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Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Springtime Dream"Poems of Love and Romance
6 total reviews
Comment from Ronni
A touching love poem correlating love to the blossoming
of the Springtime season, and their ever blooming and
enraptured love of each other. I loved the phrase:
"Oh let the beauty of springtime
always take us far away
where we can be young and free
forever in this day"
conveying an eternal youth and everlasting love; in
such a enchanting flow and irrepressible memoir.
Wonderful write here Larry; for a very rare and
special kind of love. Inspiring!
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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A touching love poem correlating love to the blossoming
of the Springtime season, and their ever blooming and
enraptured love of each other. I loved the phrase:
"Oh let the beauty of springtime
always take us far away
where we can be young and free
forever in this day"
conveying an eternal youth and everlasting love; in
such a enchanting flow and irrepressible memoir.
Wonderful write here Larry; for a very rare and
special kind of love. Inspiring!
Comment Written 15-May-2009
reply by the author on 15-May-2009
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Thank you again for your kind words I am so glad you like it. I will continue to read your work and respond on some of your work as well. Thanks again, I am glad my words have touched you.
You may like my Poem called "Imagine Poetry" a small poem about the art of poetry. Take care.
Larry
Comment from adewpearl
lovely pure rhymes and near rhyme and flowing cadence - I think your poem is a beautiful complement to the artwork that inspired it - your association of springtime with your love is quite effective. Brooke
reply by the author on 13-May-2009
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lovely pure rhymes and near rhyme and flowing cadence - I think your poem is a beautiful complement to the artwork that inspired it - your association of springtime with your love is quite effective. Brooke
Comment Written 13-May-2009
reply by the author on 13-May-2009
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Thank you so much I am glad you like it. I was thinking of redoing one part but still not sure, take care.
Larry
Comment from creativewriterUK
As always Larry, a great little poem. It flows excellently and is easy to read. The rhyming is perfect and well chosen. The poem compliments the photo perfectly.
I cannot fault it in any way. You just keep getting better. I thought it a very inspired poem. Well done... Keith.
reply by the author on 13-May-2009
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As always Larry, a great little poem. It flows excellently and is easy to read. The rhyming is perfect and well chosen. The poem compliments the photo perfectly.
I cannot fault it in any way. You just keep getting better. I thought it a very inspired poem. Well done... Keith.
Comment Written 13-May-2009
reply by the author on 13-May-2009
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Very nice words from my no.1 fan :-) I had thought of changing a little something but I may not, take care.
Larry
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Hi Larry, you a welcome to the review as always, I wouldn't change... Keith.
Comment from Deejharrington
It's a beautiful expression of love. It could almost be suited to someone who has lost their love. But is remembering and vowing never to forget. No spag/nits. Good job
reply by the author on 13-May-2009
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It's a beautiful expression of love. It could almost be suited to someone who has lost their love. But is remembering and vowing never to forget. No spag/nits. Good job
Comment Written 12-May-2009
reply by the author on 13-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your words I am so glad you like it.
Larry
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Ypu are welcome
Comment from fayesh
The only element of springtime love in this poem seems to be in the first stanza. After that, you deal with abstract terms and very little springtime imagery. Moreover, the second line of the second stanza, "your reflection looks at me" begs the question, "reflected from what?"
errors in usage:
1. feel as though (your) in my soul - s/b you're
2. Oh let the beauty of (the) springtime - delete "the"
reply by the author on 12-May-2009
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The only element of springtime love in this poem seems to be in the first stanza. After that, you deal with abstract terms and very little springtime imagery. Moreover, the second line of the second stanza, "your reflection looks at me" begs the question, "reflected from what?"
errors in usage:
1. feel as though (your) in my soul - s/b you're
2. Oh let the beauty of (the) springtime - delete "the"
Comment Written 12-May-2009
reply by the author on 12-May-2009
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Thank you so much for your review of this poem. I did change the your to you're and removed the word "the".
The Picture I was using for the poem was titled Spring Romance, so I figured I would change my poem to Springtime Dream as it appears in the picuture she may be dreaming or having faraway thoughts. Until I rework it slightly I guess the individual reader will have to use his or her imagination, maybe she is looking in water, standing by a lake ect. But I do get your point. Again thank you.
Larry
Comment from VICTIMEYES
a good piece of some great feelings ... the only thing i noticed is the
I feel as though "your" in my soul
you're
reply by the author on 12-May-2009
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a good piece of some great feelings ... the only thing i noticed is the
I feel as though "your" in my soul
you're
Comment Written 12-May-2009
reply by the author on 12-May-2009
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You are correct on the your I changed it to you're. And I may be making a couple of other small changes not sure yet. Thank you for enjoying this poem.
Larry
