Romantic Moments
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Comment from becky7777
And to tell you are future together - I think you meant our future and not are right?
this is a very romantic poem so much emotion and love pouring from your words. fix that and it will be perfect. I wont count off, I know the editors dont understand what we mean not type. I want to kill mine lots of times.LOL
Becky
reply by the author on 29-May-2009
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And to tell you are future together - I think you meant our future and not are right?
this is a very romantic poem so much emotion and love pouring from your words. fix that and it will be perfect. I wont count off, I know the editors dont understand what we mean not type. I want to kill mine lots of times.LOL
Becky
Comment Written 29-May-2009
reply by the author on 29-May-2009
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Thank you for the correct I took care of that. I am glad you liked it alot. You might be interested in some of my other romantic poetry as well. Feel free to check my portfolio out at anytime.
Larry
Comment from Pacinogal
BRAVO!!!!!!!
Excellent write. This flows smoothly and
comfortably. A very romantic poem. One to be cherished.
Great job. Kindly, Kathy
reply by the author on 29-May-2009
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BRAVO!!!!!!!
Excellent write. This flows smoothly and
comfortably. A very romantic poem. One to be cherished.
Great job. Kindly, Kathy
Comment Written 29-May-2009
reply by the author on 29-May-2009
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Thank you Thank you Thank you...(bowing gracefully) Thank you, your to kind (waves to the audience) bows again...walks off stage.
As always I am so greatfull
Larry
Sorry Larry (bow gracefully)
(courtsey)
I will work on yahoo right now.
(courtsey)
Kathy
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Your as crazy as I am, and that is hard to do.
Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha. We only live this one life. Why not be a litttle
crazy when you want to be?
Comment from Diny
of the beauty, in the morning light.
reads more poetically and metered better with such...
of beauty, midst the morning light.
And to tell you are future together
TYPO?- are= our?
We will share in the love that given (that's)
You may also consider using the word WHICH instead of the over used THAT-
We will share in the love that given
to our hearts that hold the key
that unlocks the future ahead
thats meant for you and me.
We will share in the love that's given
to our hearts which holds the key
unlocking the future ahead
which is meant for you and me.
Write on-DI
reply by the author on 29-May-2009
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of the beauty, in the morning light.
reads more poetically and metered better with such...
of beauty, midst the morning light.
And to tell you are future together
TYPO?- are= our?
We will share in the love that given (that's)
You may also consider using the word WHICH instead of the over used THAT-
We will share in the love that given
to our hearts that hold the key
that unlocks the future ahead
thats meant for you and me.
We will share in the love that's given
to our hearts which holds the key
unlocking the future ahead
which is meant for you and me.
Write on-DI
Comment Written 28-May-2009
reply by the author on 29-May-2009
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Thank you for the corrects. I made the word changes with our and I did use which for the last line. and put the 's on that, did not use midst tho at least not yet will decide more. Take care.
Larry
