Flowery Lullaby
Quatrains using flower names80 total reviews
Comment from schlosslaw_2000
A well written poem, Brooke. Now if we could fill Grandma's bonnet with Peppermint sticks and Jelly beans that would be grand. :_) Larry
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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A well written poem, Brooke. Now if we could fill Grandma's bonnet with Peppermint sticks and Jelly beans that would be grand. :_) Larry
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Larry, I take it you have a sweet tooth! LOL Thanks, dear friend. Brooke :-)
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Not necessiarily for candy, but if you could find a tart cherry pie or a tart strawberry-rhubarb pie, that would be great. :_) Larry
Comment from luna
Brooke, I love that you let this fun and well-written work stand on its own without a long author's note. Sometimes they overwhelm your poem (yet sometimes they are needed to increase understanding of your write). In this case, they definitely were not needed and I'm glad you decided to forego them. Beautiful writing, as usual. Thanks for sharing and posting, my friend.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
(p.s. I think your poetic license is fine to describe pink pinwheels as pinwheels of pink - and I LOVE the picture - so adorable!)
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Brooke, I love that you let this fun and well-written work stand on its own without a long author's note. Sometimes they overwhelm your poem (yet sometimes they are needed to increase understanding of your write). In this case, they definitely were not needed and I'm glad you decided to forego them. Beautiful writing, as usual. Thanks for sharing and posting, my friend.
Love,
Jenny *smile*
(p.s. I think your poetic license is fine to describe pink pinwheels as pinwheels of pink - and I LOVE the picture - so adorable!)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Jenny, I'm so glad you enjoyed this little lullaby - thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Treesaw
Again! You did it again! So, what, exactly, am I to say? How does one articulate something so profound? I have to resort to cliches and things I've already said. This was awesome! And what a neat way to think about flowers at the same time! Very clever!!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Again! You did it again! So, what, exactly, am I to say? How does one articulate something so profound? I have to resort to cliches and things I've already said. This was awesome! And what a neat way to think about flowers at the same time! Very clever!!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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I'll take awesome!!! LOL Thanks so much, dear friend. Brooke :-)
Comment from DBaugher
This so pretty and clever. I love the way you wove the names of the flowers in perfectly. They fall naturally into place. Sweet picture, too. I really enjoyed this one. Dee
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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This so pretty and clever. I love the way you wove the names of the flowers in perfectly. They fall naturally into place. Sweet picture, too. I really enjoyed this one. Dee
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Dee, thank you - it is one of a series of poems using flower names, and I'm having lots of fun with the idea. Brooke :-)
Comment from RapturedHeart
Brooke, this is absolutely beautiful and breathtaking! I remember you using that artwork for a piece a few months back, I think - and it's just superb with this piece, as well. You've certainly been gifted with insight into creation - and continue to come up with these stunning pieces. I enjoy seeing the ones I already know used in a unique context, and I also enjoy the discovery of all the new names you keep bringing to light. Thanks so much, and take care,
Heather
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Brooke, this is absolutely beautiful and breathtaking! I remember you using that artwork for a piece a few months back, I think - and it's just superb with this piece, as well. You've certainly been gifted with insight into creation - and continue to come up with these stunning pieces. I enjoy seeing the ones I already know used in a unique context, and I also enjoy the discovery of all the new names you keep bringing to light. Thanks so much, and take care,
Heather
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Heather, when I learned a new flower's name yesterday - Grandma's bonnet, I immediately thought of a lullaby. Thank you so much for your wonderful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from tteach
What a sweet, sweet lullaby! Thanks for putting the flowers' names in italics! I know almost nothing about flowers, so that really helped.
This is a well written poem in which everything works.
well done
terry
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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What a sweet, sweet lullaby! Thanks for putting the flowers' names in italics! I know almost nothing about flowers, so that really helped.
This is a well written poem in which everything works.
well done
terry
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Terry, thank you so much for this most wonderfully generous review :-) In an earlier flower poem I had used bold for the names and some people found that intrusive, so I'm glad the italics are now working. Brooke :-)
Comment from Blaidd Drwg
So, you *are* thinking about gathering these into a book? I think said you were. I want an autographed copy :)
It is truly amazing the way you weave these flowers into such a beautiful, and deeply moving poem about the greatest of all of God's gifts. Yes the flowers truly are a great gift, as is you lovely poetry, but babies beat 'em all :)
John
P.S. Did you see Crusty's entry into the "Behind the Scenes at FanStory" contest. Your character is priceless :)
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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So, you *are* thinking about gathering these into a book? I think said you were. I want an autographed copy :)
It is truly amazing the way you weave these flowers into such a beautiful, and deeply moving poem about the greatest of all of God's gifts. Yes the flowers truly are a great gift, as is you lovely poetry, but babies beat 'em all :)
John
P.S. Did you see Crusty's entry into the "Behind the Scenes at FanStory" contest. Your character is priceless :)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Yes, I read Brad's fun story - I love all these behind the scenes stories and the fanstory camp stories - I am so much more interesting in them than I am sitting here in my living room. LOL You are right, babies trump just about everything.
Thanks so much, John. Brooke :-)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Just lovely, Brooke -- it has
the rhythm of a lullaby -- the
words so smoothly flowing and
soothing -- oh, I'm dozing off!!
Thank you for making me smile, my friend..
oh... such memories!!
Margaret
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Just lovely, Brooke -- it has
the rhythm of a lullaby -- the
words so smoothly flowing and
soothing -- oh, I'm dozing off!!
Thank you for making me smile, my friend..
oh... such memories!!
Margaret
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thanks, Margaret, for such warm and gracious comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Lyrical_CD
It hurts me to give you a 6 about flowers, but the skill to make it work with the story and the rhythm and the rhyme all in sync. Beautiful write...
Cory
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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It hurts me to give you a 6 about flowers, but the skill to make it work with the story and the rhythm and the rhyme all in sync. Beautiful write...
Cory
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Cory, are you trying to tell me you're prejudiced against pretty flowers??? ROTFLMAO Thank you, dear friend, for fighting through the pain to award the six despite any implications it might have for an officer and gentleman to like flower poems. :-) Brooke
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I don't like things that die without my permission....
Comment from joan marie
Just amazing what they name flowers. I don't know many that are in this poem, but with your descriptive verse I could imagine. joan marie
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Just amazing what they name flowers. I don't know many that are in this poem, but with your descriptive verse I could imagine. joan marie
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Joan Marie, thank you. I'm so glad you like my lullaby :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, jm
