Comment from Penya

Excellent

I love this poem. The font coloring and picture add aesthetic value to the delicious (and flowery) descriptions. The only line I did not necessarily like was the last line of the third stanza - "will chase away all thoughts of care", but I can't think of a line that sounds better and still maintains the rhyme.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2009

Thanks, Penya, for your thoughtful comments and feedback - it is most appreciated :-) Brooke

Comment from N.C.Dent

Excellent

What a tender and sensitive poem. In the first verse I love the surprise of peaches and....expecting cream. Great technique. Your movement from clouds to stars to dreams, to eyes and breath draw us into an ever closer intimacy with the baby. Well done. (of course and as always)

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2009

Nick, thank you - I appreciate your thoughtful and gracious comments - it is so nice to know when someone has truly read and thought about one of my poems :-) Brooke

reply by N.C.Dent on 10-Jul-2009

Thanks Brooke. I'm reluctant to review each one of your efforts for fear I keep others from giving their input. You already know I am in awe of your geat talent, especially in your artful packing of enormous chunks of meaning into small packages. You are awesome. Nick.

reply by the author on 10-Jul-2009

I always love to hear from you - hearing from you isn't stopping anyone else from speaking their peace :-)

Comment from mstad55

Excellent

I still have my poetic temps. No license yet, but maybe one day I'll take a spin around the quatrain and go for the test. Right now I feel comfortable in the novice section, I tend to get lost easily, so the novice section is filled with helpful people that are trying hard to take poetic licensing to. I guess it's all in the timing. However, pink pinwheels or pinwheels of pink, they still have the same smell by any other name. mstad55

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2009

Thank you, little brother - hope life in the novice section has been treating you well. :-) Brooke

reply by mstad55 on 08-Jul-2009

All is well. I spent the better part of last week on a couple of web sites trying to get a good deal on a new/newer motorcycle. I found the bike of my dreams on ebay and won the bid. It took seven hours round trip to fetch it. I should have called you, I was in Washington PA. It probably isn't anywhere nearby, but I did think of you while I was passing through. So, if everything settles down and I get my lawn done, I may be back on tonight. If not, I'll read you when I do. Have a wonderful night in the neighborhood. Brother Mike

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009

congratulations on the motorcycle :-) I have no idea where Washington,PA is! LOL

reply by mstad55 on 08-Jul-2009

It's 30 miles south west/east or somewhere from Pittsburg. It was a three hour trip from Mentor Ohio. I got lost and ended up turning around in Wheeling W.Va. Must have been having a blonde moment.

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009

Pittsburgh is five hours away - I'm two hours from NYC and three plus hours from Washington, D.C. - so the fact it is in PA means nothing - I've been to NYC, DC and Baltimore far more often. I lived for some years in New Haven,CT, which is about as far a drive as Pittsburgh is :-)

reply by mstad55 on 08-Jul-2009

Oh, well, I'll take that as a no if I ever go again.

reply by the author on 08-Jul-2009

Hey, if you ever want to drive five more hours past Pittsburgh, I'll have a glass of Coke Cherry Zero waiting to greet you :-)

reply by mstad55 on 09-Jul-2009

That's really freaky. I thought I was buying a cherry coke for the ride, but got a cherry zero coke instead. OOh spooky.

Comment from jadedgemini2

Excellent

I LOVE IT!!!!!! You are getting so clever on the way you use the flower names with a poem, and how cute was it to do so with a baby theme? That was adorable:)
I thought your play of words (if you will) was excellent!
Great job!! This one brought me back to when my kids were infants and made me sigh a happy sigh:)
Jaded:)

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009

Thanks so much, Jaded - I truly enjoy the flower name poems - they're so much fun to write :-) Brooke

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Brooke...

I certainly hope that these beautiful poems will be included in a book with your other haikus. A poem that everyone can relate to even if they don't recognize the flowers. And for those who do, it's a wonderful touch.

Thanks for sharing. As usual, your poem is simple great!

Carol

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Carol, thank you for such supportive and encouraging comments. :-) Brooke

Comment from stormwolf2

Excellent

what a sweet poem Brooke, a most enjoyable read. The flowers a clearly there with nothing forced.
A beautiful lullaby that has a nice rhyme and good flow.

Best wishes,
Malcolm

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Thank you, Malcolm. I am always thrilled when guys like my flower or fairy stuff - it restores my faith in men :-) Brooke

Comment from colinlinder

Excellent

excellent! Very well done! I am fast becoming a very big fan of yours! I have yet to read a poem that disappointed me.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2009

Colin, thank you - your comments are always so encouraging :-) Brooke

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

this is a beautiful lullaby. this has such great rhythm in its thoughts and phrases. There is nothing to dislike about this sweet lullaby. this was just a delight to have read and reviewed it... John

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2009

Thank you, John, for a lovely review - I truly appreciate your kind reception :-) Brooke

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

What better way to fall asleep, than rocking in your mother's arms, dreaming of flowers that remind you of candy and innocence. A lovely poem, Brooke. Sweet, syrupy, and gentle on the mind. Very nice indeed. Rose.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2009

Thanks, so much, Rose - you're always such a lovely reviewer :-) Brooke

Comment from Joyce L.

Excellent

Brooke, this poem is so delicate with great colors to add to it. I might add that the picture is just picture perfect to show the sensitivity of this poem. Great way to fit those flower names in.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2009

Thank you, Joyce for your most thoughtful comments. Happy Fourth! Brooke :-)