Woven in Wool
Contest -- Free Verse Ode20 total reviews
Comment from mountaintop
I liked this poem because it reminded me of some long ago time when these wool blankets were actually used for everyday things. You wrote it as if you lived back then. I did think it was a little too long, but that's all. The beautifully written piece matched every bit to the woven blanket with the buffalo on it. It brought a peacefulness to my mind and each word was well thought out.
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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I liked this poem because it reminded me of some long ago time when these wool blankets were actually used for everyday things. You wrote it as if you lived back then. I did think it was a little too long, but that's all. The beautifully written piece matched every bit to the woven blanket with the buffalo on it. It brought a peacefulness to my mind and each word was well thought out.
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2009
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review.
Comment from EllenV
Kathy, I enjoyed this piece very much. The questions asked in each verse are important ones that beg for a reply, but will probably never have an answer. I especially liked the last verse:
Do you speak of the rhythm
of drums, the shuffle
of leather-clad feet,
mournful songs rising
like liquid into night skies --
resonating from cliff to cliff,
then evaporating,
like the dreams of forgotten ancestors.
My husband and I (and our daughter, her husband, and our three grandchildren) just returned from Yellowstone where we saw hundreds of beautiful Bison (Buffalo) throughout the park. We even saw a couple of babies snuggled up next to their mothers. A beautiful sight!
Love,
ellen
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Kathy, I enjoyed this piece very much. The questions asked in each verse are important ones that beg for a reply, but will probably never have an answer. I especially liked the last verse:
Do you speak of the rhythm
of drums, the shuffle
of leather-clad feet,
mournful songs rising
like liquid into night skies --
resonating from cliff to cliff,
then evaporating,
like the dreams of forgotten ancestors.
My husband and I (and our daughter, her husband, and our three grandchildren) just returned from Yellowstone where we saw hundreds of beautiful Bison (Buffalo) throughout the park. We even saw a couple of babies snuggled up next to their mothers. A beautiful sight!
Love,
ellen
Comment Written 25-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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How lucky you are to be able to go and see these wonderful things... I love Yellowstone so much.
Thanks for the gret review. I always appreciate your kind and thoughtful comments.
Comment from PUPA
Hi Sky,
Congratulations, late but not sorry to read such a unique and witty idea of a poem, woven in extra special pattern of words to make this a winner poem. Great choice of words and beatifully presented.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Hi Sky,
Congratulations, late but not sorry to read such a unique and witty idea of a poem, woven in extra special pattern of words to make this a winner poem. Great choice of words and beatifully presented.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 25-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind and uplifting review. I am so glad you liked this poem. I learned a lot when writing it.
Comment from Readywriter52
It think the poem told the story of the picture well. It does speak of people from long ago. People who lived, laughed, loved, and suffered. They can't speak themselves but left this artifact to speak for them.
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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It think the poem told the story of the picture well. It does speak of people from long ago. People who lived, laughed, loved, and suffered. They can't speak themselves but left this artifact to speak for them.
Comment Written 25-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind and uplifting review. I am so glad you liked this poem. I learned a lot when writing it.
Comment from mermaids
Much is said on this blanket, a whole world lives in this poem. Yet the blanket provides much needed warmth and is an integral part of Native American culture. Well done and good luck in thte contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Much is said on this blanket, a whole world lives in this poem. Yet the blanket provides much needed warmth and is an integral part of Native American culture. Well done and good luck in thte contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind and uplifting review. I am so glad you liked this poem. I learned a lot when writing it.
Comment from sgalletti
This was an absolutely lovely piece - and my favorite of the bunch! You have a beautiful rhyming scheme, the rhythm flows nicely and the imagery is superb. Most of all, I am impressed with how you were able to develop a single piece of cloth into something so magical. Good luck in the contest! Sue
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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This was an absolutely lovely piece - and my favorite of the bunch! You have a beautiful rhyming scheme, the rhythm flows nicely and the imagery is superb. Most of all, I am impressed with how you were able to develop a single piece of cloth into something so magical. Good luck in the contest! Sue
Comment Written 24-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind and uplifting review. I am so glad you liked this poem. It is humbling to be awarded six..... thanks again.
