Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

beautiful, absolutely beautiful. This poem just put the widest smile upon my face after having read it. This is the poetic voice at its absolute best. Great imagery flow and language in this well written verse.This was just everything a good piece of poetry should be... John

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2009

John, thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed this :-) Brooke

Comment from Amicus

Excellent

This is quite lovely, Brooke. The slightly elevated diction and the alliteration (especially those s's) lend the poem a gracefulness appropriate to the content. This combined with the skillful use of the quatern form and the beautifully executed rhymes and rhythmic aspects provide a wonderfully smooth flow and a sense of serenity and royalty that I like a lot.

Good stuff.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2009

thank you, my friend - I appreciate your attentiveness to the structure and word choices as well as the content :-) Brooke

Comment from ersorenson

Excellent

I like poems to evoke memories, and yours often do. This one brings nice memories of swans and lakes and early mornings. Very nice rhythm and message of serenity.
Eric

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2009

I am always thrilled to hear one of my poems has connected with a reader's memories and experiences. Thank you for taking the time to share that with me, Eric. Brooke :-)

Comment from Fleedleflump

Excellent

Before the realest ship transcends the world,
let us at least partake of just a look.
Before this bird we're naming Captain Cook
floats from our dock with perfect wings unfurled
let's give to her the love we feel inside,
and send her off without a hint of snide.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2009

well, that is just a fascinating poem, Mike. I don't think I've ever used "snide" in a poem. :-) Thank you. Brooke :-)

Comment from Blaidd Drwg

Excellent

Brooke, a lovely quatern. Some of these images are simply superb! Notably:

framed a path with pink bouquet.
Reminds me of *the* ballet ...

its flowing gracefulness
a consequence of fairy's wand.
Sometimes it seems the beauty of nature can only be explained by something magical

... I in silence watched the swan,
serene, its circuit of the pond.
Again, all the music in the world, all the beautiful words that have ever been spoken can not do this justice, best to enjoy it in awed silence.

Fabulous work, Brooke.
John

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2009

Thank you, John - I rather like this one myself, so I'm pleased you like it also. :-) Brooke

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

Wow, what imagery. Excellent poem. Beautiful words. I've tried to photograph swans on seveeral occasions but never could catch a perfect shot. So I'll remember this poem, the perfect shot.
Carol

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2009

Carol, keep at it - the perfect picture could be just around that circuit of the pond! :-D Thank you and good morning! Brooke :-)

Comment from tteach

Excellent

You seem to have mastered this poetic form! I've still to give it a try.

I love the picture this paints. To be in a serene place, to witness the swans...would be lovely.

terry

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2009

Thanks, Terry, for your thoughtful comments - good morning!! :-) Brooke

Comment from Rabianabian

Excellent

Wow, this is really good. The picture is amazing as well. Wonderful description and the rhythm was, as usual, flawless. Well done.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009

Dear Mary, thanks ever so much :-) Brooke

Comment from zydecosal

Excellent

I liked your poem. The picture you painted lovely and I think swans are so beautiful to watch. Thanks for the excellent read.
Sally

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009

Thanks, Sally - I appreciate your warm response :-) Brooke

Comment from frelanz

Excellent

I love this. Well written and magical image with it. The poem itself is very magical. I enjoyed reading this very much. The image is perfect...I had a little escape while reading this. KUDOS to you on this...well done :-)

Dawn

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2009

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009

Dawn, a little escape is a great thing for a poem to offer, so thank you for letting me know I succeeded in doing this. Brooke :-)