The Lighter Side of Things
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Mission: Buying Bras"We all need to smile, especially these days.
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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
It reads like you have quite the adventure when you decide to add to your bra collection. Is it the size that has you trying for a low profile? Or are you just very shy? Who needs a man in that department, anyway? That is a terrible distraction. LOL
Ralf
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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It reads like you have quite the adventure when you decide to add to your bra collection. Is it the size that has you trying for a low profile? Or are you just very shy? Who needs a man in that department, anyway? That is a terrible distraction. LOL
Ralf
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Haha, indeed it is Ralf! I used to be very shy if I saw a bloke in those aisles lol, I'd fade away till he left, just like the poem says! Thanks for stopping by my friend xoxoxo
Comment from lyenochka
This was so hilarious! Loved your story poem! Thanks for sharing it again as I wasn't on Fanstory when you first posted this. I am glad you were able fight off "Ted."
One tiny suggestion as the plural doesn't need the apostrophe:
leering lewdly at my bongo's, (bongos)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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This was so hilarious! Loved your story poem! Thanks for sharing it again as I wasn't on Fanstory when you first posted this. I am glad you were able fight off "Ted."
One tiny suggestion as the plural doesn't need the apostrophe:
leering lewdly at my bongo's, (bongos)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thanks lyenocha, glad you got a laugh out of this! And thanks for pointing out that nit, i have a nasty habit of doing that!
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It might not have even been you! Autocorrect loves to put those darn apostrophes where they don't belong!
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Ah yes...Mr Auto Correct Never Wrong lol
Comment from LisaMay
I hear your pain! You had me chuckling along with each stanza here as your mission is put to the test. Just like you I hate hate hate buying a new bra. I liked seeing that old familiar Aussie term "boulder holders".
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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I hear your pain! You had me chuckling along with each stanza here as your mission is put to the test. Just like you I hate hate hate buying a new bra. I liked seeing that old familiar Aussie term "boulder holders".
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Hey, good to "see" you LisaMay! Thanks for your review. Ah bras soon solved my bra buying trauma, but boy, the memory is still fresh in my mind lol!
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i checked out what an ah bra was and have seen that it looks very comfortable.
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They surely are! But good quality ones are key. Some are not so good, which results in little support. I love them personally, and I ain't little, as my poem shows lol!
Comment from Boogienights
Hahahahaha...this is hilarious because my daughters and I can relate. We are all most generously endowed and find it hard to find a good fit. I laughed out loud. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Hahahahaha...this is hilarious because my daughters and I can relate. We are all most generously endowed and find it hard to find a good fit. I laughed out loud. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much Boogienights, glad you got a giggle out of it, and could relate lol!
Comment from equestrik
This is so hilarious! You have written this well and have certainly caused great giggles and laughter as I read. I have never had this issue and do not envy those who do. Love the write.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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This is so hilarious! You have written this well and have certainly caused great giggles and laughter as I read. I have never had this issue and do not envy those who do. Love the write.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much equestrik, it ain't no fun, trust me!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!!! Oh my goodness -- this was soooo what the doctor ordered today: who doesn't need a reason to laugh at life midst this chaos! ;) Thanx so much for the chuckles and the grins! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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LOL!!! Oh my goodness -- this was soooo what the doctor ordered today: who doesn't need a reason to laugh at life midst this chaos! ;) Thanx so much for the chuckles and the grins! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this Yvette, and that it caused chuckles and grins! Thanks for your review!
Comment from Chelle_GH
This was really an excellent story in a poetic format. It was fun to read, incredible & amazing sense of humor. No wonder it is classified as an ALL TIME BEST. Well deserved!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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This was really an excellent story in a poetic format. It was fun to read, incredible & amazing sense of humor. No wonder it is classified as an ALL TIME BEST. Well deserved!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2020
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Thanks Chelle GH, for your review and kind comments, glad you got a smile out of it xox
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The Mission: Buying Bras
by Gypsymooncat
Hello, Gypsy,
Cool and funny poem about bras. You have a good sense of humor. The rhyme and near rhyme are pretty good. Well done.
gypsy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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The Mission: Buying Bras
by Gypsymooncat
Hello, Gypsy,
Cool and funny poem about bras. You have a good sense of humor. The rhyme and near rhyme are pretty good. Well done.
gypsy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thanks Gypsy, glad you liked it xo
Comment from Michele Harber
Thank you for the best laugh I've had in a while. You have a wonderful sense of humor, and I got a kick out of the various ways you found to describe your "endowment." I enjoy story poems, and this definitely fits the bill. Turning what could have been a generalized tale of bra-buying woe into what happened the day you went bra shopping served you well and gave you lots of areas for humor, on which you fully capitalized.
In general your rhymes work well, although I do wonder why you used mid-line rhymes in your first verse and nowhere else. Mid-line rhymes in the first verse set up an expectation for more further on. As the rest of the poem worked very well without the mid-line rhymes, you might want to remove them from the first verse as well, for consistency. Of course, that's just my humble opinion. Overall, I enjoyed your poem very much and definitely laughed out loud.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the best laugh I've had in a while. You have a wonderful sense of humor, and I got a kick out of the various ways you found to describe your "endowment." I enjoy story poems, and this definitely fits the bill. Turning what could have been a generalized tale of bra-buying woe into what happened the day you went bra shopping served you well and gave you lots of areas for humor, on which you fully capitalized.
In general your rhymes work well, although I do wonder why you used mid-line rhymes in your first verse and nowhere else. Mid-line rhymes in the first verse set up an expectation for more further on. As the rest of the poem worked very well without the mid-line rhymes, you might want to remove them from the first verse as well, for consistency. Of course, that's just my humble opinion. Overall, I enjoyed your poem very much and definitely laughed out loud.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your comments my friend. I took on board your suggestion about internal rhymes in that first stanza, and made changes. Glad you enjoyed the "abridged" version of this poem, and appreciate the constructive help you offered. I'm a bit thrilled that it made you laugh out loud lol! xoxo
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I'm glad I was able to help, but check your first line for one very fitting (at least if you're Madonna) typo. No matter how many times I read it, I still have to smile at your "humpback whales" line.
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Haha, I laughed out loud when I saw that! Cone.....ah yes, strike a pose, there's nothing to it lolol! Thanks for POINTING that out **GRIN**
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They used to scare me. I had visions of being impaled!
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I avoided them like the plague, thus avoiding injury to me, and possible murder of others lol
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I don't even wear pointy-toed shoes, let alone pointy anything else.
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I, on the other hand, have been known to wear the odd pointy hat. Just ask the kids when I took their phones off them lol.
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I spent most of my daughter?s younger years as the self-proclaimed ?Monster Mommy? for using the most vile word in the English language on her regularly: ?No.?
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The dirtiest word I used on Pete was WALK when he wanted a lift somewhere he could walk to lol
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I got called Godzilla, too, for goodness knows what haha
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fun poem about going to shop for a bra that fits comfortable enough to wear for the whole day in any weather conditions cold it hot it must fit well.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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A very well-written fun poem about going to shop for a bra that fits comfortable enough to wear for the whole day in any weather conditions cold it hot it must fit well.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Oh yes, must fit! Lol, thanks Sandra xoxo
