Comment from Pacinogal

Excellent

Larry, fist of all I love the author's notes.

Secondly this poem is so romantic. I

liked: "Then I pulled the strings,
that held your gown in place
it slid off your tender body,
as a smile came to your face.
and "And from that moment on
the passion never died
our love grew only stronger
as you stayed by my side." BRAVO!!!!! Kathy

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2009

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2009

Yea that is the hot part of the poem :) glad you like it so much.
Larry

reply by Pacinogal on 03-Jun-2009

Me too...glad you wrote it.

Lucky for me.

Kathy

Comment from creativewriterUK

Excellent

Very good Larry, very passionate, This is a poem to make you sit up and wish. It was very easy to read and follow as it flowed so well. The rhyme fell into place perfectly and was almost arousing. In a word, Wow!... Keith

 Comment Written 18-May-2009

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reply by the author on 18-May-2009

Wow indeed I could feel it too and I wrote it :) as some of my work is, this one was an older poem I had written a while back and decided to blow some of the dust off of it and see what people think. I will admit I gave it a small re-write to fix a couple of things, that was draging it down a bit.

By your reaction and a couple of others I say it will be a keeper for my book when I get it together. Thanks as always.
Larry

reply by creativewriterUK on 18-May-2009

You are very welcome Larry, I agree, put it in your book collection. Did you sort out how to creat a book? Keep them coming... Keith.

reply by the author on 18-May-2009

Well I sort of know how to start the book I believe, I just want to make sure if possible that I do not make it available to the public until I am fully ready. I would like to get all the spell checking and puncuation correct in each poem so that the review board will not have that againist me when I try to go for Professional Level Author.

It would be nice to receive that and I guess at that point a person reaching that level is allowed to sell his or her work for member dollars which would be cool. Have you ever done that yet?

Just trying to work out the small details on things like how many poems do I want to include and things like that. Take care and thanks so much for everything .
Larry

reply by creativewriterUK on 18-May-2009

Hi Larry, no I haven't had anything published on Fanstory yet as a full novel. I'm a way off yet, but I hope to get there at some stage. Keep on plodding away slowly and you will get there eventually. Keith.

Comment from Ronni

Excellent

A love as grand as this, which captures a state of
of complete euphoria and mutual enthusiasm for
each others love making; as you in this splendid
poem, is precious and priceless. You two have a
rare gift in each other; and you compliment each
other so resplendintly. Beautiful poem, enchanting
love indeed. Thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 18-May-2009

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reply by the author on 18-May-2009

You are very welcome. As always your reviews are splendid and I love reading them. I hope that my future poetry what ever I may write about, touches you in some way, take care.
Larry

Comment from bmburkevics

Excellent

A Very beautiful poem. Sensual, but not forced into an erotic state, which yields a pleasant appeal. The rhyme adds to this effect complimented by a smooth rhythm that sets the mood for your poem. I do believe I have read another of your works, and as I was impressed with it, I am very pleased to see that your work is of a consistent quality. I hope to stumble upon more of your works and share my thoughts on them.

 Comment Written 18-May-2009

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reply by the author on 18-May-2009

Thank you so much for your kind words, I am so glad that my poetry touches you the way it does.
I have been trying to write my stronger romantic poetry to a point where it does not cross the line into erotica. I see no need to go that direction and most erotica is very distasteful. I feel keeping it on this side of the line so to speak makes the poem better and in some cases makes it more passionate, if I can say it that way.
I hope that you can review more of my work in the future; the only way that I know to guarentee this is to become of fan of mine and request being notified when I write something new. However please understand I am not in the habit of trying to make fans this way it is only a suggestion and totally up to you rather you want to be or not.
I am fairly new here within the last month and just now starting to develope a tiny fan base, I know that it takes quite a while to do this. Take care and again thank you so much.
Larry

Comment from waycool Overthemoon

Excellent

Wow! The images are so strong that I can feel his touch! It's amazing. The art work is not necessary the piece speaks loudly enough, but it does get you in the mood. The flames of passion and those of fire leap out from my screen.
Paulina

 Comment Written 18-May-2009

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reply by the author on 18-May-2009

That is the second WOW I had on this particular poem, my first number one fan said if there was one word it would be WOW.

Well as I mentioned over in the messages I jumped the gun and did not know who you were before now. I am fairly new here within the last month and you are my 3rd fan so far, so that is a good thing :)
The reason why I feel I must have done something right with this poem is because you are the first one to join my fan list after reading one poem.
Anyway as mentioned I will for sure get around to reading your work as well and make comments on it. I am not as big a reader as I am a writer but we will get there, I promise, you take care and be good.
Larry