Handmaidens of Aurora
When Angels Paint ~Series23 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
Sounds like you are doubly blessed -- angels all around and a friend like VisionaryPoet to inspire. By all means, shower us with a series of blessings.
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Sounds like you are doubly blessed -- angels all around and a friend like VisionaryPoet to inspire. By all means, shower us with a series of blessings.
Comment Written 14-May-2009
Comment from joan marie
It is a magical poem. I love the artwork it fit perfectly with your words. Sorry you had to be off site so long. I would go nuts. Great write. joan marie
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It is a magical poem. I love the artwork it fit perfectly with your words. Sorry you had to be off site so long. I would go nuts. Great write. joan marie
Comment Written 13-May-2009
Comment from Boomer49
Wonderful, very full of light and wonder. Paints a beautiful picture of the angels painting the aurora and ties the reader into the feeling of the author of the wonder of such a sight.
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Wonderful, very full of light and wonder. Paints a beautiful picture of the angels painting the aurora and ties the reader into the feeling of the author of the wonder of such a sight.
Comment Written 13-May-2009
Comment from rhymer1
Wondrous, both the poem and the Aurora. Sounds like a female name doen't it. I only saw it once just north of Boston, but your painting angels only had white paint that night. I lay down in my back yard and watched it in awe for hours.
Slainte, rhymer1
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Wondrous, both the poem and the Aurora. Sounds like a female name doen't it. I only saw it once just north of Boston, but your painting angels only had white paint that night. I lay down in my back yard and watched it in awe for hours.
Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 12-May-2009
Comment from adewpearl
handmaidens of Aurora's smile - what a beautiful flow to that plus great imagery - one wants to close her eyes and visualize it
I like the irregular rhyming, the flow when read aloud and the
lighthearted tone of this - it is an enchanting concept, and I can well see it as part of a series. Brooke
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handmaidens of Aurora's smile - what a beautiful flow to that plus great imagery - one wants to close her eyes and visualize it
I like the irregular rhyming, the flow when read aloud and the
lighthearted tone of this - it is an enchanting concept, and I can well see it as part of a series. Brooke
Comment Written 12-May-2009
Comment from Crusty
This is a very good poem. It holds the rhythm and the rhyme extremely well, all the way through. It flows smoothy from one stanza to another. And is presented beautifully.
Thanks for sharing it.
Brad...
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This is a very good poem. It holds the rhythm and the rhyme extremely well, all the way through. It flows smoothy from one stanza to another. And is presented beautifully.
Thanks for sharing it.
Brad...
Comment Written 12-May-2009
Comment from Phil Kitom
An excellent poem of rhythmical beauty and full of colour as was your intention. I enjoyed reading it, but I think there appears to be on typo.
The reference to
A most auspicious site I think you meant sight as in vision
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An excellent poem of rhythmical beauty and full of colour as was your intention. I enjoyed reading it, but I think there appears to be on typo.
The reference to
A most auspicious site I think you meant sight as in vision
Comment Written 11-May-2009
Comment from filmoreodragon
This is very beautiful. I love "a paintbrush of prismatic hues just for velour's of night." I think this is an excellent poem evoking the wonders of the colors of the sky.
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This is very beautiful. I love "a paintbrush of prismatic hues just for velour's of night." I think this is an excellent poem evoking the wonders of the colors of the sky.
Comment Written 11-May-2009
Comment from mermaids
This is awesome, I felt so good after reading this. Gives one a good feeling and this poem would be a nice one to frame. Just so well written and I love the idea of angels painting.
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This is awesome, I felt so good after reading this. Gives one a good feeling and this poem would be a nice one to frame. Just so well written and I love the idea of angels painting.
Comment Written 11-May-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Helvi.
Excellent meter til the last 2 lines;
'The blush upon the ribbons ['THAT']
Aurora so demands
This retains the 'da-DUM' and brings in the required 8th syllable to the penultimate line.
A lovely whimsical poem
'A paintbrush of prismatic hues' - although I find 'hue' an overused and irritating word, it works great in this cleverly alliterated line.
Excellent.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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Hi, Helvi.
Excellent meter til the last 2 lines;
'The blush upon the ribbons ['THAT']
Aurora so demands
This retains the 'da-DUM' and brings in the required 8th syllable to the penultimate line.
A lovely whimsical poem
'A paintbrush of prismatic hues' - although I find 'hue' an overused and irritating word, it works great in this cleverly alliterated line.
Excellent.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 11-May-2009
reply by the author on 11-May-2009
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HI Ray,
You know me and meter! To me a pentameter is foot and mouth disease. I tend to stick my poetic foot in my mouth all the time. I geuss, Ill have to pry it out AGAIN! Thanks for catching the error and for your kind words.
Smiles and Hugs, Helvi
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You've done great here, Helvi.
10 syllables per line is 'pentameter'
8 is 'tetrameter'
6 is 'trimeter'
I'm experimenting with mainly 11-11-11-8 (dunno if it has a name, LOL,)
in my current kids fantasy poetry book called 'The Alphabet Spell. The latest 2 chapters are still paying well, and you may like them, should you get a chance. ;-)
Best wishes, ray xx
