A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Undeniable Proof"Autobiography of abuse
10 total reviews
Comment from medicnate
Uh oh. I can feel the apology coming already. Very sad situation. Mother in denial. This chapter flows along smoothly and envelopes the reader. It has my complete and undeniable attention. I shall read on.
Great work here.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Uh oh. I can feel the apology coming already. Very sad situation. Mother in denial. This chapter flows along smoothly and envelopes the reader. It has my complete and undeniable attention. I shall read on.
Great work here.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 05-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2009
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Thanks for the continued interest. I truly appreciate your kind reviews and high rating.
Comment from Lois Delaney
Thank God for tape recorders. I wished I had thought of putting it on when I should have. But who knows when the time is right. No nits here that I noticed.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Thank God for tape recorders. I wished I had thought of putting it on when I should have. But who knows when the time is right. No nits here that I noticed.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Pure luck. Thank God my father loved to talk! Thanks for your high review.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
This is well written. The dialogue is good, as is the interplay between you and Teresa. As for the content, well...actually my blood runs cold. On the surface, it seems your loving Mum is shocked and enraged and will make it stop. However, as an abused child myself (one without a Mum who gave a damn) I am worried. I MUST read the next chapter. I know how manipulative these abusers are and find myself wondering what excuses he will present your Mum with to persuade her he has done nothing wrong.
You're doing a great job, keep going girl.
All blessings
Kat
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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This is well written. The dialogue is good, as is the interplay between you and Teresa. As for the content, well...actually my blood runs cold. On the surface, it seems your loving Mum is shocked and enraged and will make it stop. However, as an abused child myself (one without a Mum who gave a damn) I am worried. I MUST read the next chapter. I know how manipulative these abusers are and find myself wondering what excuses he will present your Mum with to persuade her he has done nothing wrong.
You're doing a great job, keep going girl.
All blessings
Kat
Comment Written 14-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your comments. Yes, a difficult chapter to write but necessary. I understand your apprehension. I am pleaed you want to read more.
Comment from Stacey Lynne Wells
Good for you! I know that was not an easy thing to do. If this was a fictional piece and I was the one writing it, I would have made the mom walk in while the dad is doing it. But since this is your autobiography, I only hope that eventually happens. Great chapter.
Rachel
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Good for you! I know that was not an easy thing to do. If this was a fictional piece and I was the one writing it, I would have made the mom walk in while the dad is doing it. But since this is your autobiography, I only hope that eventually happens. Great chapter.
Rachel
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciat you comments.
Comment from jodeecee
A couple of months ago I told Mom/,/that/ Daddy was saying disgusting things to me and I wanted her to make him stop."
Again, no problems, great chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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A couple of months ago I told Mom/,/that/ Daddy was saying disgusting things to me and I wanted her to make him stop."
Again, no problems, great chapter.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Again, thank you. I should start calling you Eagle Eye...
Comment from princess_3491
Ok. Too much dialogue. Try to shorten it to about only ten lines of dialogue as it seems there is a very long conversation. I think it is ok.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Ok. Too much dialogue. Try to shorten it to about only ten lines of dialogue as it seems there is a very long conversation. I think it is ok.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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I'll take a look at the chapter and see what I can do.
Comment from valeries26
It was a good piece of work. You put in a few more details, like how Valerie reacted when Teresa told her that their mothe already knows - how she cried out and her body laguage. I felt the chapter went too fast. Oveerall, I do like it.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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It was a good piece of work. You put in a few more details, like how Valerie reacted when Teresa told her that their mothe already knows - how she cried out and her body laguage. I felt the chapter went too fast. Oveerall, I do like it.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you. I sincerely appreciate your comments.
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You are welcome
Comment from adewpearl
I decided to go back and read this chapter - you have a good take on human nature and family dynamics - the mother has her moment of clarity when she hears the indisputable proof and gets angry and decides to have it out with her husband, but then we find out in the next chapter that her resolve all melts when he talks his way out of it - because she wants to be talked out of it. She believes what she needs to believe.
Another well-written and effective chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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I decided to go back and read this chapter - you have a good take on human nature and family dynamics - the mother has her moment of clarity when she hears the indisputable proof and gets angry and decides to have it out with her husband, but then we find out in the next chapter that her resolve all melts when he talks his way out of it - because she wants to be talked out of it. She believes what she needs to believe.
Another well-written and effective chapter.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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You hit the ail on the head! When confronted with something to terrible to believe, all too often the easiest way out is denial....Thank you for your helpful critique.
Comment from jojosug
I can't wait to read what happens next, I REALLY hope he gets his comeuppance! Your story as usual is riveting and holds my attention completely. Well done.
Jo
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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I can't wait to read what happens next, I REALLY hope he gets his comeuppance! Your story as usual is riveting and holds my attention completely. Well done.
Jo
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Glad you like it. Prepare yourself, the worst is yet to come....
Comment from shimmeringlights
Oh, I hope mom really does something about it. Many mothers have known but didn't want to disrupt the family so they turned a blind eye and ignored what was happening. I know my mother did. Anyway, excellent write, only one error that I noticed:
it was sill(still) early in the day
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Oh, I hope mom really does something about it. Many mothers have known but didn't want to disrupt the family so they turned a blind eye and ignored what was happening. I know my mother did. Anyway, excellent write, only one error that I noticed:
it was sill(still) early in the day
Comment Written 12-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your comments. The answer to your question was just posted.
