Comment from medicnate

Exceptional

Wow! Powerful chapter. I can't believe your sister would even let him step foot in her house again. My question is, why didn't he ever get put in jail? Sheesh.

Found a couple things.

long enough the(to) take a breath

damn(should this be damned?) surprised

Very good chapter. Great flow. Dialogue is wonderfully written.

~medicnate~

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2009

I personally look at denial as a disease. I sincerely feel there is something physical, biological or psycholocally wrong with someone who refusesd to acknowledge what is right in front of them. Whether it be self esteem, fear, stupidity makes no difference but guilt plays a large too. In my family, we were told over and over until it became a mantra...you must always love your parents...they are your parents you must love the. Needless to say, the brainwshing didn't take with me.

Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells

Excellent

She's barking mad to believe your Dad won't do that again. He molested you. Then Coleen and Mary and now Erica. I would have cut all contact with him. Great write though and I hope to find out what happens next. Keep writing.

April

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009

Thsnk you for your kind review. I sincerley appreciate it.

Comment from Seraphim Delphinium

Excellent

I'm sorry I've been late in reviewing, dear Smurphy. This is another riviting chapter in your book. Although the content is almost beyond belief, the author's tone is so sincere and authentic, there is no doubt as to the reality of the situation(s.) Excellent work! Truly! Seraph

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009

Thak you very much. I value your opinion.

Comment from Lois Delaney

Excellent

I can certainly understand your anger. I would have I don't know what, but I would have done as you did in the end. Cut off all contact. What else can a person do?


I paused only long enough to take a breath

This is not the end, is it?

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2009

Thank you. It looks like you finally caught up! No, this is not the end. My life continues with more ups and downs and a few intesting twists in the plot.

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Excellent

Hi Smurfgirl,

Just reading your story I too feel tremendous anger for your mother. I think above everyone we depend on our mothers to protect us, the fact that she was aware of your father's abuse and did nothing to help you beggars belief.

I don't know how you can possibly get your sister to listen to you when you tell her of the very real danger she is placing her children in.
I believe I would have reacted exactly as you did.


Kindest regards,

Juliette Chamberlain

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009

Thank you for your kind words. Live sometimes throws us a few curves, and somehow we get through it. Again, thank you for your high rating.

Comment from DecrepitOldBag

Excellent

This chapter is very well written indeed. There is one typo I caught:
"The year Richard and I were marriedm.."
How you have not been locked up for murder is beyond my comprehension. Not only have you endured the unthinkable, but also been labeled as a trouble-maker and liar, when your mother and sister must have known perfectly well what was going on. To have your sister ignore your warnings AND then to allow the sick son-of-a-bitch to remain under her roof, after catching him in the act is unbearable! You're obviously a really forgiving soul. I'm afraid in your place, I would have broken all ties. Three years would not be long enough and another universe would not have been far enough away.
Great writing Valerie.
All the best.
Kat

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009

Without giving away and secrets, I have not seen, spoken to, or corresponded with my sisters for many years. Thank you for your kind review and words of encouagement.

Comment from pilarblue

Excellent

Another great, well written chapter. I did notice one minor detail: ""You are insane?" I shouted. ", I'm not sure if you meant to have "Are you insane?". Nice work, as always. :)

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009

Thank you for your kind review and heads-up on using Are you...in place of You are. Thank you.

Comment from laurelp

Excellent

It amazes me the denial in your family. Although I know it common among victims, it just seems so hard to fanthom. Why are people so.....
As always, your writing is excellent. And I found no errors.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009

It is more than common, sadly, it is usually the norm. Even today. Don't try to understand it, there is nothing they or anyone could say that would allow you to understand their behvior. It took my a lifetime to realize this. There is no answer. Thank you for your kind review and high rating.

Comment from Atlantalu

Excellent

1. The year Richard and I were married Mom moved... You might want to put a comma in (married, Mom moved)

The story moved along and a nice powerful ending to the chapter. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009

Thank you for your kind review and helpful suggestion.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

Sexual abuse is such a terrible thing for children to have to endure. I'm sure it causes scars that never go away. I think the culprit is a very sick individual and it would be so much worse if he were the father or grandfather. You are telling this story so well. I can certainly understand your anger.

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 Comment Written 07-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009

Thank you for you kind words. I appreciate your thoughts and comments.