Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very good story you have penned for the contest. It is very true about the domestic calls. I worked for our local police department for 15 years. Good luck my friend. Hugs, Teri

 Comment Written 16-May-2009

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reply by the author on 16-May-2009

Thank you Teri. I'm glad that I was able to write it within the 100 word guideline. Thanks for your validation and review. - Thesis

Comment from RenieReader

Excellent

Oh, lawsy and good grief. We don't pay law enforcement officers nearly enough for what they have to go through. These are the kind of maniacs who make their job such a menace. Very cleverly written, Thesis. Kudos.

Renie

 Comment Written 16-May-2009

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reply by the author on 16-May-2009

Thank you Renie. I agree. For what they face, it's sometimes not worth the price they have to pay. - Thesis

Comment from babylonia

Excellent

thesis,
first, i love the pic. deputy dog to the rescue.
second, looks like it's pig for supper.
LOL
third, yeah, she has the knife all right.
made me smile and giggle. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. great job. yeah, this would be a worst nightmare.
imagery is excellent.
good luck~
love,
barbara

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

Thanks Barbara. I'm glad it all came together on this one. - Thesis

reply by babylonia on 16-May-2009

it sure did.
:P

Comment from skye

Excellent

This is memorable, and horrible.
Horrific, succinct, and wonderfully crafted.

Your artwork enhances your story.
Very very well done.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

Thanks skye. I'm glad you had those reactions to the story. - Thesis

Comment from pilarblue

Excellent

Oh, this is excellent! I especially love the end, how it's her that ends up finishing him off. Yikes. You did an outstanding job, Thesis! :) Pilar

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

Thanks Pilar. It is pretty gruesome, but it actually fit in 100 words. - Thesis

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

This is so gruesome. I thought that cop was awfuly stupid to walk into a domestic abuse case without backup. I suspect this kind of thing happens. Your writing is excellent. I hope you have good luck in the contest.
Delora

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

Your adrenalin pumps when you hear people scraming and you know weapons are involved. Most times, back-up arrives fast to a domestic, specifically because of this. - Thesis

Comment from Annmuma

Excellent

I think I just read the winning entry. Extremely well done. No spag. Not one wasted word. And very horrifying. I want to get up and turn on the lights and its the middle of the day! Good luck. ann

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

That's a wonderful compliment Ann. I appreciate it. - Thesis

Comment from Anned100

Excellent

WOW. Truly horrifying. I don't know which is scarier, your story or the facts stated in your notes.
I like the twist at the end. Unpredictability adds to the horrific nature of this crime.

Good job!
Good luck in the contest. anned100

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

I agree, unfortunately it's so true. Thanks for your review. - Thesis

Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hi, Thesis
I love the black-humoured gory zaniness of this. I had to re-read the bit to understand the officer had his hands chopped off, but that's just me. Terrific and surprising end. Marmless, or should I say 'handless' fun. LOL
Best wishes, ray xx

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

Thanks Ray. I'm just suprised it all fit into 100 words, LOL. - Thesis

Comment from unidian

Excellent

Great if ghoulish scene! This is an accomplished and evocative entry into a tough contest... at least, I found it tough to do in 100 words! Well done. Let me wish you the best of luck! Unidian

 Comment Written 15-May-2009

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reply by the author on 15-May-2009

Thank you Unidian. I'm glad you found it to be what it is. I appreciate your comments. - Thesis