Comment from PUPA

Excellent

Hi Harry,
This is such a beautiful romantic poem filled with pure, deep sentiments, expressing true love. This kind of closeness that you painted with such wonderful words and imagery can be felt within, even when apart I guess. I like the pondering question you ask too.
Rhyme and rhythm are smooth, artwork complements your words, I love it.
About the word 'inspite' in my reply to your review yesterday: I meant that in a nice way, that some reviewers give less than five if they critique a line or word, and you did not, so I meant to thank you, nothing negative, on the contrary. Maybe because English is not my native language, I sometimes write 'differently'.LOL.
Love
Pupa

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2009

Oh ok and I am glad you very much enjoyed this piece of work. I hope you will continue to follow my poetry, there is many more to read in my portfolio if you have not already done so.
Take care.
Larry

Comment from Pacinogal

Excellent

Bravo! Excellent post Larry. Hot!

I love the picture! I've never seen that one.

"For now my darling angel let the night take us away
to another world, another place where we can love and play
and let this be the moment, that stays within our minds
holding onto the memories, that are with us throughout time." This is my favorite part. Kindly, Kathy

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2009

As always glad you enjoyed this poem so much, makes me very happy. Take care.
Larry

reply by Pacinogal on 04-Jun-2009

You forget how talented you really are Larry...

Sincerely,
Kathy

Comment from Nathan Schauer

Needs Improvement

I like the repitition of sounds and the slant rhyme is well done. Other than that there is not a single original image to distinquish this from a Hallmark card - in fact I don't think it reaches that level. Acck - sorry that was harsh - but if you are going to take the time to write a poem about love you need to do more than wonder if you will be with your loved one.
These lines are particularly overused:the passion that's rising, the flames in the night
that one burning desire, as I hold you so tight.

My goodness man - did you memorize "Light My Fire" or what.
Poetry has to do MORE than just remind us of love - it must have some insight into it, some expression that we recognize as genuine - otherwise what are you doing? Its a nice note for your wife - does not qualify as poetry.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2009

Well interesting review to say the least and what I comment here please take it as I am ok with what you wrote. To each his own opinion, and up here you will get a wide varity of opinions so in ways that is good.

With that said you are the very first one since I have been on fan story that has ever given me 2 stars had a couple of 3 stars and maybe 3 or 4, 4 stars the rest have been consistant 5 stars with a few 6 stars thrown in the mix. Now I realize that alot of people up here have a tendency to be generous with the stars, so I take it all with a grain of salt on that part of it, but the words of their reviews that I have been given go deeper then the stars and you can tell they really really love the work, much the same as this one here. as far as romantic goes.

I guess it brings up the saying "beauty is in the eye of the beholder" What some might call below average or even trash to another is the best thing they have read for a long time to come. So again we each have our own thoughts about what is or is not poetry and or qualify as poetry.

I have been writing and reading poetry for 45 plus years now, and I think I have a fairly firm grasp on what is poetry and what is not.

Again I do appreciate your thoughts and accept them for what they are. Take care
Larry

reply by Nathan Schauer on 04-Jun-2009

45 years or no - check out poetry.org and search the topic 'love'. Any poem in there avoids the sentimental traps you fell into.
Im sure you are dedicated. You took the time to work on the line breaks and rhyme scheme ---- but really compare your work (that specific poem) to any work you like - its not close.
I realize that is harsh medicine but I myself have been writing a while and had things published - praise for something like what you wrote is not uncommon. It won't help you be recognized in any circle of certifited poets that I know of -
But all that sounds way too harsh - and I appreciate you could be hurt by such a scathing review. However, you took time and effort to compose the piece. You obviously know something about poetry. Thus, you don't get the same generousity I might give a youngster.

Comment from jester71

Excellent

I really enjoy this romantic poem because it is exactly what a woman wants to hear from their beloved. It is just lovely and gentle and the language is beautiful. Wonderful job.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2009

You are very welcome I am so glad you enjoyed it.
You may be interested in some of my other romantic poetry if you care to check my portfolio out. Take care.
Larry