This is your Destiny
A wild girl on the road to her Destiny6 total reviews
Comment from Terror2s
This one is your best I think. terrific ending. It has been a while since I've fanstoried. i have to decide if I am going back to premeire soon. Terror
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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This one is your best I think. terrific ending. It has been a while since I've fanstoried. i have to decide if I am going back to premeire soon. Terror
Comment Written 30-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2009
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Thanks...I've been working on certain things to improve my writing skills.
Comment from Soulester
Ah, but he was! Nice job on this story, cupa tea.You did a good job developing your protagonist's character, but I think she needs a name and a bit of physical description for the reader. It read "she" throughout. Also, the plural of wolf is wolves. Other than that, you have excellent dialogue, and a I have a vivid mental picture of the werewolf--but again, no name? Your ending is powerful! This is a good story, but I think it has the potential to be a great story with some tweaks. Mary
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
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Ah, but he was! Nice job on this story, cupa tea.You did a good job developing your protagonist's character, but I think she needs a name and a bit of physical description for the reader. It read "she" throughout. Also, the plural of wolf is wolves. Other than that, you have excellent dialogue, and a I have a vivid mental picture of the werewolf--but again, no name? Your ending is powerful! This is a good story, but I think it has the potential to be a great story with some tweaks. Mary
Comment Written 01-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2009
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She never really got around to saying her name nor did he....I never gave it much though...and opps I did know wolves was correct...I just get so busy with real life that I miss sometimes important stuff...Thanks anyway for reading it...
Comment from Sasha
This was great fun to read. It is a marvelous entry for this contest too. The descriptions are vivid and provide very good imagery for the reader. I found it also quite clever. You have a nice fun style that added greatly to this story. Very good work.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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This was great fun to read. It is a marvelous entry for this contest too. The descriptions are vivid and provide very good imagery for the reader. I found it also quite clever. You have a nice fun style that added greatly to this story. Very good work.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2009
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Thank you! I appriciate your review.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a very promising piece of work but it is impossible to read in one solid block. It is very heavy on the reader's eye. Double spacing is much kinder and seems to be the preferred format on here. I would be happy to review and up the grading once the presentation is sorted out x
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2009
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This is a very promising piece of work but it is impossible to read in one solid block. It is very heavy on the reader's eye. Double spacing is much kinder and seems to be the preferred format on here. I would be happy to review and up the grading once the presentation is sorted out x
Comment Written 23-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2009
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I have to go in and space it manually to have it double spaced. Why the site no longer does that I have no idea. Thanks for your commments.
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If you double space the original draft in word, you'll find it spaces properly one it loads in fanstory x
doesn't work that way for me. I have the original spaced correctly and this is how it turns out.
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The original has to be tripple spaced in order to format correctly on here x
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Tripple spaced! Thanks for the imput I did not know!
Comment from zlp22
Somewhat strange story, but interesting to read. I am thinking that the girl is dead or maybe dreaming. In the middle of your story is someones E mail address.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Somewhat strange story, but interesting to read. I am thinking that the girl is dead or maybe dreaming. In the middle of your story is someones E mail address.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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ohh, thank you for telling me that. Sometimes people ask me to read my stuff and I copy and paste it on what I'm writing at the time. I'll delete that. Thanks again.
She is neither...it is really happening....
Comment from Mountainstar2
Good luck on the contest entry...
I don't think you will have much trouble with the contest, because this story is very good. It's well detailed, written well, and the wording content is very good. Besides being interesting, entertaining, and also kept me on the edge of my seat...lol
I truly enjoyed this story, and hope now to only read more like it, or other chapters. I'd love to know what she did when she stepped inside .....and then the end to the story.....
A good ending, but I so need another Chapter....
My pleasure to read and review too...MOuntainstar2..
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Good luck on the contest entry...
I don't think you will have much trouble with the contest, because this story is very good. It's well detailed, written well, and the wording content is very good. Besides being interesting, entertaining, and also kept me on the edge of my seat...lol
I truly enjoyed this story, and hope now to only read more like it, or other chapters. I'd love to know what she did when she stepped inside .....and then the end to the story.....
A good ending, but I so need another Chapter....
My pleasure to read and review too...MOuntainstar2..
Comment Written 21-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2009
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I hope others feel as you do. I appriciate the effort it took to read and write a review.
