Romantic Moments
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Comment from rhymer1
"within this place" - rhyme feels a bit forced here. Then you abandoned rhyme completely in your last stanza. I accept that as your right, within the spirit of poetic license, but it was a urprise. slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 02-May-2009
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"within this place" - rhyme feels a bit forced here. Then you abandoned rhyme completely in your last stanza. I accept that as your right, within the spirit of poetic license, but it was a urprise. slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 02-May-2009
reply by the author on 02-May-2009
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Hello again snd thank you for your comments. I have re-read that line and so far to me it still seems to work ok as it stands now. Taking the word "with" out and just keep "in" seems to shorten it a bit to much for the flow.
As fas as the last stanza goes, as you know every two lines rhyme while more and joy do not exactly rhyme persay they have that certain connection at least with in this poem I feel. And of course man and land do rhyme. I will review it from time to time to see if anything comes to mind that would work better. Thanks so much.
Larry
Comment from Alexander E Poet
very medieval well done,Dear poet, Rich amazing imagery in this poem. a very visual the story of love . good picture selection, I like the inward thinking, Good piece of work, very well done There were no errors. No typos and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next One ,Alexander QQ...
reply by the author on 02-May-2009
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very medieval well done,Dear poet, Rich amazing imagery in this poem. a very visual the story of love . good picture selection, I like the inward thinking, Good piece of work, very well done There were no errors. No typos and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next One ,Alexander QQ...
Comment Written 02-May-2009
reply by the author on 02-May-2009
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Thank you so much, I am glad you really like it. I do not have any more as of yet up there dealing with the Medieval theme but there are many poems posted on my profile.
I have another one that talks about castles and things but I can not get it up until tomorrow. Might be working on a few like that for the future. Take care.
Larry
Comment from Rabianabian
This is an excellent poem. It flowed very nicely, and the rhyming was good. I did not notice any spelling or grammar mistakes. Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 02-May-2009
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This is an excellent poem. It flowed very nicely, and the rhyming was good. I did not notice any spelling or grammar mistakes. Wonderful job.
Comment Written 02-May-2009
reply by the author on 02-May-2009
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Thank you so very much for your kind words. I want to get around and start reading some of the works of the reviewers that have reviewed my work, so hopefully I will get to read yours soon, take care.
Larry
