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6 total reviews
Comment from babylonia
shelley,
loop poetry, eh? hmmm ... very interesting. looks pretty easy but may not be. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. made me smile.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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shelley,
loop poetry, eh? hmmm ... very interesting. looks pretty easy but may not be. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. made me smile.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 22-May-2009
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harder than you'd think.... the non-rhyming is easier than the rhyme one though! LOL! :)
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you made it look easy but i know its not. i may try it anyway ... some day.
love,
barbara
Comment from Gert sherwood
Ah shelley,
you have this form down pat love the idea of words floating on a cloud.
so now I have to watch for shelley's poetic words moving along within puffy clouds.
Gert
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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Ah shelley,
you have this form down pat love the idea of words floating on a cloud.
so now I have to watch for shelley's poetic words moving along within puffy clouds.
Gert
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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hehehe thankya! :)
Comment from luna
Sorry for the four honey, but I told you it's not as easy as it seems. Look at the words "moon" and "moonlit" - they're not the same. Needs to be revised for the form to be correct. I like your wording, though!
Love,
GM *smile*
REVISED REVIEW: All fixed now. Five stars. You met the challenge well!
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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Sorry for the four honey, but I told you it's not as easy as it seems. Look at the words "moon" and "moonlit" - they're not the same. Needs to be revised for the form to be correct. I like your wording, though!
Love,
GM *smile*
REVISED REVIEW: All fixed now. Five stars. You met the challenge well!
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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okay all fixed! :-)
Comment from rama devi
You're on a roll tonight, Shelley. I love this. So musical and flowing. Wonderfully expressive. Love this form- the loops make spirals make musical cadence and melodic sense!
Bravo. Nothing to change. Good color choices too.
:)
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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You're on a roll tonight, Shelley. I love this. So musical and flowing. Wonderfully expressive. Love this form- the loops make spirals make musical cadence and melodic sense!
Bravo. Nothing to change. Good color choices too.
:)
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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cool! thanx! :)
Comment from BookDaisy
I wasn't familar with this type poetry, but I think I like it. I love the floaty, dreamy feeling your poem gives the reader. It's soft and creative. It's like a combination of sestina and haiku - it tells a story and expresses beauty.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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I wasn't familar with this type poetry, but I think I like it. I love the floaty, dreamy feeling your poem gives the reader. It's soft and creative. It's like a combination of sestina and haiku - it tells a story and expresses beauty.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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thankyathankya :)
Comment from N.C.Dent
You write with elegance and finesse. Your poem was both a pleasure to read and instructive to comprehend as I am inexperienced in this form. I especially enjoyed a different approach to reading this poem. By taking the first word or two of each line, I find another form of elegant poetry within the whole....moonlight writing words unspoken words within, heart opening,words floating. WOW
Best wishes, Nick
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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You write with elegance and finesse. Your poem was both a pleasure to read and instructive to comprehend as I am inexperienced in this form. I especially enjoyed a different approach to reading this poem. By taking the first word or two of each line, I find another form of elegant poetry within the whole....moonlight writing words unspoken words within, heart opening,words floating. WOW
Best wishes, Nick
Comment Written 21-May-2009
reply by the author on 21-May-2009
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cool! thank you so much! :-)