Comment from bard owl
This ode is tremendous. The imagery you have woven into your words about the tapestry depicting life of the Native Americans is professional level, you know! Excellent and smoothly entertaining look at a special life style. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings to you, Linda.
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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This ode is tremendous. The imagery you have woven into your words about the tapestry depicting life of the Native Americans is professional level, you know! Excellent and smoothly entertaining look at a special life style. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings to you, Linda.
Comment Written 24-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind and uplifting review. I am so glad you liked this poem. I learned a lot when writing it.
Comment from rama devi
WOW~
Truly an exceptional work. Capture the spirit of the Red tribes and really brings the details and scenes of their lives into focus through the lens of what;s been woven in wool (Great title). Fabulously detailed and finely phrased.
Loved the closing, what a potent close!
Do you speak of the rhythm
of drums, the shuffle
of leather-clad feet,
mournful songs rising
like liquid into night skies --
resonating from cliff to cliff,
then evaporating,
like the dreams of forgotten ancestors.
Took my breath away, that ending!
Speaks volumes.
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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WOW~
Truly an exceptional work. Capture the spirit of the Red tribes and really brings the details and scenes of their lives into focus through the lens of what;s been woven in wool (Great title). Fabulously detailed and finely phrased.
Loved the closing, what a potent close!
Do you speak of the rhythm
of drums, the shuffle
of leather-clad feet,
mournful songs rising
like liquid into night skies --
resonating from cliff to cliff,
then evaporating,
like the dreams of forgotten ancestors.
Took my breath away, that ending!
Speaks volumes.
Comment Written 24-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind and uplifting review. I am so glad you liked this poem. I learned a lot when writing it. I appreciate your enjoyment of the ending...
Comment from Just2Write
This is an excellent poem, Skye - I truly enjoyed the read. But is it an Ode... That is the question. You capture the beauty and grace of the buffalo and plains of the mid-west so beautifully in this poem about a wollen blanket. I was totally captivated by your free verse writing and didn't notice until the end that it doesn't rhyme. Great writing, that is. Rose.
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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This is an excellent poem, Skye - I truly enjoyed the read. But is it an Ode... That is the question. You capture the beauty and grace of the buffalo and plains of the mid-west so beautifully in this poem about a wollen blanket. I was totally captivated by your free verse writing and didn't notice until the end that it doesn't rhyme. Great writing, that is. Rose.
Comment Written 24-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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I researched odes for a long time, and yes, it can be an ode, as there are several styles.
Thanks for the very insightful and thoughtful comments.
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No doubt, I have much to learn. I researched quite a bit before writing one of my own. I am still not clear on the 'Irregular' Ode, and how it differers from Free Verse or Blank Verse. Most of the examples of Irregular Odes that I read were rhymed, but there was one that was not, with no explaination as to any rules of meter. Your poem was excellent though, and if it indeed be an Ode, it deserved the win.
Comment from Amicus
Skye, this is superb. You focus on a tapestry and let your imagination soar as you imagine the times and places this object has been part of. Your use of specifics to evoke scenes from ancient cultural traditions is beautifully done in diction dense and apt. Your imagery is rich and energetic...the whole poem pulsates with rhythms that resonate meaningfully and enhance the poem's "message" about respecting the relics of and acknowledging the foundations of one's ancestry.
This is a wonderful poem to my way of thinking. Thank you for a most enjoyable reading experience.
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Skye, this is superb. You focus on a tapestry and let your imagination soar as you imagine the times and places this object has been part of. Your use of specifics to evoke scenes from ancient cultural traditions is beautifully done in diction dense and apt. Your imagery is rich and energetic...the whole poem pulsates with rhythms that resonate meaningfully and enhance the poem's "message" about respecting the relics of and acknowledging the foundations of one's ancestry.
This is a wonderful poem to my way of thinking. Thank you for a most enjoyable reading experience.
Comment Written 24-May-2009
reply by the author on 25-May-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind and uplifting review. I am so glad you liked this poem. It is humbling to be awarded six..... thanks again.
