjoyed this memory trip with me and found a vivid picture of Malaysia's capital in the words and picture. Thank you for the very positive review along with the many winged stars.
Comment from dtimes3
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Good travel poem. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.

myriad mosques seek sleek monorails
Chinatown and Little India
multicultural landscape
master of engaging
Kuala Lumpur
capital crown
Malaysia's
major
drum

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009
    Thank you for enjoying my travel memories with me. I appreciate your good wishes and positive review along with the many winged stars very much.
Comment from adewpearl
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I love Kuala Lumpur as the five syllable line - this is lovely in its vivid and appealing descriptions and in fine form - I also enjoyed the alliterations and the word play on "drum." This should be a strong contender in the nonet contest, Joan. Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2009


reply by the author on 15-Jul-2009
    Thank you for enjoying the alliteration, double entendre and descriptions. I got lucky with Kuala Lumpur. I have to confess a secret: I wrote the poem on the trip as part of my on going "journal"--the problem is I misremembered the form and inverted it. Unfortunately, it wasn't a matter of flipping it. The original started with the word "meet." Anyway, coming up with the replacement "drum" was my key to reconstructing it as a real nonet. The moral to the story is it's probably better to start from scratch and have two poems! Regardless, I really appreciate your beating your drum loudly about my poem!