Comment from creativewriterUK

Excellent

Once again Larry, a lovely poem with wonderful gestures. The rhyming is different, but it flows well either way. I like the sentiments you've included, it comes over so very warm and romantic. Very nice poem... Keith

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

Glad you liked it, I have been on a romantic streek lately. Not that it shows to much. LOL take care
Larry

reply by creativewriterUK on 15-May-2009

I like your romantic streak, it produces some amazing poems, go with it... Keith.

Comment from nora arjuna

Excellent

hi larry, this was such a tender romantic poem. a nice and sweet read for me.

one suggestion:

for no other place in life - i thought you can do without 'for' here.

You can never be [to] close to the one you love. - too (in your notes)

 Comment Written 13-May-2009

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reply by the author on 13-May-2009

Thank you for your kind words. I took your advice and removed the "for" out of that line. It seems to work ok. Take care,.
Larry

Comment from Annelisa

Excellent

What a very lovely and romantic poem. Your words flow beautifully and your love is expressed so well. A pleasure to read! Annelisa

 Comment Written 13-May-2009

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reply by the author on 13-May-2009

Thank you so much for your kind words, take care
Larry

Comment from AlvinTEthington

Excellent

A very nice love poem. There are a few stylistic problems, but nothing major. You tend to use identity rhymes ("you"/"you") and slant rhymes ("time"/"mind") rather than true rhymes ("touch"/"much.") As I said, though, that is a minor problem. Great juxtaposition of picture and poem.

 Comment Written 13-May-2009

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reply by the author on 13-May-2009

Thank you for your very ncie words. Yes I do have a tendency to use as you put it slant rhymes alot and sometimes identity rhymes, but the true rhymes gets in there on my poems as well.
Take care, and thanks so much.
Larry