Comment from Lindsay Martinelli

Excellent

I write songs. This almost flew out like a song. It had a great beat to it. Your syllable count is perfect. Did you plan that? Nice Job 5 stars. :) thanks for sharing

Linzy :)

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2009

thank you for the kind words. No I did not plan it that way just happen I guess. What kind of songs have you wrote? I play around with lyrics myself from time to time, let me know.
Larry

reply by Lindsay Martinelli on 25-Apr-2009

You can listen to my songs here: myspace.com/linzymartinelli :)

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009

Hey Lizzy
Thanks for your myspace web page link. I brought it up and looked it over. Your music is quite good. I also enjoyed looking over some of your pictures, you are a very beautiful young lady.

As mentioned I have dabbled in the music/lyrics area. I guess it is hard not to write poetry without doing some lyric writing from time to time.
I have one song I did quite awhile back about a little girl being born into this world.
Sort of wrote it for a girl I use to work with in the military who had a baby girl. I had one melody that I came up with on the guitar, and later on in life it was changed to a different arangement on the keyboard..
It got put on a CD for some local air play but never went much farther then that.

Wrote another one called "If you only knew the man I am Now" I would like to get that on CD sometime.
I use to have a guitar but do not at this moment, sort of self taught what very few cords I know and shuffle around. I took lessons on the Keyboard when I was younger but never kept it going much at all so my music/insturment playing is just so so.

Been writing poetry off and on for years so I am not half bad with that. Are you on facebook as well. I do more with that then I do Myspace, just wondering?

Being new up here I do not know if there is a way to have like a friends list but if there is I will be happy to add you as a friend. Please keep in touch, love to hear from other poets and lyric writers ect.
sincerely
Larry

reply by Lindsay Martinelli on 25-Apr-2009

Cool, yeah i'm on facebook as well, Linzy Martinelli (Boston MA Network)

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2009

I see your page on facebook on becomeing a fan, is there another page that you have as just being a friend? There are 3 listings coming up under your name. Was not sure if the other two was you or not. Does not appear to be so.

Photos are not clickable but the one says add as friend.that also says NC State so I guess that is a younger girl that goes there not sure about the other one. Let me know.
Larry

Comment from stormwolf2

Good

Hi Larry, I enjoyed the poem very much, it flowed nicely. I just found that the last verse was a little awkward. However I'm still awarding 5 points for the way in which it was written.

I would also suggest that you try and find a picture to match the poem too, it would help compliment it much more.

Best wishes,
Malcolm

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2009

Thank you so very much for your kind words. Being new up here I am trying to get use to it all. Hopefully I will get the hang of it soon.
Larry

reply by stormwolf2 on 24-Apr-2009

It will all fall into place, believe me. If you ever need a helping hand, just ask.

Best wishes,
Malcolm

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2009

Thanks again. I do have a question though, how hard is it to review other people's work really? I did a couple so far but they were not very good .

I know that is one way to earn money to help promote your work, verus buying dollars out right. but I am not sure I am going to be good enough to do it that way.. I got alot of poems I can submit, but it may not do any good to submit them if I can not get them out there for people to read. Your thoughts are appreciated.

Oh and by the way how long have you been a member here? Do you enjoy it alot?

Comment from behindthesmile86

Good

Excellent poem! It really captures your idea of real love, and how you'll know it's true not just by the way it initally makes you feel but by the way it touches your soul.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2009

Thank you for your kind words. I am new here and it is going to take me awhile to understand it all. Take care.
Larry

Comment from luisestable

Average

The problem with this free style poem is its subtle or not so open ambiguity."How you know a first love is real? The poen does not clarify love felt or love given. Is it,How do you know when you really love, or how do you know when you are really loved?
The poem, though anbiguous, accomplishes one thing: How does one know when one is really loved or love? Whichever was you enttention in the poem.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2009

Thank you for your words. I am new here and trying to figured it all out up here. Hope to have a better understanding of it all soon. Take care.
Larry

Comment from rhymer1

Excellent

I appreciate the beauty of your thoughts and how you express them, but I believe that the heart as a center of feeling has become such a cliche it is almost as boring as rhyming love, dove, and heaven above. Sorry. It is a reaction I am driven to express and I hate to be negative about such delightful intent.
slainte, rhymer1

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2009

Thank you for your thoughts on this poem and yes there is some truth in what you are saying. But for me and others when you are speaking of love or romance, or most anything else along these lines, the heart always finds a way to work itself in. Not that you always have to use it but somehow even hidden you can feel it is there. At least for me this is true, again thank you.
Larry

Comment from busybee

Excellent

another great poem.so so very true.i loved my husband from the start, not for his good looks but just as you said,what was in his heart.seems like we instantly connected. thank you for such a great poem

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2009

Thank you for your kind words, If more people would care and love others for what is inside and not the outward appearence, things would be so much better. Take care
Larry

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

A well written love poem that
flowed down the page with stratigically
placed words of rhyme that enhanced
the beautiful piece that you have
written, painting in words that
magical time when two people feel
that certain chemistry, that magic
that is felt in the heart, that it
fills you to the very core.
A well crafted presentation.
Well done

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2009

Thank you very much for all you have said. I am new here for the first time and not sure I have a grip on what all I need to do. But it makes me feel good to know that people like and or love my work, if somebody gets inspired by even a few lines then I guess I have done something right.
Larry